zeraligator

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It's called a temporary job not a temporal job.
The writing also feels kindof stiff, maybe you should use more contractions?
Also, after the first Rina event, the 'guide' proposes to give "we" more sweets. Seems kindof like the femdom isn't particularly negotiable as the 'no' option doesn't seem to update the 'guide',
Also seems to be no way to actually progress with Hana.(spent probably a couple months hanging out with her and it still said I should hang with her more)
 
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It's called a temporary job not a temporal job.
The writing also feels kindof stiff, maybe you should use more contractions?

Depends.
Maybe it turns into a remake of Time Cops ...


And Yes.
Thing is it can turn into a "Bro Speech Episode" very fast if one is not carful with that.
 
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I'm glad we eventually get the option to tell Rina to leave, but I kinda wish it had come sooner. Someone doing that to me at her size would be picked up by the face and deposited outside the door. Even if we clearly know both girls are going through some circumstances and so we want to temper any aggressive reactions to such bullshit, it doesn't mean we need to be doormats.

That said, I hope not being a wuss in a clearly unhealthy situation doesn't just lock Rina out of progression. As she clearly has trust issues, I would like for things to continue with a veneer of normality for a while after that until she snaps and starts raging about people not being that nice, allowing for a confrontation where a more negotiated interaction system can result. Hopefully femdom isn't her only option either, it's not really my thing but especially not from a brat half my fucking size. You want to dom me you need to at least bring some abs to the table.
 

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I'm glad we eventually get the option to tell Rina to leave, but I kinda wish it had come sooner. Someone doing that to me at her size would be picked up by the face and deposited outside the door. Even if we clearly know both girls are going through some circumstances and so we want to temper any aggressive reactions to such bullshit, it doesn't mean we need to be doormats.

That said, I hope not being a wuss in a clearly unhealthy situation doesn't just lock Rina out of progression. As she clearly has trust issues, I would like for things to continue with a veneer of normality for a while after that until she snaps and starts raging about people not being that nice, allowing for a confrontation where a more negotiated interaction system can result. Hopefully femdom isn't her only option either, it's not really my thing but especially not from a brat half my fucking size. You want to dom me you need to at least bring some abs to the table.
Rina is Hanas daughter.
For the purpose of the story and for not getting burned at the stake Rina is said to be 20.
All character graphics and behavior shows that age is ... doubtful meaning you are "glad" if you are able to kick a "child" to the curb.
As you mentioned she has a small body and next to no muscles. Meaning if she is asked to leave she won't be able to defend herself. Likely not even from a bunch of cockroaches.

Plus you don't seem to understand family ties.
Mother and daughter experienced trauma together thus they are essentially welded together now.
If you ask Rina to leave Hana will leave as well.
They are a complete package and not a "mix'n'match eat what you want buffet"

And to add insult to injury you don't understand "femdom" either.
Domination in sexual terms has nothing to do with physical prowess.
 

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Rina is Hanas daughter.
For the purpose of the story and for not getting burned at the stake Rina is said to be 20.
All character graphics and behavior shows that age is ... doubtful meaning you are "glad" if you are able to kick a "child" to the curb.
As you mentioned she has a small body and next to no muscles. Meaning if she is asked to leave she won't be able to defend herself. Likely not even from a bunch of cockroaches.

Plus you don't seem to understand family ties.
Mother and daughter experienced trauma together thus they are essentially welded together now.
If you ask Rina to leave Hana will leave as well.
They are a complete package and not a "mix'n'match eat what you want buffet"

And to add insult to injury you don't understand "femdom" either.
Domination in sexual terms has nothing to do with physical prowess.
To clarify my position, I meant the bedroom door.

And domination has a power element to it, so I'm not going to respect someone who lacks power. Muscles are one form of power, and having a ripped physique implies a level of discipline that deserves respect. It's not the only requirement for respect, but it's one that works for me.
 

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Unless Rina is physically in love with you she won't abide your wishes if they are not expressed by Hana as well or instead.

You can ask, but the response will be some kind of variation of "No".

Sexual domination has nothing to do with physical prowess.
If it would be a main factor RL dominas exclusively would be recruited from boxing clubs, karate dojos, bodybuilders ...
The men that visit a domina almost always can overpower her physically.

You personally would not respect someone who "can put up a fight" at least.
But you also said you are not into domination to begin with.
 

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Sexual domination has nothing to do with physical prowess. Correct. It has to do with wanting to be dominated. And even though I'm not into it, there are elements that can make it more or less appealing even from that starting position. Others would have different ones. But if you're trying to dominate someone who doesn't want it, that's abuse. Thus why I was saying I wished we have an option of forestalling Rina's situation sooner, which somehow you took as my saying I wanted to kick her out of the house entirely, but at the same time hoping that rejection doesn't just end interaction with her as that's both unrealistic when she's still in the house (because I never said I wanted to kick her out entirely) and from a game perspective makes her dead weight. When I said "negotiated interaction" mean the sort of agreement two people who have to share a space by necessity come to even if they don't like each other, not some sort of sexual favour bargain.

I'm not sure what point you're still trying to address.
 

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Might want to up Hana's age by a year or three as it currently implies that she had Rina at 15.
 

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Might want to up Hana's age by a year or three as it currently implies that she had Rina at 15.
When I went back to college, I had a classmate who was pregnant. Something came up in class about being a grandparent. I said "I'm only 32, I'm too young to be a grandparent" she looked at me and said "I'm 33 and I'm a grandparent already"

could have heard a pin drop in the room.

I said, "you started pretty young didn't you?". She said "I was 18" (do the math on the daughter)

you could have heard an eyelash drop in the room was so quiet at this point....

It's not as uncommon as you'd think :(
 

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When I went back to college, I had a classmate who was pregnant. Something came up in class about being a grandparent. I said "I'm only 32, I'm too young to be a grandparent" she looked at me and said "I'm 33 and I'm a grandparent already"

could have heard a pin drop in the room.

I said, "you started pretty young didn't you?". She said "I was 18" (do the math on the daughter)

you could have heard an eyelash drop in the room was so quiet at this point....

It's not as uncommon as you'd think :(
I'm not saying it doesn't happen, just that the implications of it(especially with the abusive husband in the opening) might not be what the author intends. Given some previous discussions in this thread, it might have been a result of aging Rina up without editing Hana's age in kind.
 
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I'm not saying it doesn't happen, just that the implications of it(especially with the abusive husband in the opening) might not be what the author intends. Given some previous discussions in this thread, it might have been a result of aging Rina up without editing Hana's age in kind.
That's a problem mainly in the US of A and a few very conservative countries.
Teens don't realize babies are not born from kisses but from sex since the education system in those countries is ... very backwards to put it mildly. In school that is not taught, at home it is hardly mentioned, friends brag about it ...
Girls often are okay with a friend (not only boyfriend mind you) putting a finger up their pussy but refuse to show their developing breasts.
End result are pregnant 15-year-old teenage girls ...

It is not uncommon you are right. But honestly it should be.
 
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That's a problem mainly in the US of A and a few very conservative countries.
Teens don't realize babies are not born from kisses but from sex since the education system in those countries is ... very backwards to put it mildly. In school that is not taught, at home it is hardly mentioned, friends brag about it ...
Girls often are okay with a friend (not only boyfriend mind you) putting a finger up their pussy but refuse to show their developing breasts.
End result are pregnant 15-year-old teenage girls ...

It is not uncommon you are right. But honestly it should be.
Has zero to do with the right wing of republicanism and more to do with it simply being seen as a child abuse scenario which might get you crucified by the almighty censors- I mean Ministry of Truth and Great Justice.

I really like the design of the characters though. Too many "furry" labeled games are just human girls with animal ears and tails.
 

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Excellent character designs and good writing so far. There is just one things I would like to mention.

1. The book with the girls' data seems to be bugged. Rina's entry said "That's all for this version" when I was still able to get a few more Trust points and hadn't even triggered her night-time scene. Meanwhile, Hana's entry still says "I should spend time with her" even though I can't get any more points with her.

2. Speaking of Rina's night-time scene...
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zeraligator

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That's a problem mainly in the US of A and a few very conservative countries.
Teens don't realize babies are not born from kisses but from sex since the education system in those countries is ... very backwards to put it mildly. In school that is not taught, at home it is hardly mentioned, friends brag about it ...
Girls often are okay with a friend (not only boyfriend mind you) putting a finger up their pussy but refuse to show their developing breasts.
End result are pregnant 15-year-old teenage girls ...

It is not uncommon you are right. But honestly it should be.
Look, I never meant anything about it being common/uncommon or how we as a society should reflect upon it. I just thought it might be an error or that the author had not realised the implications.
 

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Excellent character designs and good writing so far. There is just one things I would like to mention.

1. The book with the girls' data seems to be bugged. Rina's entry said "That's all for this version" when I was still able to get a few more Trust points and hadn't even triggered her night-time scene. Meanwhile, Hana's entry still says "I should spend time with her" even though I can't get any more points with her.

2. Speaking of Rina's night-time scene...
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I'm glad to hear that you liked it.

The book is indeed bugged, but I've already fixed it, in the next version it shouldn't give any problems.

As for Rina
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