VN Ren'Py Your Harem Will Be Mine [v0.1] [Kazuki-chan]

[Cajun Fox]

Thanks

 

[themagiman]

Are you planning on having one of the rivals using hypnosis/mind control as a way to taking girls?

 

[BigDaddyEarl]

Whoa, look at this absolute badass.

seems like this Noxstella guy never heard of the quote "the lady doth protest too much, methinks"

 

[Joshy92]

I think that to make a good NTR game, you need to deepen the relationship between the girls and the protagonist. This is a challenge, but the greater the challenge, the greater the reward. Yes, that's something I intend to do. I want the protagonist to develop a deep relationship with the girls before they are stolen, because that's the magic of NTR.

So does that mean we can't do an nts playthrough?

 

[Sir Anal]

You cannot say you weren't warned. If this isn't for you, rather than moan about it over and over again, why not just go find something else to download.

So many just read the title and nothing more. Like so many are just leachers and so many patreons never ever write here or elsewhere.

 

[TM | Twisted Games]

The tags on the game are clearly marked, NTR pro/anti debate will be removed. Thanks.

 

[FunFuntomes]

I see any critique of the game gets deleted... it's a surprise the dev has only 30 supporters with how much glazing the mos do

 

[kaczy091]

And that's what I like, it's a shame that not everyone does it. I don't have to think long if it's a game for me or not... I just click "ignore thread"

 

[wildride69]

Looks Awesome, Good Luck Dev.

 

[TM | Twisted Games]

I see any critique of the game gets deleted... it's a surprise the dev has only 30 supporters with how much glazing the mos do

feel free to critique the game. Removed posts were part of the yea/nay NTR back and forth.

 

[Jamers]

The game is called, "Your Harem will be mine" but there is NO HAREM ROUTE ?? That doesn't work, either change the name or fix the tags. I might check back on this one in a few months

 

[Liturgy]

Can I ask a genuine question? Why is that appealing? Like I don't understand the appeal of having someone you love taken away from you. If you could explain it I would be appreciative.

The most delicious women are naturally immoral and cunning. I'm sure you can see hints of that in your mother or ex, even if just a little. The idea of a woman choosing me as her partner and provider, only to naturally fall for a more genetically gifted man, is deeply erotic to me.

 

[Febui]

I see any critique of the game gets deleted... it's a surprise the dev has only 30 supporters with how much glazing the mos do

My critique that pointed to specific issues seems to still be there.

The most delicious women are naturally immoral and cunning. I'm sure you can see hints of that in your mother

You should have just stopped there tbh that'd have been radical.

 

[FunFuntomes]

The game starts a bit repetitive and exhaustive. It keeps saying the same things over and over, it's tiring to read. If you want to iterate and push the point home on things, it's best to not declare outright and instead keep saying things that support it.
But it's written over and over "she's so good at sucking but she never did it before unless she did but she didn't but she's really good but maybe she did it before but no she just got lucky" like come on. The story-telling here is really bad.
and he's constantly exclaiming!
So many times. And it's not for any point, he doesn't exclaim as a way to punctuate the emotional beat or to shift the focus abruptly, it's just to say the exact same things again. "Ugh! I loved her! Ugh! I hate her! I got cucked!"
Ugh, shut up! Give it a rest, I got the idea 5 sentences into it and you just kept going with nothing more to contribute.
"I remember perfectly! The moment he approached her for the first time!" YOU JUST SHOWED ME THIS, YOU DON'T NEED TO TALK ABOUT IT AGAIN WHILE YOU WERE ALREADY NARRATING OVER IT ONCE. And then exclamation after exclamation after exclamation, god dude, hold up, I get it, you don't need to keep yelling. "I saw it!" yeah man I saw it too and now I'm seeing it again and I got the gist just fine the first time.
It's comedic. In a bad way.
"What dream? Don't tell me it's that dream where you narrate your own life?" Even she's sick of it. This guy's telling that entire spiel at the dinner table every day and she's going to suffocate him with a pillow eventually.
"Oh hey by the way you know my therapist was in a porno? Do you wanna see it, mom?" this dude is fucking deranged and therapy won't fix him.
Norman says "NERVER!" so there's a typo.


There are some interesting elements to this. I do like his family dynamic on paper. His parents do not accept that he's going to find another woman because he's legally still married and that's not how you do things. It's traditional and they approach it in different tones. But gosh the pacing sucks, the player character sucks, I really just want him to beat his wife to death instead of seeing how horribly unlikable he is every romance route. If I don't like the protagonist, I can't really believe that love interests like him either, and that also takes away impact.
It isn't good, but there's at least some bones to it that could be worked into something.

so you're saying that a dev active from 2022 still doesn't know how to write well?

 

[Febui]

so you're saying that a dev active from 2022 still doesn't know how to write well?

There are a lot of writers that keep writing and producing content for ten years before they really get a handle on it. It's a craft that takes practice. The important thing is they don't give up and they try to improve where they find themselves struggling.
But uh
Yeah.

 

[LionBear]

Thanks for sharing this.

 

[Cheyrou]

compressed pls

 

[BeastMaster59]

 

[Sxint.]

How will the NTS aspect work if it's tied to getting NTR points, like will there be choices where you willingly share, or refuse which just leads to normal NTR?

 

[jaques]

The game is not a Kinetic Novel. The player's decisions will have an impact and change some things in the story. Some decisions will bring Netori scenes, another Netorase and another Netorare. However, as is clear from the game's synopsis, the protagonist's wife cheated on him and this is part of the game's central plot and will be shown and cannot be avoided. So yes, there are unavoidable NTR scenes, so if you are a fan of Netori ONLY, the game is not for you either.

Don't care too much about the NTR tbh. But is there a way for the MC to "win" or retaliate? Or is it the standard forced beta cuck to the point of idiocy?