All good so far but the whole dad and Ms. Camp drama thing could go right or wrong depending on how it's handled, if you had just taken the slice of life route it might have been a safer bet in my opinion, without the need for so much drama (how her life is being controlled by other people), I hope you can handle it in a good way and not take it to the extreme that it has tragic moments and goes from being a lighthearted novel (as it is so far) to a darker one.
I also hope it doesn't end up being a lesbian orgy of all against all (I got that feeling from the dialogues), that could be one route (polyamory but from everyone?) for those who like that but I hope it's not the only one, Mc has her lesbian harem, relationship with several girls but not all of them (depending on personality maybe?), relationship with only her family and relationship with only one girl are the ones I can think of.
As for Holly having things to improve on, yes, it's like most people like to see the bad in others but not see what she does wrong, and frankly we all know she has crossed the line or will cross the line.