Few things;
opening scenes WAY too dark, hard to see
I'm assuming Dev in not native English speaker, dialog is very stilted and several errors.
"Lustleigh" should always be capitalized - its the name of the town
lots of improper pronouns "its" instead of "shes" (at least based on context), "him" when referring Emily etc
BUT!....
very interesting premise. Love the semi-medieval setting. Models look nice. Seems like an interesting plot being set up.
I hope the language issues can get worked out as it's distracting and makes immersion difficult and the plot sometimes hard to follow. Would like to see what the future tags are because some are deal killers for me ( and others I'm sure).
A little bit of a shaky start but has promise.
