VN Ren'Py Abandoned Torrid Affairs [v0.01] [NoesisAndNoema]

[NoesisAndNoema]

But... but... but...
I want it in my
butt butt butt...

I am sure it will be in the LEWD PATCHER section... I have the parts, just not the will...

@NoesisAndNoema oh I see,will wait for incest patch to arrive first before playing and well good luck with ur own first game.

It will be in the LEWD PATCHER section... I have the will, just not the desire to part with earnings...


Okay, going back to wrapping-up the introduction artwork and some visual style tweaks. The longer version should be ready in a few days.

 

[theonlyondgreat]

Just moved to game section and already hot topic. I really like your art. Go one. Im shure this will be one of the greatest game we ever have seen on this forum.

 

[WBWB]

I think the incest tag should be added only when the patch becomes available to avoid confusion. Since it's going to involve rewriting the story to accommodate the incest, I'm wondering if there should be a separate thread for that mod as if it was a different game because it will be confusing to have both contexts in the same thread.

 

[NoesisAndNoema]

I think the incest tag should be added only when the patch becomes available to avoid confusion. Since it's going to involve rewriting the story to accommodate the incest, I'm wondering if there should be a separate thread for that mod as if it was a different game because it will be confusing to have both contexts in the same thread.

This is a three step process, to avoid confusion. (Which the mods are assisting with.)
1: Create the "Game", "Torrid Affairs" thread. (Done, YOU are HERE!)
2: Kill-off the "MOD", "Torrid Affairs, A Big-Brother Conversion" thread. (In the process now.)
3: Let the modders of "Torrid Affairs", the game, be created in the MOD section.(Incest mod, NTR mod, Funari mod, etc...)

I was finding it personally unfair, that my thread in the MOD section, which was later changed into a full-game, was bumping-down some threads. There was a lot of activity there, and the evolution of the game, from a mod, was a bit confusing.

Now, it is clear as day... This is a game. No borrowed artwork or content. 100% original. (As original as any sex-story can be. It's all been done before. )

 

[dspeed]

Congratulations on your first release @NoesisAndNoema. Looking forward to see your game develop!

 

[Roman DeVil]

...even if it's not a BB conversion anymore (which would have been very interesting to see, at least as a concept), I think I will give your game a "GO-GO-GO!" beyond any doubt! The description, moreover, is really tempting!
Best of luck, N&N...

 

[♩♪♫ ŤЦ尺尺ØЛ ♫♪♩]

my dick gone limp...no incest :FeelsBadMan: cool art tho:tf:

 

[NoesisAndNoema]

...even if it's not a BB conversion anymore (which would have been very interesting to see, at least as a concept), I think I will give your game a "GO-GO-GO!" beyond any doubt! The description, moreover, is really tempting!
Best of luck, N&N...

I have not entirely abandoned that project... I may, at a later date, rebirth that, for nostalgia. (But I will return it to being an actual "conversion", at that point. Just adding more "events" and cleaning-up the story-concept. No promises there. I am 200% dedicated, and invested, in this game now.)

 

[h3avenw0rd]

Is it just me or were there 0 choices in this version?

The story honestly lost me before I got to the other characters, there was a lot of exposition at the start and the eye rolling got a bit excessive for me. I'm in the camp where if something can't be explained, don't bring it up or dwell on it.

The multiple panels expressing different things (speech, thoughts, action) are appreciated but personally would like a more unified appearance to them (panel size, font style & size).

I like the potential for the VN(game?), but it's not holding my attention at the moment with the interactions. Will be keeping an eye on this and see where it goes.

 

[a1fox3]

Not much to it, though I so far like the intro and I can already see playing the white knight in this game.

Can't wait for the update to come out.

 

[DanMachiFan]

I can already see playing the white knight in this game.

Me too. Never seen a MC closing the door instead of spying on a naked girl.
About the intro, I liked it. Good renders, good writing and Mira and Lana are beautifully done.
A very promising start. Thanks!

 

[moudy]

This game has alot of potential.
Looking forward to more content and see what choices will be available.

 

[DeltaDragon]

Soooooo no longer a big brother conversion??? was looking forward to that guess I waited for nothing

 

[Deleted member 24612]

I will try to add a list... but it is going to be big, or vague...
YES: Sex, drugs and strong language
YES: Solo, FF, FFF, FFFF, MF, MFF, MFFF, MFFFF, MFM, MFFM, MFFFFM...
YES: Corruption, Voyeurism, Exhibitionism, Bondage, Master/Slave, Domination, Tabooness

It would be shorter to say what isn't going to be in there...
NO: Scat, rape, watersports/pee, snuff, underage
NO: Incest (handled by mods, already in development)
NO: "Chicks with dicks", or "Guys with tits", or "Hermaphrodites"
NO: Male/Male content (I just don't know how to write that, or have a desire to create it.)

Should I add something like that, as the "Content".

other than MFM, MFFM, MFFFFM contents i will be in my top games to play ,well i will assume that my choices in the game will avoid the my disliked contents

 

[NoesisAndNoema]

Soooooo no longer a big brother conversion??? was looking forward to that guess I waited for nothing

You didn't wait for nothing... just something-else.

You will still feel a strong sense of BB among the works. Just not that oddball twisted story. I prefer more reality. Nothing felt real in that game, at all. It almost felt like a joke. Not unlike most of the games I have played so far. Written like a typical bad porn.

HIM "I have a package for you lady..."
HER "Oh, I see you have a few packages, are they both for me?"
HIM "Yea, wanna fuck!"
HER "Okay, hold-on, let me turn-on all the cameras I have in the house, so we can stream this, live."
HIM "Sure, because I just happen to have a 13-inch cock, and you are already as wet as a salted slug. Do you mind if I invite my black friend, he's just waiting out in the van?"
HER "Sure, I love having sex with multiple strangers, live, on the web!"
HIM "Next time I'll bring my wife, is that cool?"
HER "Oh yes, I've never been with a woman, but I can't resist the thought of another unmet-stranger joining to suck on my swollen clit! I can't imagine my luck being this good when I opened the door just now. This is everything I wanted today!"
HIM "I know... Me too... This never happens to me."
HER "Oh, I hope you don't mind that I am a virgin."
HIM "Well, I hope you don't mind that I cum like an infected horse."
HER "I don't want you to spill any jizz on the new floors. I guess that I'll have to swallow it all..."
HIM "Wait, can I fuck your face too? I love doing that!"
HER "Oh, yes, I hoped you would ask!"
HIM "Hold-on, you need to sign this first..."
HER "For the package?"
HIM "No, it's a death-waiver... Because I'm going to fuck your brains out!"

 

[NoesisAndNoema]

I will assume that my choices in the game will avoid the my disliked contents

Much can be avoided. You are not expected to do more than SOME of the interactions. But, you must do interactions, with something/someone, to progress. It is like a 1-2-3 system, with bonus 4-5-6 content... You need to do 1-2-3 with everyone important, but not 4-5-6 with those same people. If that makes sense.

 

[Zippity]

I decided to give this short introduction demo a try... The visuals themselves are crisp and clean looking, with high resolution models... But some don't look like they are adults... The story premise itself has a lot of holes in it, as I don't think the developers did their homework on how the Military justice system works, or how the foreign exchange program in the US works (by law)... The story is told decently, and it does hint that the main game may involve a grind system or perhaps a limited navigation/interaction system... For now this is just a short introduction to the main visual novel/game, with no choices to be made... It does appear as though the concepts being used are the authors attempts to get around the Family Sex restrictions that many patron based websites are starting the strictly enforce... Just wish they did their research first, as the immersion will take some big hits for some readers... I went ahead and posted my review...

 

[kiteares]

Let me prefix this post by saying if it can be taken as opinion, please do so, I have posted it in that spirit with the aim of being constructive. I have posted bearing in mind the final panel starting with "This is where the test-demo stops... this is NOT a release version." So I take it as very much a 1st look for us at the 2nd draft of this. And TBH with everything that @NoesisAndNoema has been saying and a >60Mb D/L I didn't expect too much.
Excuse the long arsed post, but people that have read me may have noticed that the more I like a game, the more I write. I do have a TL;DR at the bottom starting “Overall”.

If 2sleep in the master bed, 1 girl in spare1 and 1 in spare 2.... and 1person in the guest bed.
There is 1person without a bed. ( ' - ')

Looking through the characters you can see the influence behind this story, if you had not already seen the 1st draft of TA. In that the aunt sleeps on the sofa and around the house as the story progresses.
With the known entities it works. Mum and dad in master, Becka in spare 1, Lana in spare 2 and MC in guest room. But hey, it’s fiction, Noesis could add a 2nd floor or basement….get the builders in for this and a whole new update…

It will be in the LEWD PATCHER section...

You cannot know that as you cannot have anything to do with the mod…but I expect if the demand is there a mod will appear.

Is it just me or were there 0 choices in this version?

You could argue you have a few choices..."play" or not there were 0 choices within this.

The story honestly lost me before I got to the other characters, there was a lot of exposition at the start and the eye rolling got a bit excessive for me. I'm in the camp where if something can't be explained, don't bring it up or dwell on it.

Agree with this the intro part did seem overly involved and convoluted.
"So here I am, by order of a military court, on the plane on the way back to my begrudging foster parents, Mira and Dave.
I fucked up again, I thought turning 18* and joining the army would get me out of the foster loop, see the world blah blah. I didn't think a prank would hurt...the CO and army thought otherwise. Now I'm under house arrest**."
The sislil and sisbig and mom and dad (I've looked at the file names)*** can be introduced as they are introduced.
* It's all a bit vague about if he is 18 yet or not with the mention of being 17. This rolls onto Lana too as MC graduated a year ago, making her 17 maybe even 16?
** Sorry but the set up is horrid. A military crime would end up with a military punishment including extra work, military prison and/or dishonourable discharge. But I doubt they would have any say on a civilian punishment. Also house arrest is often a pre-trial bail condition rather than a specific punishment…grounded until he can find work and can’t find a job because of his record I can get. But then this conflicts with the MC being 18 and fostered, the state don’t deal with adult foster kids and the foster parents have no obligation. Sorry, it’s a bit like a woollen jumper, pull on a loose thread and…
*** Reading what I have about Patreon, file names showing relationships would be enough to suspend your account. Better to change it now before it becomes too much work.

The multiple panels expressing different things (speech, thoughts, action) are appreciated but personally would like a more unified appearance to them (panel size, font style & size).

I agree with this too. The change to a different panel and font for narrator parts weren’t so easy on my old eyes. Once I understood it, the clouds for thoughts were a nice idea, but distracting to start with and not really needed as the italics told me it was a thought. Another nice touch was the colour flash behind the avatars, but again, the name and avatar told me what I needed to know.
Also the ‘H’ key was not working for me, is it a glitch at my end or done on purpose?

Overall I think this shows a lot of promise but @NoesisAndNoema needs to be careful not to overstretch.
Renders are looking good, having a unique house is good and it has come together nicely and I think it’s great to be pushing boundaries.
But they need to be careful not to start doing daft or illogical stuff to keep pushing…in TV I believe it’s called jumping the shark, does the same phrase get used for games?
There is some stuff that doesn’t sit right and feels forced, especially in the set up.
I look forward to the next stage.

 

[NoesisAndNoema]

I went ahead and posted my review...

Thanks for that...

To ease your mind a little... (The intro was super-shortened, to get to the days. It will get a lot longer, and warrant "skipping", in the future.)

This is the more "story-based versions", of reality. Like a movie or book, just not like a bad porn movie or magazine story. I never wanted to do the incest thing. That was already an element being done by "Big brother". The original story was created to use his artwork, which was real specific to certain actions. I am no longer limited to that, so I went with my older original story, which existed long before "Big-brother" even existed. I had to dig real far back to get this story. None of my other ones fit the artwork.

I know how the military/navy works, not the MPs, there is a LOT that doesn't become clear until the story unfolds. I didn't want to saturate the readers with hum-drum details. It would be the equivalent of a standard "technical discharge", or OTH (Other than honorable). The law part is a typical law stuff, violations as a "member of the armed-forces", which led to the arrest and conviction of the senior officer, who was actually molesting little boys. (The details "sealed" to keep it out of the public's eyes, and his record being expunged, if he does this house-arrest thing.) Actually, there was a similar thing done, in our family. The discharge, not the molesting.

I grew-up with a foster-home five houses down the road from me. Over the years, many were my friends. I watched most of them become major fuck-ups. Kids that no-one, including the state, wanted... Though the state was quick to take many of them away from their parents, and give them to strangers who treated them like slaves. A few were actually just abandoned or non-adoptable.

As for the exchange students... There are all sorts of various exchange programs. This one, typical in the USA, involves a foreign family, paying to have a student "housed", while attending a specific desired school in the USA. They pay for boarding and simple necessities, with a certain expected over-payment for the burden. In this case, both girls have parents that don't want them going to school where they are from. They actually don't want the girls at all. Both are expected to ultimately live in the USA, as citizens, when schooling is complete. Both also expected to "send money home", for the parents who paid to have them get a "better education". (There is another level to Becka's father, which comes-out near the middle of the story, on a few paths. Lana is still just "another girl".)

They also pay for them to be housed, to become a citizen... Known as selling mail-order brides. (Actually a big problem here in Jacksonville, for a while.) The going rate is about $38,000 to do it. About $12,000 goes to the person doing the "hook-up", and the rest goes to the person burdened with doing the housing or just the technical things needed until the other person actually becomes a full citizen. The guys doing the hook-ups make a LOT, because they hook-up hundreds a year. Every two years, it can be done all over again, with a new wife, after the divorce. lol.

This is also not "in the united states". We are on an island. However, that will not become clear until later too. Once the maps are up and running.

 

[NoesisAndNoema]

I might want to make that more clear... The beginning...

He is not flying home, you are seeing the "Ending"... He is leaving. It starts, after that, with him home, after having been home for a week already.

I am not sure how I can make that more clear.

I am working on the background-character thing, which will be addressed in the next release. Perhaps some more clear, "choice words", to better describe his situation, or less... Just letting it unfold in the story.

In the end, you are creating the story that he is telling to the guy on the plane.

I am also working on another type of "dialogue box", that will replace the need for the narrator to speak. An alternative to "sounds" and other various things that a narrator is usually used to portray, where artwork or personal dialogue would not be conveyed correctly. That is for later though.

Going to fall silent again. I need to wrap this up, for release. I will take the advice on the file-names too. I am at an early enough stage that it isn't too much of a burden to fix. Better to be safe than sorry.