This is my second time checking out this game, and... Well, I am not happy.
To start with something positive; there aren't a lot of misspellings. A few that I did notice are brake -> break, tho -> though, women -> woman.
Unfortunately, that's the best thing I can say about the script. It seems to have been written by somebody who fucking HATES commas. And there are quite a few problems involving player choice. Let me explain:
When Anna asks the MC to go on a coffee date with Gwen, saying "I don't know" and then "No" will result in MC reminiscing about a date that didn't take place before bed.
When Blaire tries to blackmail the MC, you can refuse her and leave the bathroom, but the game just plays the bathroom scene anyway.
Finally, the player has the option to ask Lea for her name, and not doing that will leave her namebox with question marks. But when she comes over to MC after class, the narration still mentions her by name, which seems weird.
Now, those were the problems with the choices you can make. But there is one more problem I have related to the lack of choice. Lola's unsolicited blowjob in class when anyone could just turn around and see what's happening is, of course, an incredibly stupid move on her part. And clearly she doesn't take the MC's attempt at stopping her (if the player so chooses) seriously...
Forced sex scenes are a pet peeve of mine, and most of the time I would just shut the game down and never look at it again. I stuck it out this time because I was already gonna write something here, and figured I should play the rest for that purpose. Scenes like this are one very easy way to lose the interest of some people, and it doesn't help that the situation is not only forced, but also pretty absurd.
And lastly, the i-patch seems to also have some shortcomings. The MC's proclivity to call his moms "mother" in a fairly informal-speaking family seems weird. "Mom" would be much more natural. Plus, always spelling "mother" in lowercase is not quite right, either. That can also be applied to how the siblings call each other.
(v0.4)
