To be honest, i like your game a lot otherwise i wont spend the money for the early release. I'm nitpicking some weakness of the game as it would make it a much better game.I'm not bullying you so please dont feel like shit. This game is already in the upper echelon of AVN Narration. It's just rough around the edges. Those are legitimate criticism as player/fan as we don't have the full context or ideas of what you are trying to convey. Magic Jargons are awesome but can make us confuse or misinterpret the meaning.
Okay, this part is purely bullying: Don't give Caleb and Marie path a horrible/sad ending
or i will haunt you like Endless