VN Ren'Py Abandoned Torrid Tales [v0.8.2] [JWBNovels]

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InTheWoods

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John Walker Black said:
Misspellings and improper punctuation are only a nuisance.
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The highest-rated titles on F95 (and elsewhere) don't have many nuisances. Consider your strengths as a publisher and developer. If you want your project to look its best, finding an editor to fine-tune your dialog might be a good idea.

Also, if you're going to correct someone, make sure you know the subject matter. Every attempt you've made has missed the mark:

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Revel in your low standards if that comforts you, but don't expect everyone to share your enthusiasm.
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A comma is not needed here. See:
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If someone made an AVN full of bugs, throwing exceptions on 10% of the screens. Then would it be considered a good product?
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The phrase, "If someone [...] screens.", is a subordinate clause and cannot stand on its own as a sentence. See:
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If not, then why should the form be less important than the function?
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As used here, "form" and "function" are broad concepts rather than definite articles. See:
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Anyone know what assets are used to make the characters?

I think Isabelle is Belinda Hair for Genesis 3 in Red as for the rest I have no idea... Which means it's all Genesis 3 hair and models that will be in it from my guess...
 
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Shadow2007 said:
Anyone know what assets are used to make the characters?

I think Isabelle is Belinda Hair for Genesis 3 in Red as for the rest I have no idea... Which means it's all Genesis 3 hair and models that will be in it from my guess...
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Yes I do.
Isabella = DT Clara converted to g8 and uses g3 Belinda hair
all models have been converted to g8 except for two females.
 
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InTheWoods said:
A comma is not needed here. See:
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Even by your own linked definition, you are wrong. The sentence is two independent clauses. So, therefore, needs a comma.
And by the way, I use Grammarly professional the paid ver. and Grammarly is the one that made all the changes two your writing.

You nitpick parts of sentences to try and prove your point which is a very legalistic point of view instead of looking at the overall concept of the meaning of what was written.

And that's why you missed the point. The point was misspellings and improper punctuation only bother people like you. As to where throwing exceptions 10% of the time is a game-breaker for all.
 
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John Walker Black said:
The point was misspellings and improper punctuation only bother people like you.
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Flawed art, writing, grammar, music, or coding can all be immersion-breakers. Berating your audience for not categorically overlooking certain flaws seems a bit odd. After all, if they care enough to mention it, they must think you are willing and able to do better. Of course, you are welcome to prove them wrong.

I use Grammarly professional [...]
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Grammarly and other "language bots" are poor substitutes for a trained editor - often getting things laughably wrong, like attempting to "correct" my use of "form" and "function", which paraphrases American architect Louis Sullivan's quote from the 1890's, "form ever follows function" (note absent "the"). That same quote may be seen everywhere (yes, sans "the") from the
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... but we're all obviously wrong and Grammarly
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. While you're at it, you could also use
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instead of a real dictionary - at least that misinformation can be had for free. Seriously, though ...

Assuming script.rpy has been processed by Grammarly, further proof of its inadequacy is easy to come by. For example, take a fairly easy English editing task: identifying extraneous apostrophes. Examining the first 50 apostrophes in the file (stopping at line 856 - I'm not going to edit all 2,226 occurrences for free), five errors should have been flagged - meaning Grammarly has a 10% failure rate for enforcing this language rule.

"The subordinate takes aim and fire's a beam [...]"
"Her passion and desire drive's her lust further."
"{i}Oh it feels so good, but it's not enough, It will be better if I remove these panty's.{/i}"
"She removes her panty's and top."
"Love too but, got dart's league tonight meeting the guys at the pub. [...]"
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Look on the bright side: Maybe it's not too late to get a refund?
 
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InTheWoods said:
Flawed art, writing, grammar, music, or coding can all be immersion-breakers. Berating your audience for not categorically overlooking certain flaws seems a bit odd. After all, if they care enough to mention it, they must think you are willing and able to do better. Of course, you are welcome to prove them wrong.



Grammarly and other "language bots" are poor substitutes for a trained editor - often getting things laughably wrong, like attempting to "correct" my use of "form" and "function", which paraphrases American architect Louis Sullivan's quote from the 1890's, "form ever follows function" (note absent "the"). That same quote may be seen everywhere (yes, sans "the") from the
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to the
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... but we're all obviously wrong and Grammarly
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. While you're at it, you could also use
You must be registered to see the links
instead of a real dictionary - at least that misinformation can be had for free. Seriously, though ...

Assuming script.rpy has been processed by Grammarly, further proof of its inadequacy is easy to come by. For example, take a fairly easy English editing task: identifying extraneous apostrophes. Examining the first 50 apostrophes in the file (stopping at line 856 - I'm not going to edit all 2,226 occurrences for free), five errors should have been flagged - meaning Grammarly has a 10% failure rate for enforcing this language rule.



Look on the bright side: Maybe it's not too late to get a refund?
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As a result, there will be another "abandoned" project : "Torrid Tales"! The beginning was promising, but everything has slipped into a dull semblance of a milftun)))! where the stepson wants to "fuck" the stepmother, and the stepmother is cheating on her husband right and left, and some more aliens were inserted there, as a result, a tasteless novel on the topic of incest, a cuckold husband and a whore wife!
 
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sema.larin799

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If in fact: None of the topics have been revealed-Vicky and Isabella-where? Secret club -where? The background of the characters -where? Where at least one storyline is visible, oh yes, a teenager's attempt to fuck his stepmother and daughter's desire to sleep with his father-fu how low and in addition aliens))) LMAO
 
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Mac182 said:
It´s a bit sad he has only 4 patreans
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Yes. It was hard to find it. The game has no references to it, though the ending commentary mentions Patreon, IIRC. Anyway, he'll have another one as soon as I finish with this post. This is the kind of debauchery that I really like. :)
 
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I love Isabella as she is a redhead! So made a new tester of her on my new rendering system as a redhead and a blonde:
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. I wish I knew how to make the other characters from the game....

I just wish the game had an update...
 
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trax29

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This game is really fun, but with his activity level I`m also not wanting to pay a monthly fee. I would pay something for an update, when its completed.
 
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