Ghost write is probably a strong word - undue influence would be the term I use. Case in point ch26 was such a huge departure from the Sarah/Lester mannerisms and goals that it felt like someone who didn't understand the characters wrote those scenes. It's not hard to believe someone else was in control of the alpha release. It's a speculation based on some of Chillie's comment's about watching Grandeman's (one of DS's editors) comments on the discord server.
Sex scenes and all were fine but Sarah suddenly reverting back to her old self really put me off this .
True, but no guarantee on that - guess we can revisit the community sub at another time.
did not even realize there was a comment section, just got the chapter and left.
Yes, except the purpose of him doing so, wasn't even to show a spine, it was to have him act in the dad role of saying No, Bad Sarah, just so she could act out against his wishes like an unruly teen-ager.
Agree that DS used that exchange as a narrative device to put the breaks on Sarah, however I don't see Sarah acting as an unruly teenager. DS has had her voicing her opinion on Dan limiting her fun since the second date night (ch9 I think) where Sarah didn't share a text from Lester with Dan bc she was afraid he'd put a stop to the date. And she's had her eyes opened even more so since the hotel scene. Granted DS has made them small hints buried in a chapter, but they are there to see and to show her changing attitude.
The most important thing Sarah hasn't broken yet is her commitment as a mother. So the most depraved act from Sarah's perspective is something that shakes that foundation. May something like her missing her daughter's birthday to be with Lester.
That comment section also seemed to in odds with me. Ch.27 ,which I thought was just ok, got torn apart by them. The new undercover story, which I thought was just ok, got positive reviews all over.
is this sexy? i've heard people suggest this - is that actually what you want? while you're cranking your dick, does it make it hotter to think, "yessssssss! she's ruining a child's birthday!!!!"
I was thinking of the most depraved act, not my favorite one.
I think that she is actually headed that way as when her daughter came out of her room and called, "Mom?" Sarah didn't try to see if there was something wrong, instead she signed for Lester to be quiet and she hid, openly, in the middle of the livingroom, on the couch, where if her daughter came downstairs she would have seen her mom, nude (for the most part) and flushed in the face -- so called hands in the cookie jar. By the way, why couldn't she just mute the phone? I think because leaving Lester there and just letting him know to hush both offered Lester the chance to act out and be heard, making the chance of getting caught by her daughter more of a turn on and it made Lester a co-conspirator on fucking around on her husband with her daughter right there, able to walk in at any time and witness it. Now, there was no denying the fact that she got off on fucking around with Lester behind her family's back.
At this point they need to get back at Chicago with their new dynamics .
I hope Lester talks about this face to face with Sarah the next day at work, it was so sexy and exciting, with the kids at home, almost getting caught up in the adrenaline rush. To err is human, persisting in error is stupidity. Dan doesn't have the strength to end the relationship, at this point it will be Sarah who leaves him. I'm still waiting to see if Sarah will really use Dan's fear against him, destroying him completely for Lester's pleasure. The "pineapple" can be used when Sarah starts wanting to use Dan's fear against him, starting the humiliation, calling him pathetic, revealing Dan's fears to Lester, him saying pineapple asking her to stop and shut up and she continues.
I agree with most of what you are saying. I know we haven't seen eye to eye on things in the past, but I'm with you on the kids should be a background element only. However I do see why DS adds them into the narrative. This is a great example of it.
No slight intended - what do you find interesting about a Jessie plotline? He's a lovesick puppy with no real value accept as a nuisance and wasted word count (Edit: that's not fair. He was valuable for the story as a narrative device but now that he's served his purpose he's taking up space that could be dedicated to better scenes). I doubt with everything Sarah knows now, that she would ever willingly fuck him again. I say willingly bc who the fuck knows at this point what Lester will do with his pawn moving forward.
He can be used at right time to distract dan and Lester can "protect " Sarah and her family from him cementing his status as a legit mate in Sarah's brain
