VN Ren'Py The Singer [v0.75 Part 2] [IntensiveCareGames]

[yakargi]

Pool party at Thomas' house...
Note: I haven't started doing this scene yet. The location and the clothes may change.

 

[SamualHand]

more Angel please!

 

[Zara Scarlet]

Only if the MC is a man whore. Then it's open relationship. I'm not going to whoreshame neither Ria nor the MC. The more lewdscenes the merrier!

Is Ted really the MC? I know the Dev claims he is in the overview, but the game doesn't play like he's the MC. Ria is the title character and virtually all the influential choices beyond a certain point relate to her. After choosing to join the cheating/love paths, none of Ted's choices affect Ria again. If he really was the MC, then the choices you make for him, should be the important ones in the game, and they just haven't been for a long while now. He has become a secondary character, and the MC is now Ria. You can say that Ted is the MC, but that doesn't make it so, if everything else in the game suggests otherwise.

They're obviously not in an open relationship. Because that can only begin when both partners agree for it to happen, and nothing remotely like that has occurred. As things stand any sex that either Ria or Ted have with other characters, is cheating. Even if the game tries to insinuate that Ted playing around with women, behind Ria's back, is somehow not cheating. So when Lily gives Ted a blowjob in the bathroom, at the beginning of the game, that is actually cheating, regardless of what the game would have us believe.

 

[Zara Scarlet]

Soon I'm going to fix this problem once and for all.
A friend of mine who lived in America for six years has started working.
Starting from the beginning, gradually the grammar will change completely.

To be quite honest, I don't think it's that bad. There are sentences her and there that don't make sense, and occasionally you've used the wrong words. But I think the vast majority of your writing is ok. There are loads and loads of games, where it's far worse than yours, and I think for someone who doesn't speak English as a first language, you've done a reasonably good job.

So yeah, if you can get someone in to help and make it better. Then by all means do that. But I don't think it's as big an issue, as the commenter above suggested.

 

[Zara Scarlet]

Please read the "Developer Notes" on the first page.

Beyond a certain point, this is no longer the case. After you've chosen for Ted to either visit Lizzy or go home, and thus put the game on either the Cheating or Love paths, subsequent choices for him, don't affect her in any meaningful way. And even if you make the love choice, Ted can't stop her from becoming a cheating slut. Only choices the player makes for her determine that. It doesn't matter whether Ted is as loyal as he can be, or he's a total bastard. Ultimately Ria becoming a cheating slut is nothing to do with him at all. She claims to Grayson, that she only cheats on Ted out of revenge for him cheating on her first. But she can cheat on him, even if she doesn't find out about Ted's affairs. She does it primarily for her own reasons

 

[Zara Scarlet]

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The stats page says Love path and Ria is a cheating bitch!

Well if she cheated, then of course she must be a cheating bitch. The only thing I don't get, is the insinuation that Ted himself is not cheating on this route, when he obviously is. It doesn't matter what choices you make for Ted, he always cheats on Ria. The only difference is the degree to which he cheats.

Maybe the love path, will eventually lead to the possibility of an open relationship, and in that instance Ria will stop being a cheating bitch?

 

[Zara Scarlet]

Regardless, of my criticisms about some parts of this game. It continues to deliver some incredibly hot sex scenes on the cheating path. Ultimately, I went with the Boutique scene, but I could have gone with Carl's scene which was equally as good. I came to this late, but it's now one of my favourite games in the genre, and I'm highly anticipating the next update.

One thing I don't understand, is why Daniel doesn't have a place in the stats. He's had three sex scenes now, so surely that qualifies him as a character important enough to feature there?

 

[yakargi]

Regardless, of my criticisms about some parts of this game. It continues to deliver some incredibly hot sex scenes on the cheating path. Ultimately, I went with the Boutique scene, but I could have gone with Carl's scene which was equally as good. I came to this late, but it's now one of my favourite games in the genre, and I'm highly anticipating the next update.

One thing I don't understand, is why Daniel doesn't have a place in the stats. He's had three sex scenes now, so surely that qualifies him as a character important enough to feature there?

I made a change in the stats menu and it caused some inconsistencies. This will be fixed in the next update.

 

[alyssssssssss]

I still don't understand why the game had to have an engaged male MC, if in the end they both cheat and don't care what the other does, in my opinion just Ria as MFC was enough, the two don't look for each other, they cheat on each other, they have separate lives like going out to dinner, the only thing, they sometimes live in the same house.

 

[yakargi]

I still don't understand why the game had to have an engaged male MC, if in the end they both cheat and don't care what the other does, in my opinion just Ria as MFC was enough, the two don't look for each other, they cheat on each other, they have separate lives like going out to dinner, the only thing, they sometimes live in the same house.

Because that's how I want the game to be! DO YOU UNDERSTAND!
Now! Go and play another game!

 

[exazubi]

I still don't understand why the game had to have an engaged male MC, if in the end they both cheat and don't care what the other does, in my opinion just Ria as MFC was enough, the two don't look for each other, they cheat on each other, they have separate lives like going out to dinner, the only thing, they sometimes live in the same house.

The two behave exactly as we decide with the given options. You simply belong to the faction that basically expects to be the only predator in the game who gets everything. In this game this expectation is not fulfilled. The developer explained to you. Now live with it

 

[exazubi]

Is Ted really the MC?

No and yes. The game it tagges: male MC, female MC. There ale 2 MCs. Got it?

 

[Zara Scarlet]

No and yes. The game it tagges: male MC, female MC. There ale 2 MCs. Got it?

Wrong. In the Overview it states:

'And, who are you? You are Ria's boyfriend.'

That says Ted is supposed to be the MC. Now if the Dev had since changed it, so Ria was also the MC on an equal footing with Ted, why would the overview still have that in it? If Ria was supposed to be an MC as you claim, the overview would state that you play as both Ria's boyfriend and Ria herself. But it doesn't.

As I've said before, Ted does not affect Ria in any meaningful way beyond the choice to enter the Love or Cheating paths. It doesn't matter whether you play Ted as being loyal or a bastard, he cant influence Ria's decision to cheat on him, if you want her to do that. Which contradicts what the Dev claims in the Developer's Notes. And since this game is basically about Ria becoming a Singer, and what she's prepared to do to achieve that. Essentially from that moment, Ted is relegated to a secondary protagonist. You can still make decisions for him, but his choices no longer change anything for Ria. From that moment on she is the MC, because all the important choices that affect her direction within the game are hers alone. And since she's the title character, that means she's making all the running.

Personally, I'm quite happy for her to be the MC. Ted's philandering content is ok, but it's not really what I'm here for. My quibble, is that the game doesn't follow the path that is set out in the Overview and the Developer's Notes. I think it should be amended to reflect the game as it's become. It gives entirely the wrong impression, that you're playing this game mainly from Ted's POV, which is why I initially gave this game a wide berth, since I prefer to play mainly as a female character.

 

[Zara Scarlet]

I still don't understand why the game had to have an engaged male MC, if in the end they both cheat and don't care what the other does, in my opinion just Ria as MFC was enough, the two don't look for each other, they cheat on each other, they have separate lives like going out to dinner, the only thing, they sometimes live in the same house.

They're not actually engaged, they're just living together. But if they weren't in a relationship, then the cheating path wouldn't make any sense. The game is about Ria's desire to become a professional singer, and the compromises she has to make, to become a star. Plus, she's being deviously manipulated by Carl to become sluttier, so she can convince Promoters like Thomas to help her get to the top. And all of this has consequences for her relationship with Ted. That's what the games about, and if they're not together, it would just be meaningless.

I guess you don't like games with cheating content. Unfortunately, that's an essential part of this one. Because you can't have a cheating path, without cheating. Despite cheating on each other, both characters still love each other, and I'd like to think there'll still be a way for them to stay together ( via an open relationship)? But I imagine it will be a rocky road to get there.

I suppose also them splitting up might become an option as well, or if you have them remain mostly loyal on the Love Path, they could still end up having a conventional relationship?

 

[single_guy_from_au]

Pool party at Thomas' house...
Note: I haven't started doing this scene yet. The location and the clothes may change.

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Now we know where the First Secret Party will be.

The only alarming thing that I just noticed - the ladies still had their panties on!?

 

[yakargi]

Now we know where the First Secret Party will be.

The only alarming thing that I just noticed - the ladies still had their panties on!?

I did that so I could publish it publicly on Patreon.

 

[yakargi]

Scene trials from Karma Project...

 

[single_guy_from_au]

Scene trials from Karma Project...

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Karma looks sexy (of course, not as sexy as Ria, but still she looks very good) - I am still thinking about this tattoo "Ria forever!"

Just a few brief questions about Karma:

• Is she going to be single (or she has boyfriend or many partners, etc)?
• Is it a corruption game (or adventure or something else)?
• And most importantly - are there any sex scenes planned (or it will be a pure adventure game - like classical Lara Croft games from EA)?

 

[yakargi]

Karma looks sexy (of course, not as sexy as Ria, but still she looks very good).

Just a few brief questions about Karma:

• Is she going to be single (or she has boyfriend or many partners, etc)?
• Is it a corruption game (or adventure or something else)?
• And most importantly - are there any sex scenes planned (or it will be a pure adventure game - like classical Lara Croft games from EA)?

I'll do it again as a visual novel.
The MC will be a female character.
Of course there will be sex scenes!
There are going to be men around her, but she is going to use them to get to her goal.
I'm planning lots of animated fight scenes.

 

[single_guy_from_au]

I'll do it again as a visual novel.
The MC will be a female character.
Of course there will be sex scenes!
There are going to be men around her, but she is going to use them to get to her goal.
I'm planning lots of animated fight scenes.

So in a way, she will be like a female version of James Bond (maybe with the code name something like - "009 and a half").

Wait - I just realize something: Karma looks like an older/younger sister of Ria (a little bit) - does it mean Ria will be in this game too?!