Ren'Py Business of Loving [v0.13.5i] [Dead End Draws]

[sirviper235]

Lol you kinda nailed it... Good write up, definitely fair critisim. Charlotte's mom will hopefully be expanded in the future, she was genuinely a last minute addition to fuel the MILF energy I want from Business of Loving haha. Thanks again for the critique, I'll keep these in mind as I continue and fix up some bugs.

I am glad that you read it! And that my criqute helps! Ah a last minute addition? I see haha. She was done quite well, but I think the best choice could be to as said, add the aparment that she lives in to the game as a location. So we can visit and be able to repeat scenes.

And I do think some of her motivations/character from staying in Charlotte's route should also stay and be a part of her cheating route. As in the cheating one it's basically just you know. 'Driven by boner for her' which isn't an issue. I do like how overtly sexual and bold and forward she is compared to the others.

Unlike Patty who is cute about it, She's much more upfront with how skilled she is and horny she is. Just giving her a bit more character could be great. Or introducing her a bit ealier oncould be good as well in her daughters storyline.

One idea, I had, had is that when i was doing the loyal route with Charlotte, the reason her mom was so agaisnt her doing music and follwoing her dreams/passion was cause she tried that at her age and wound up pregnant with her and had a really hard time/life as a result. So she didn't want her daughter to make that same mistake. Just the vibe i had gotten. Could of been real good to have her say in the cheating rotue honestly.

And If i May offer an idea for if she gets' expanded? As said, I enjoyed how the game was quite comedic aboutthe whole cheating situation instead of getting dramatic. So one idea i'd have to expand it is to actually have it so you can get her pregnant before the end of the cheating route. The reason for it being, I think it would be not only great to have more pregnant scenes as the game honestly has too few in my opinion.

But also would add to the comedy in the long run as there is kind of just a big old time skip once charlotte catches the two.I have a scenerio in mind I can tell you if you wish to hear. But i don't want to be rude and throw ideas at you.

Sorry for how long this is.

 

[LeagionIX]

I'm actually glad I found this yesterday and I am really liking it so far I'm looking forward to see where this goes I would definitely love to see more scenes animated with Lorraine for sure and if sound gets added to the animated scenes that would be the best!
The art style has a really simple and charming feel to it which I really do appreciate and I think I might want to support this project.
And if the dev happens to see this I hope you know that I really like the game you've made ^_^
And of course Lorraine is my favorite <3

 

[deadend]

I'm actually glad I found this yesterday and I am really liking it so far I'm looking forward to see where this goes I would definitely love to see more scenes animated with Lorraine for sure and if sound gets added to the animated scenes that would be the best!
The art style has a really simple and charming feel to it which I really do appreciate and I think I might want to support this project.
And if the dev happens to see this I hope you know that I really like the game you've made ^_^
And of course Lorraine is my favorite <3

Lorraine is my fav gal. <3 Thanks for playing!
I am planning on adding sound very soon!

 

[Lord Semen]

Ayoooo when's the next update,???

 

[Jash83]

Man, I like this game, but it is SUCH a buggy mess! I don't mean it has occasional bugs, I mean it has CONSTANT bugs! It was bad in the last version, where story beats were out of order (I had sex with Lorraine for the first time in Lily's path because I hadn't finished hers yet, even though they still talked about how we were already having sex) and I would jump around different places and times (simply backing out of the PC menu in your room would make time pass), but with the update to the new version it's just one exception after another. I suspect old saves aren't compatible and I need to start all over again.

 

[skyteam]

how do i get the last scene from mom, patty and kim?

 

[Lord Levi]

How do I start Ramirez i've done basically everything else in the game but I can't find her anywhere

 

[dokodesuka]

thanks for that, wonder why the incest version isn't being put on f95 though

Yours is a one-year-old comment but if anyone else doesn't notice, there's two versions for download in the OP, the Patreon one which is vanilla and the Itch.io one which is taboo.

 

[fanboi]

How do I start Ramirez i've done basically everything else in the game but I can't find her anywhere

Go to the alley next to your office at night IIRC

 

[Lord Levi]

Go to the alley next to your office at night IIRC

I do that and I just get some dialog on how MC won't go im there

 

[jetama]

i really like this game, the dialogue and characters are really cute

only bits of criticism i would have is the pacing, the attraction between mc and chars feel a little rushed and could be built up more romantically. and that the h scenes feel kinda weightless, like some sound would go a long way.

 

[OcnarfRec]

Some more screenshots could have been added to the main post

 

[Joeburqa]

really appreciate the patreon version being posted. would rather have awkward conversations about being a landlady than the other option. victory.

 

[Joeburqa]

looking through the comments I see some disturbing ones asking for awful things to be done to an obvious child. please, for the love of god and all that is holy, don't make me ignore this thread. there are a lot of things that I don't get, but wouldn't tell anyone they cant do. on the other hand, molesting children is never cool. add in an older roommate if you must, don't cater to the pedo crowd.

as an aside, I do like the heartwarming aspect of the story helping the kid to stand up for herself. I think if your issue is that you think your writing sucks, maybe ask someone to help you out with that aspect. it is nice to be able to add a little tenderness to the story after you are done dicking every busty milf you walk past. seriously. no sarcasm. it was a nice touch.

 

[sexyegg]

Which scenes are animated with the mom? I did skititallbabe and am going through them all in the spank bank but nothing seems to be animated. Do I need to do somthing else to see them?

 

[nothing banned nothimng]

looking through the comments I see some disturbing ones asking for awful things to be done to an obvious child. please, for the love of god and all that is holy, don't make me ignore this thread. there are a lot of things that I don't get, but wouldn't tell anyone they cant do. on the other hand, molesting children is never cool. add in an older roommate if you must, don't cater to the pedo crowd.

as an aside, I do like the heartwarming aspect of the story helping the kid to stand up for herself. I think if your issue is that you think your writing sucks, maybe ask someone to help you out with that aspect. it is nice to be able to add a little tenderness to the story after you are done dicking every busty milf you walk past. seriously. no sarcasm. it was a nice touch.

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[nothing banned nothimng]

Which scenes are animated with the mom? I did skititallbabe and am going through them all in the spank bank but nothing seems to be animated. Do I need to do somthing else to see them?

only animated cg scene I saw was with Charlotte.

 

[dokodesuka]

looking through the comments I see some disturbing ones asking for awful things to be done to an obvious child. please, for the love of god and all that is holy, don't make me ignore this thread. there are a lot of things that I don't get, but wouldn't tell anyone they cant do. on the other hand, molesting children is never cool. add in an older roommate if you must, don't cater to the pedo crowd.

Playing devil's advocate here:
- It's not a child, it's pixels on the screen arranged to depict a cartoon character. Do you also complain about people killing enemies in action games? That's murder, right? If you don't, then you're being biased.
- It was on some old Last Week Tonight episode: you can see through the years that as internet porn starts being accessed by the masses, at the same time the amount of reported rapes starts decreasing. Therefore I am for people getting their weird kinks off if it's in a (completely harmless and fruitless) computer simulation.

For a disclaimer I should add that I am not attracted to this kind of content, and will skip / avoid it if it's in some adult game.

 

[dokodesuka]

Not the hill to die on bro.

I gave my solution -- letting people get off in safe controlled computer simulations so they don't have to resort to doing it in real life to real people with real consequences.
What is your solution? You too Joeburqa , let's hear it.

Sounds unfair that I'm the idiot here having to think of what to do with these people that exist and won't go anywhere, and you get to be the "pedo bad, 'mkay?" guy.

 

[Joeburqa]

I gave my solution -- letting people get off in safe controlled computer simulations so they don't have to resort to doing it in real life to real people with real consequences.
What is your solution? You too Joeburqa , let's hear it.

Sounds unfair that I'm the idiot here having to think of what to do with these people that exist and won't go anywhere, and you get to be the "pedo bad, 'mkay?" guy.

you ever heard of media influencing people? there was a guy who was a high up from google talking about how their advertisements are known to influence people. like how if you see an ad for a certain thing over and over, you are more likely to agree with that thing. and not just buy a product. political influence, social justice influence, etc. put an idea into someones head over and over and they are more likely to agree with that idea. music is a great example. music is liked more often because it is familiar. pop songs include small bits that are extremely common, as far as quick vocal pitch changes, literally last 1 second or 2 seconds, but because of those small additions, 15 million people in the us buy that album. its engineered to do exactly that. hear something over and over, you like it. ever heard a song for the first time and thought wtf is this bullshit? then heard it for the 15th time and cant get it out of your head? the ultimate solution is that the people who are attracted to this sort of thing don't exist. but since that is not a reasonable solution, the better option is to not put this into their head over and over until even people who are not interested in this originally are now seeing this as familiar and thinking why not me as well. also you used the mention of the increased use of porn decreasing the number of rapes, but violent crime rates in north America are actually decreasing and have been, overall, but the only outlier is sexual assault which has been increasing for about 8 years. either way, I don't have a solution to figure it out other than not to attempt to indoctrinate more people to this way of thinking. according to morgan freeman, how do you stop racism? stop talking about it. producing more of this child rapery doesn't seem like its making things better. I might have had to much to drink to make this argument very coherently, but the general idea is that the more familiar something is, the more acceptable it is, and the more acceptable it is, the more likely it is to happen. disagree if you want, but in every single other aspect of the media, this is the truth. tv. movies. music. news. politics. etc. companies literally rely on this to make profits. why should porn be the outlier?