The game starts a bit repetitive and exhaustive. It keeps saying the same things over and over, it's tiring to read. If you want to iterate and push the point home on things, it's best to not declare outright and instead keep saying things that support it.
But it's written over and over "she's so good at sucking but she never did it before unless she did but she didn't but she's really good but maybe she did it before but no she just got lucky" like come on. The story-telling here is really bad.
and he's constantly exclaiming!
So many times. And it's not for any point, he doesn't exclaim as a way to punctuate the emotional beat or to shift the focus abruptly, it's just to say the exact same things again. "Ugh! I loved her! Ugh! I hate her! I got cucked!"
Ugh, shut up! Give it a rest, I got the idea 5 sentences into it and you just kept going with nothing more to contribute.
"I remember perfectly! The moment he approached her for the first time!"
YOU JUST SHOWED ME THIS, YOU DON'T NEED TO TALK ABOUT IT AGAIN WHILE YOU WERE ALREADY NARRATING OVER IT ONCE. And then exclamation after exclamation after exclamation, god dude, hold up, I get it, you don't need to keep yelling. "I saw it!" yeah man I saw it too and now I'm seeing it again and I got the gist just fine the first time.
It's comedic. In a bad way.
"What dream? Don't tell me it's that dream where you narrate your own life?" Even she's sick of it. This guy's telling that entire spiel at the dinner table every day and she's going to suffocate him with a pillow eventually.
"Oh hey by the way you know my therapist was in a porno? Do you wanna see it, mom?" this dude is fucking deranged and therapy won't fix him.
Norman says "NERVER!" so there's a typo.
There are some interesting elements to this. I do like his family dynamic on paper. His parents do not accept that he's going to find another woman because he's legally still married and that's not how you do things. It's traditional and they approach it in different tones. But gosh the pacing sucks, the player character sucks, I really just want him to beat his wife to death instead of seeing how horribly unlikable he is every romance route. If I don't like the protagonist, I can't really believe that love interests like him either, and that also takes away impact.
It isn't good, but there's at least some bones to it that could be worked into something.
Can I ask a genuine question? Why is that appealing? Like I don't understand the appeal of having someone you love taken away from you. If you could explain it I would be appreciative.
I know I'm not the one you asked, but as another NTR fan, it's multi-faceted with elements of taboo, masochism, and general fetishization. An inherent "the man/woman you love
shouldn't fool around with someone else" gives a similar spark that other kinks do. Deviancy is its own appeal. And it's masochistic for a lot of people, like myself, in that "this doesn't feel good but that feels
good". That's the best I could do to distill it into something direct.