you know, none of the things you said sound like criticism to me, except for your own interpretation, who would even want to see a completely realistic story? in a realistic story the heroine wouldn't need to have a good reason to cheat, the antagonist wouldn't want to get involved with the mc, so in the mc perspective you wouldn't see anything sexual until you will catch them cheating, is that really what you would want?
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Not realism in exactly, but well intelligently reasoned actions and circumstances.
The way MC acts is... fake and designed specifically as a plot element to drive the cheating.
The MC doesn't have to be "oblivious" as he is written, he can be intelligent, clever, and rational in his behavior. Thing is, that would require the story to be written more carefully and intelligently as to how the cheating happens, how it is reasoned, and how the FMC/MC deal with the it.
This is D rate horror movie plot writing. You don't question, you just accept it even though it is ridiculous.
There are numerous ways to create a plot that achieves this (there are a few I have played that have definitely attended to a more reasoned MC than this one), this story just puts its effort into the cucking the MC focus, not the development of a reasoned MC and how he would see all of this and act. As I said, the MC in this game is a plot driver for the Netori kink view of the game, the FMC/Antagonists are the heroes, the MC is the Villain and the plot and dialogue are written in a manner to promote that specifically.
so harry is the villain?
and an oblivious mc to the sexual acts around him is normal in ntr games...
Only for the purpose of justifying the FMCs actions. That is, the writing frames him for the purpose of the cucking. The FMC is not at fault here (by the stories claim), Harry is...so harry is the villain?
and an oblivious mc to the sexual acts around him is normal in ntr games...
It is Netorare, but it is for the purpose of the FMC/Antagonist specifically for more of a Netori angle on the MC.
It is an odd approach, more kink serving approach to the story over a traditional MC who is some nice guy who ends up being betrayed by the FMC due to some corruption of the antagonist and then deals with the loss. In this story, the FMCs are pretty much the antagonists themselves. Lucas starts it, but they drive it, reason it, and become worse than Lucas in the end.
Part way through the story, Lucas doesn't even have to try, the FMCs are driving it full force. Which is what the Netori fans want because the MC is not someone they identify with, he is just a prop for the Netori cucking.
what did you expect out of a NTR? nothing can make logic so the MC can lose. Sure, there might be some weird cases out there, but that is just for creators that actually put an effort on it and don't let the art carry the story.
He hasn't really change then, despite the many signs, it is this very fear the defines his characters not to see the truth.
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according to the patreon ending its another bad ending
and it seems like theres gonna be a bonus ending after this (assuming probably another bad end lol)
I mean its expected considering how he's done other bad end only games so lol
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Came here to see if it's finished but it's still ongoing won't download till it's finished.
I am a casual NTR fan, only play it cause I'm a fan of FMC corruption. And if NTR/NTS/Harem/incest have fmc corruption in it I play it.
Then why criticize some may ask, it's just a porn game/story. Well nobody here is expecting Shakespeare but if I just want sex scenes then there is lots of tube sites for it. Those VN got criticize more that tries to sell a story I guess. Cause maybe it gets the viewers hope up. The original Aya was a badass but in this version she is dialed down to a dumb bimbo with a split personality (all of them).
I recently read a corruption story in literotica but after reading few chapters I knew it's going in cuck genre but still kept reading cause The couple was communicative and fun and smart. . The premise was simple the wife start flirting in bar and they started wife sharing fantasy in a light fun way. and then the wife fucked the bull in bar toilet but later chapter it's revealed wife is infatuated with bull and bull learns hubby was listening the whole time uses this info to gaslight them into 3some twice but later manages to manipulate them into cuckold roleplay. I commented on the chapter of FMC Pov where she is showing infatuation with the bull and the Author replies that it has 3 arc first 2 would be their downfall and last where they takes control, so I kept reading. But when the FMC Pov of the cuckold play is presented and the later 3 chapters the story to me kind of feels doesn't connect the dots anymore. They are gaslighted to not communicate properly.... OK I mean wtf he is not living with them. Slowly through the 18 chapters FMC is manipulated to cheat on hubby in glorywhole with 5 other man including the bull who did everything to her except penetrative sex. She hides it from MMC. and then just in 1 chapter the hubby also cheat with a stripper with full penetrative sex cause the bull says come on don't be a pussy ..... Again WTF he was like a dumb 14 year old teen on that chapter (lots of cuckold/hotwife stories has this where the MMC cheats for no apparent reason before or after her downfall starts, I think it's there to justify her action). Then the last chapter I read is when FMC went to visit Bull alone cause she promised and thinks she won't cheat (she knows she is cheating but not acknowledging it) but expecting he will force her. So within maybe half hour she is in her knees and sucking his cock while saying she came here expecting it and sometimes in the cuck roleplay she wasn't pretending, she likes to be submissive to him and dominant and cruel to the hubby.... And I stopped reading the series. Why such a long rant, cause the writing was good, there was drama and struggle at first and the Author promised it's going to be different but in the end it goes into the same cuckold/humiliation hotwife sector. Like me there was lot of casual readers who were there for the story not the kink and enjoying it but all got angry in later chapters.
A good story can go beyond genre. Check some shonen anime, yeah people are there for the action/animation but it's the story that keeps it running.
It's not hyped like the original APBLU. And I agree with you it's much worse than the original. IIRC HC said before starting this that he don't know how to corrupt a character like Aya, I think he got forced into making it. The original at-least tried to explain things and like others games like this (Turning the page, Exploring Big Apple, Corrupted Hearts) tried to be an Mystery NTR but failed specially in later chapters. And for whatever reason most western NTR goes into hard humiliation in the end, I have seen it explecitly in western erotic stories and games. I think NTR in itself is a love/lust triangle story, and these stories are good because of the drama, struggle and tension. I tried to read some Hotwife stories from Amazon but the good ones (according to fans) are all about how MMC came to accept or defeated into the cuckold lifestyle and the wives are like "one fuck to rule them all", then through the whole story just tries to tell MMC he just isn't understanding her, she just loves him more or it's just different (like he is her red love and bull is blue love). I think it's not storytelling just rage baiting like those AI youtube stories.
I am a casual NTR fan, only play it cause I'm a fan of FMC corruption. And if NTR/NTS/Harem/incest have fmc corruption in it I play it.
Then why criticize some may ask, it's just a porn game/story. Well nobody here is expecting Shakespeare but if I just want sex scenes then there is lots of tube sites for it. Those VN got criticize more that tries to sell a story I guess. Cause maybe it gets the viewers hope up. The original Aya was a badass but in this version she is dialed down to a dumb bimbo with a split personality (all of them).
I recently read a corruption story in literotica but after reading few chapters I knew it's going in cuck genre but still kept reading cause The couple was communicative and fun and smart. . The premise was simple the wife start flirting in bar and they started wife sharing fantasy in a light fun way. and then the wife fucked the bull in bar toilet but later chapter it's revealed wife is infatuated with bull and bull learns hubby was listening the whole time uses this info to gaslight them into 3some twice but later manages to manipulate them into cuckold roleplay. I commented on the chapter of FMC Pov where she is showing infatuation with the bull and the Author replies that it has 3 arc first 2 would be their downfall and last where they takes control, so I kept reading. But when the FMC Pov of the cuckold play is presented and the later 3 chapters the story to me kind of feels doesn't connect the dots anymore. They are gaslighted to not communicate properly.... OK I mean wtf he is not living with them. Slowly through the 18 chapters FMC is manipulated to cheat on hubby in glorywhole with 5 other man including the bull who did everything to her except penetrative sex. She hides it from MMC. and then just in 1 chapter the hubby also cheat with a stripper with full penetrative sex cause the bull says come on don't be a pussy ..... Again WTF he was like a dumb 14 year old teen on that chapter (lots of cuckold/hotwife stories has this where the MMC cheats for no apparent reason before or after her downfall starts, I think it's there to justify her action). Then the last chapter I read is when FMC went to visit Bull alone cause she promised and thinks she won't cheat (she knows she is cheating but not acknowledging it) but expecting he will force her. So within maybe half hour she is in her knees and sucking his cock while saying she came here expecting it and sometimes in the cuck roleplay she wasn't pretending, she likes to be submissive to him and dominant and cruel to the hubby.... And I stopped reading the series. Why such a long rant, cause the writing was good, there was drama and struggle at first and the Author promised it's going to be different but in the end it goes into the same cuckold/humiliation hotwife sector. Like me there was lot of casual readers who were there for the story not the kink and enjoying it but all got angry in later chapters.
A good story can go beyond genre. Check some shonen anime, yeah people are there for the action/animation but it's the story that keeps it running.
Yeah I have, they are pretty fun few minutes sometimes
dude fr i dont want to sound mean but its really been quiet here and even on the Hmhf thread
V0.9.6 has been released to the $5 tier since October 7 and the full release has just been released recently, it is also on Steam.0.9.6 hasnt been released, yet you think 1.0.0 will ?