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This game has both some very good, and very bad attributes. I'll list some of them here. Here comes my book report...

Good: The renders are nice. You open the gates with a sex scene, it's a pretty nice quickie. The story-line could be fantastic if it were well written. The game has a built in wiki so that's good for identifying characters. The family is full of hotties. It seems like it may be a fun game, and has some serious potential. Perhaps something like "Good girl gone bad" but, you are a guy instead.

Bad:

Missing wiki links
Missing backgrounds on some scenes

The MC seems like he is going to be a chad thundercock. Basically like all he gotta do is be like "Hey let me get some of that pussy." and any of the females in the game are gonna jump on that dick... He should have to work for it more.

The lack of options that should really be options. I'll give you some prime examples:
1) When you are with your personal trainer she is getting a bit hands on. At this point you should be able to choose to tease her a bit, or push her off of you.
2) Sofia the milf gets drunk, and tries to smooch you. Again, you should be able to choose here to kiss her, maybe grab a little ass too, or totally rebuff her.
3) The little sister is laying on her bed when you are chatting with her. Her titty pops out. You should be able to say something like "You may want to cover yourself better" or inversely stare at that nip slip.

Furthermore in the bad sector the wiki section lacks images. A base image of the character on their wiki page would be useful. Their age should also be in there as well as occupation, education, relation to main character.

Lastly in the bad sector the game mentions early on "There is gonna be like 20 characters..." I think that quality instead of quantity is what is needed. Lets see who there is so far...
1) Main Character Miles the guy
2) Ella MC GF
3) Sofia Ella's Mom
4) Alberto Ella's Dad
5) Carina Ella's sister
6) Serafina Ella's sister
7) Malcolm token black guy friend of MC
8) Dumpster wigger guy friend of MC (The fuck kind of name is that?)
9) Miss Greenwood black teacher lady
10) Katya some red headed slut that is friends with some of the sisters
11) Raquel personal trainer / mc friend with the micheal jackson disease
12) Naomi hot asian chick friend of MC?
13) Mark Serafina's boyfriend, basically a jock / chad thundercock?
14) Jess Webster, not yet seen but the ex of Mark

Are 6+ more people REALLY needed?
Thanks for playing and taking the time to write all that out!

So to address the bad. I don't expect you to go through 30 pages of the thread. The wiki thing might get abandoned, for now, until I can get a working codex or wiki with images. I'm very new to coding, and I'd rather have no wiki than a bad one at this moment. The backgrounds thing will be addressed in 0.3, all characters are rendered in scene now without layering. I'm not a writer either, though I am working on it. I'm self aware enough to know my weaknesses, but the render quality and original Daz characters (all custom) I feel are the biggest strengths of game.

For Miles being a 'Chad Thundercock', I don't think many people would be happy if Carina, Serafina, Sofia, or Raquel weren't available romance options.

And yes, the game does need more options. But for now, it wouldn't feel right just yet for Miles to feel up Raquel or Sofia. I wouldn't want to give an option to do that just yet. I don't want to do gameover scenes, because there shouldn't be a way to 'lose' the game.

And as for the character list:
Dumpster is inspired by a real-life person I knew who went by 'Dumpster'
What Raquel has is called vitiligo
Naomi is Ella's friend
Mark is jock, but I wouldn't call him a Chad.
6 others include Dumpster's sister, Sofia's sister and her daughter (Ella's cousin) and a few others who won't be introduced anytime soon.
 

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Are 6+ more people REALLY needed?
Yes. I think it's not always easy to say "quality over quantity". Sometimes, quantity actually a good thing and works well. This game is planned as sorta date sim. And anyway, i'm pretty sure main cast is gonna get much more time.
 
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The wiki thing might get abandoned, for now, until I can get a working codex or wiki with images.
Slightly off topic, but if you do keep it, please rename it to "codex" (for "book" or "collection"). "Wiki", from the Hawaiian for "quick", is normally reserved for collaborative content.
 
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Yes. I think it's not always easy to say "quality over quantity". Sometimes, quantity actually a good thing and works well. This game is planned as sorta date sim. And anyway, i'm pretty sure main cast is gonna get much more time.
This. Other people will cum and go but the mains will be there in the end while you get in their ends.

Slightly off topic, but if you do keep it, please rename it to "codex" (for "book" or "collection"). "Wiki", from the Hawaiian for "quick", is normally reserved for collaborative content.
I might abandon it. I will try an old codex code I was using last year, but I think Renpy has changed too much since then and code might not work. The hyperlinks work great in what I have, but if I could get images and a gallery I'd be VERY happy.
 
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With all this fan request, now when play the game I'm waiting for the dragon with hat to appear :closedtongue:
 

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With all this fan request, now when play the game I'm waiting for the dragon with hat to appear :closedtongue:
Some of the fan renders might end up in a dream sequence or when a character is fantasizing (doesn't have to be Miles either) ;)
 
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Also on a pace to have 0.3 be at least 5-6 times the size of 0.2 (lines of code anyway) and I will try to squeeze in some extra scenes if I have time. Still aiming for mid-July. o_O
 
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Just throwing this out there, I updated the main post. This game has optional and easily avoidable NTR content (2 chances to refuse). It won't affect the overall game, just sex scenes and some dialogue. I just hope everyone is mature enough to not cause arguments over this inclusion.

I repeat, the optional ntr content won't affect the rest of the game, and won't be the main focus of the game. I want to be transparent and honest to players and supporters about what you can expect and not expect from this game.

So because I seem to get a lot of questions every update about NTR, I will make this post a FAQ, and link it in my signature. The game won't change one way or another, no matter your feelings on NTR.

1. Does this game have NTR (netorare) and is it optional?
- Yes, the only way to access the content is by choosing Ella in part 2. It is an optional sidepath for one character in a game with many romance options. If you don't choose Ella, you will never know it was there. And if you do, it won't be the focus of this game in any way, it will just affect the MC + Ella's sex life, and there are many games out there that focus solely on NTR content for you to enjoy
2. What if I don't like NTR?
- You only can access it by choosing Ella in part 2, but some sex scenes will remain locked in the gallery so you never have to accidentally see it.
3. Will it be with or without the MC's consent?
- Play and find out. This game is story-driven and I don't want to reveal future storylines until they happen. The plot is constantly evolving, so even if I gave an answer it could change.
4. But what about when _____ had sex with _______?
- Someone having sex with their own significant other is not NTR just because the MC (or you) like(s) them.

Thanks, Abby
 
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Why are those eyes so yellow? They freak me out! Even though the sex would be hot those fucking crazy eyes might just give me ED.

Looking forward to the optional NTR and the story branching. As of right now its a pretty straight clickthrough.
 

thecardinal

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Why are those eyes so yellow? They freak me out! Even though the sex would be hot those fucking crazy eyes might just give me ED.

Looking forward to the optional NTR and the story branching. As of right now its a pretty straight clickthrough.
The lighting was a bit weird in that scene, it was directly overhead and eyes I use are really reflective. I've made some improvements since then! :)

Thank you! It was a hard decision to include optional NTR (because of the fights it causes, both for and against). It's probably the most popular fetish that I know nothing about. The hard part now will be balancing the branching storylines with Ella, and eventually with other characters when the time comes.

Also, the rest of the fan request for @Cicero72. I've got one more incoming with an angle where we can see more Carina. I'm rendering in both Octane and Daz right now. Surprised my GPU isn't smoking.
Carina Miles.jpg
 

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Thank you! It was a hard decision to include optional NTR (because of the fights it causes, both for and against). It's probably the most popular fetish that I know nothing about. The hard part now will be balancing the branching storylines with Ella, and eventually with other characters when the time comes.
Are you really don't know anything about it? Or you know about his western "counterparts" like cuckold, but just not sure about zillion variations of Japan's "NTR"? You can always ask me then, i do know and seen fair bit after reading hundreds of japanese vn's and mangas. Also, from what i understand, this route is moving towards what western people call "sharing"\netorase, or maybe threesome? And i guess most people by ntr here mean "cuckold"\netorare variation. Then if it's netori (stealing someone like Sophia by MC), it's either not in the tags, or mentioned as "cheating".
 

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Are you really don't know anything about it? Or you know about his western "counterparts" like cuckold, but just not sure about zillion variations of Japan's "NTR"? You can always ask me then, i do know and seen fair bit after reading hundreds of japanese vn's and mangas. Also, from what i understand, this route is moving towards what western people call "sharing"\netorase, or maybe threesome? And i guess most people by ntr here mean "cuckold"\netorare variation. Then if it's netori (stealing someone like Sophia by MC), it's either not in the tags, or mentioned as "cheating".
Alright, I will keep that in mind. I know about the western counterpart. But the 'netorase' or 'netorare' content will be on that one path only, so I will do more reading in the meantime and might ask some questions here or Patreon. The 'netori' content is non-optional, since everyone is available in game, and Sera, Sofia, and Raquel are all dating someone.
 
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I repeat, the optional ntr content won't affect the rest of the game, and won't be the main focus of the game.
i like ntr... but ntr just for ntr? whats the point?
I will refer people back to this post if needed, my stance on this won't change one way or the other. Just want to be transparent and honest to players and supporters.
just add ntr in tags
 
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i like ntr... but ntr just for ntr? whats the point?

just add ntr in tags
I repeat, the optional ntr content won't affect the rest of the game, and won't be the main focus of the game. I will refer people back to this post if needed, my stance on this won't change one way or the other.
If you don't like the inclusion in an optional side-path or exclusion in the main path, don't play or pledge support. It's really that simple.

And it is in the tags
 
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