Hey, if you're still looking to refine the mod, I'd like to make a suggestion that in either the Voyeur or NTR Paths, the women's reaction should be made more
ambiguous. As it stands now, the reactions are pretty much identical - they clearly enjoy it - with the differentiator lying solely with the MC's reaction.
Point being, when they're screaming "Harder," "OMG Yes!" "Let's do it again" and the like in pretty much all the scenes, the secretly enjoying it/don't want to admit it part goes completely out the window and jumps directly to "not secret at all/want to shout it to everyone within earshot territory" without passing "Go". What I propose is that in
one of the paths the "don't want to admit it" flavor be retained.
IMO, having the MC have to read between the lines a bit and thinking "Is she actually enjoying this?" (rather than "Bitch is enjoying this. Mom is such a cum slut" every time) can make scenes a lot hotter.
I have mentioned this before in the thread, I'm pretty much always tweaking and refining the writing.
When I first created the mod it wasn't anything really ambitious. I just wanted to clean up the overall grammar without losing the feel of what the game originally was. I would changing the a word here and there, but it was nothing profound. Eventually I decided to change the girls dialogue into two paths. One where they "not-so-secretly" like it (original form) and another where they were truly against it, but were stuck in a dangerous situation. At the time the MC's reaction was tied to the girl's reactions. So if they liked it, so did he. If they didn't, he didn't either.
It was then I mentioned what I doing on the main game's thread and some people showed some interest in playing it, leading to the first release of the mod.
Afterwards, I changed things up by creating an option for the MC to like or dislike NTR on either path for the girls. Then suggestions came in for more paths and I came up with other ideas and eventual the mod found it's way to it's current form, the "Darker Paths" and "Twisted" options for the Love/Corruption scenes.
The Darker Paths are now like this.
Darker Paths:
- Girls like it - Same dialogue for the girls in both paths below
- MC likes it - Voyeur
- MC doesn't like it - NTR
- Girls don't like it - Same dialogue for the girls in both paths below
- MC likes it - Sadist
- MC doesn't like it - Revenge
At the moment the mod is approaching three times the lines of dialogue with the different options available, compared to the original game. At first I didn't want to change the overall feel saddog had in the game, so I kept the new dialogue pretty close to the original, just changing the context or tone of the scenes to fit the different paths. Overtime I started taking more liberties in certain scenes but I found that I would bounce back and forth between original flavor dialogue and something different.
This has created inconsistencies in how each girl feels at time and in style of writing, some of which being mostly original script with just some simple grammar changes and other times it's much more my personal style.
I am slowly working on cleaning up these inconsistencies and improving the quality of writing overall. There are some things I'm still deciding on where I want to go with them. Such as the use of phonetic moans. I have considered using a more narrative form where something like
Hnng... would be
Nicole bits down on her lower lip and tries to hold back a deeply sensual moan without much success. Or something more of a mixture like this,
Nicole softly whimpers as you enter her, "Ohhh... god yes..." which makes you even more determined to make her yours alone. But to do a huge shift in what is currently there will take quite a bit of time.
So while
I absolutely agree with your suggestions, I don't know if I'll get time to do a sweeping change to the whole mod anytime soon. So I will probably be choosing a different scene or two with each update and start incorporating the many great suggestions given here, such as yours. As well as adding writing improvements I've garnered from my own writing practice into the mod as I can.
Eventually, I want to add things like actually plot progression and resolution, interaction scenes between the MC and the girls to build more of a relationship with each of them, and cleaning up the reactions for the girls to better reflect their experiences and the scenes already in the game, which would help address the issues
numanumani's mentioned as well.
I've also toyed with the idea of a prologue chapter where you see how they got into this mess while the MC was studying abroad (I have had this suggested to me a couple times as well, so I think others would be interested in seeing something along those lines.)
I want to see where Saddog goes with the original game too and what assets I'll have to play with from that end.
I like this game a lot and I am really enjoying playing around in it's world. I see even more coming from the mod after the games conclusion as I will know what it actually covers and where I need to add more.
Anyways, sorry for the wall of text.
TL;DR - Great suggestions and I hope to incorporate suggestions like this more as I continue to improve the mod.