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View attachment Alyssa_Rotation.mp4Big thanks to KillJoys for sending me Alyssa figure, so I can do some renders for her
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Looks like karma to me.Skeleton of a story I thought might be fun, inspired by Mando Logica and amanru, and whoever it was that was asking for more Dylan and Patricia. Made with a lot of help from wynlard, especially for some of the more advanced rendering options and PS postwork. Was really able to get the crispness I was after with his help.
dForcing Patricia's sarong over the doorway and in Ellie's hand took some time to work out, but once you learn the tricks, is becoming quite fun.
Still need to work on dialogue. I have a script in mind, which I'll probably add once the story is complete
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And don't worry, I haven't killed off Dylan, he's just got a few broken bones. Next part will be in the hospital, not the morgue.
The art is great. But from a storyboarding/telling point of view it has a few things that could be improved. The first is the jump from image 1 to image 2. You should either show the sarong drop in an image 1.5 before the fall, or change the viewing angle of the scene (image 2 at the very least) such that she is not in frame. As it stands now, something major happens "in frame of the camera" but is completely skipped over. Somewhat hiding what happened from the audience and then slowly going back in time or giving clues and revealing it after the fact only works as a plot point when they couldn't have seen or known about it at the time it occurs.Skeleton of a story I thought might be fun, inspired by Mando Logica and amanru, and whoever it was that was asking for more Dylan and Patricia. Made with a lot of help from wynlard, especially for some of the more advanced rendering options and PS postwork. Was really able to get the crispness I was after with his help.
dForcing Patricia's sarong over the doorway and in Ellie's hand took some time to work out, but once you learn the tricks, is becoming quite fun.
Still need to work on dialogue. I have a script in mind, which I'll probably add once the story is complete
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And don't worry, I haven't killed off Dylan, he's just got a few broken bones. Next part will be in the hospital, not the morgue.
Considering that was my first ever storyboard, I was bound to make some mistakes. The sarong did snag, so I'll have a look at making that clearer. Discovering quite a few tricks while working on these renders, so I might be able to try a few things. As for image 8, I hadn't used expressions yet, but that's easily fixedThe art is great. But from a storyboarding/telling point of view it has a few things that could be improved. The first is the jump from image 1 to image 2. You should either show the sarong drop in an image 1.5 before the fall, or change the viewing angle of the scene (image 2 at the very least) such that she is not in frame. As it stands now, something major happens "in frame of the camera" but is completely skipped over. Somewhat hiding what happened from the audience and then slowly going back in time or giving clues and revealing it after the fact only works as a plot point when they couldn't have seen or known about it at the time it occurs.
The second depends a bit on the untold story. Is the claim here that she intentionally disrobed before stepping through the door? My initial thought, and the humor I thought you were going for was that she closed the sliding door when she went through and snagged it. It was then pulled off accidentally before she realized what was happening. But on further inspection, it seems to just be dropped inside the door and the door isn't even closed. So she must have simply removed it (less entertaining, but still a good story).
The third is image 4. The area where he fell seems to have a very substantial peeked roof in the way that would redirect his fall completely. The current setup indicates that he fell and somehow flew a good 30+ feet horizontally to clear the lower roof before actually dropping downward.
The forth would be the mentioned expression after the fall (but that depends on the actual tale). In image 9 (the last one) she certainly looks worried. But in image 8 she is very stone-faced. To me the combination implies that she wanted him to fall and perhaps even planned it, and only looks a bit mortified by the fact the she now realizes she was caught (or possibly not even caring that she was caught, but that her method of achieving it was found out). She certainly seems very casual about the entire fall.
Feel free to ignore everything I just said. I liked the post as it is. I'll enjoy seeing the post with added script if/when you do it as you said you plan. Just giving a few personal opinions how it might be made even better.
Using dforce and getting it to look right might certainly prove a challenge, but ideally the sliding door would be completely closed, the sarong should be on outside, and it should be hanging (basically in mid-air from the point where it got caught).The art is great. But from a storyboarding/telling point of view it has a few things that could be improved. The first is the jump from image 1 to image 2. You should either show the sarong drop in an image 1.5 before the fall, or change the viewing angle of the scene (image 2 at the very least) such that she is not in frame. As it stands now, something major happens "in frame of the camera" but is completely skipped over. Somewhat hiding what happened from the audience and then slowly going back in time or giving clues and revealing it after the fact only works as a plot point when they couldn't have seen or known about it at the time it occurs.
The second depends a bit on the untold story. Is the claim here that she intentionally disrobed before stepping through the door? My initial thought, and the humor I thought you were going for was that she closed the sliding door when she went through and snagged it. It was then pulled off accidentally before she realized what was happening. But on further inspection, it seems to just be dropped inside the door and the door isn't even closed. So she must have simply removed it (less entertaining, but still a good story).
The third is image 4. The area where he fell seems to have a very substantial peeked roof in the way that would redirect his fall completely. The current setup indicates that he fell and somehow flew a good 30+ feet horizontally to clear the lower roof before actually dropping downward.
The forth would be the mentioned expression after the fall (but that depends on the actual tale). In image 9 (the last one) she certainly looks worried. But in image 8 she is very stone-faced. To me the combination implies that she wanted him to fall and perhaps even planned it, and only looks a bit mortified by the fact the she now realizes she was caught (or possibly not even caring that she was caught, but that her method of achieving it was found out). She certainly seems very casual about the entire fall.
Feel free to ignore everything I just said. I liked the post as it is. I'll enjoy seeing the post with added script if/when you do it as you said you plan. Just giving a few personal opinions how it might be made even better.
Turned out pretty good! Love shower room scenes and the likeConsidering that was my first ever storyboard, I was bound to make some mistakes. The sarong did snag, so I'll have a look at making that clearer. Discovering quite a few tricks while working on these renders, so I might be able to try a few things. As for image 8, I hadn't used expressions yet, but that's easily fixed
Meanwhile, in the main thread I've been lamenting the almost complete disappearance of Ellie's dance friends, so I thought I'd do a render with some cheerleaders. Also a bit of a stress test, as I've never tried a render with a dozen characters before on my potato of a render rig.
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You are good to mention expressions. The rendered expressions made for A Wife and Mother are some of the best, for the main character at least, Sophia.Using dforce and getting it to look right might certainly prove a challenge, but ideally the sliding door would be completely closed, the sarong should be on outside, and it should be hanging (basically in mid-air from the point where it got caught).
As for the expressions, even gestures could do to imply your intent. People seeing something unexpected tend to point. A person falls, a second person sees it happen, as soon as a third person appears, the second points at the fallen and says, "Hey, look there! Over there is a fallen person!" (you get the idea).
Always reminds me of the "Spaghetti Westerns" The Good, the Bad, and the Ugly,Fistful of dollars.
DOF, denoiser and ghost lighting are great. I've recently taken to using a ghost light plane above the camera, and then increasing the exposure a little to balance the lighting, and what previously might have taken 8+ hours now takes around 2.Alley_Cat, I like your render, in particular, its composition. You have the figures spaced well, and standing in different positions. This requires planning, forethought and a sense of story in the render. This is harder to do than most people think...until they try to do it themselves. I also like your depth-of-field which is something I have not yet experimented with. A final huzzah to you is Ellie's position within the render. She is slightly off-center, yet clearly the focal point of your work...very nice!
Hit that one on the cranium. Blondie (Clint) Angel Eyes(Van Cleef). Sorry Eli ya got nuthin.Always reminds me of the "Spaghetti Westerns" The Good, the Bad, and the Ugly,Fistful of dollars.
Great classic films
I have the theme tune in my head nowHit that one on the cranium. Blondie (Clint) Angel Eyes(Van Cleef). Sorry Eli ya got nuthin.
Maybe it is just me but, does Pharmacist Tread Forgo look like Actor Kurtwood Smith (Robocop, That 70s Show, too much to list......)View attachment 1091642
I remember when you came through my door, and I had what you needed.
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and it was you who took the steps into my private life.
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You'll find that I will lead you to bigger opportunities. View attachment 1091647
You know I'm committed to you Tread, but why always the back door? View attachment 1091648
I never miss an opportunity. Nothing slips past ole Tread.
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Vicky makes the pick-up at the Indigo Lounge next Tuesday...10 days.
What is Vicky picking up? What will we find at the Indigo Lounge?