THANK YOU for making such a perfect game!!
Perfect, I hear you say? Do I mean it is perfect in every way? No, I mean this is the perfect storm of sleazy 80s neon-lit movies, which in itself is FAAN TASTIC
It's all perfectly and unrepentantly gratuitous, I love it. Light on impactful story choices but great on trope-filled stereotypes. You immediately get that confidence you can choose outrageously optimistic scenarios secure in your belief the MC will pull it off.
It's the Kung Fury of erotic VNs!
The way women dress sluttily... I especially like how girls don't immediately dress when naked. More instances of women simply remaining topless or fully nude for no particular reason!
Keep up the good work and ignore the ai haters. It's clear you were inspired when you came up with this story idea.
Looking forward to chapter 2, which looks to be shock full of delicious content!
Feedback:
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One outdated 80s trope I would love to see is more confident manhandling of women, no matter how business-oriented or cool they come across as. I can understand the hero being a bit unsure of himself, after all the transformation from loser just happened.
But looking ahead, I would like the male protagonist to take the initiative, be assertive. Instead of waiting for the woman to show her appreciation and give some kind of go-ahead, which plagues modern porn, I mean! The hero should simply assume he is irrestible and use the fact women are too horny for their own good. Just put your hands on their breasts and butts. When they say no, deflect by complementing them or kissing them... but instead of removing your hand, pull out a tit or pull up a hemline. No need to get rough or violent, just let your manliness confuse them and make them unable to resist, no matter what they say.
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You clearly have an ass-fuck fetish, that is visible in the way options during sex are nearly always just perfunctory; the hero always ends up ass-fucking the girl. While the option to ass-fuck girls and then have them suck your cock is great, this kind of forgets about players with different fetishes. Ideally each choice whether to fuck a girl in the vag or ass should be equal. Regular sex should not automatically transfer into ass sex. Instead it would be nice if the girl begs you to withdraw before cumming, and you get the choice to tell her you will, but then you also get the choice to cum inside her womb anyway.
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The scene where Miranda's henchwoman beats the crap out of you. Would be nice to actually be able to "deescalate". After all, you replay this scene to uncover the other branches in the story, and it gets old fast to be forced into an unwinnable fight. A quick route to Miranda breaking off the fight before you die would be nice, that skips having to get the crap beaten out of you by the girl.
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The scene where you rescue Belle, the gun shop owner - make it a choice to give her clothes or not. Would love to see her remain naked throughout the scene for no other reason than the hero's gratification! Maybe even have her consciously cross her arms over her breasts, a little bit embarrassed. Only as the scene plays out and she realizes what a hero the hero is does she relax and put her body on full display.
More girls should be met nude or topless I say, and the hero/player should get to decide whether they stay that way or get clothed!
In Belle's case, if you don't give her any clothes, you could add a choice to ask her what the thugs did to her; and when she details the way they fucked her, maybe offer to make it better "the only way I know how" (dropping pants)... by fucking her much better than they ever did!
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One thing that I miss, a little bit at least, is more random fucks, and most especially, *repeat fucks*. All the women you have sex with are women you visit for the story in some manner, and you only visit them because of the story, not because you want to fuck them. It would be cool if you could chat up maybe a random nurse or police secretary, so you could fuck them each time you visit the station, just as a bonus.
Maybe add a recurring character, say a reporter desperate for a scoop who just happens to visit *each time* something goes down. She would appear more than once in each episode, I mean. Each time her clothing gets torn, ripped or blown right off of her, from explosions, gunfights, crashed news choppers or whatnot
. And each time you can choose to only tell her what she needs to know for her story if she lets you fuck her. She remains skeptical with a mixture of resentment and lustful awe, not wanting to admit she needs your huge cock... but she does end up genuinely thankful when your cooperation means she becomes a star reporter - even as your cum keeps trickling down her leg from under her skirt!
Oh, and Tammy Tomlinson the car mechanic. There seems to be something special there. Maybe she can return? Maybe your sister Taylor will even share willingly and you can knock both of them up; seeing all of you are off-worlders...
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And oh, add me to the list of people clamoring for a scene with Taylor and Officer Dickhead
Preferably sooner than later, before all of her adventures, when she's not yet turned into a slut. I want her to try (and ultimately fail) to treat him with respect as a fellow human being and police officer. Maybe he accidentally squirts cum all over her and she tries to say "it could happen to anyone" all the while she's getting hornier and hornier and unconsciously dressing sluttier and sluttier... until he can't stand it no more and just dicks her balls deep (neck deep?). Even then, when she's reduced to being a cock-sleeve he could ask for forgiveness, he doesn't usually treat women this way. But he does, and she isn't upset for real...
Maybe he can even warn he's super virile and obviously way too big for any condom. He tells her she should make sure to remind him to withdraw before he splooges, and then make it into some kind of challenge to actually do that when you as Taylor become cock-crazed with desire. If you remind him, he doesn't want to listen, but you *can* force yourself off of him to your great loss. On the other hand, if he cums inside you, he instantly fills you up with triplets, and your boobs expand massively, not dripping but sloshing milk everywhere Taylor goes...
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Finally regarding Taylor's upcoming beach adventures:
I truly hope you intend to give the player some options on how slutty to play her. I understand she'll meet various people that wants to get her naked, and it would be EXCELLENT if you could play her as reluctant, naive, enthusiastic etc. (It seems you do, I just can't help feeling it would be a great loss if the player only got to witness a story without having any agency into how reluctantly she goes along (though ultimately she will go along, I expect).
BUT ABOVE ALL - stay true to what you yourself wants! Remember: all good erotica means writing to the beast within yourself, the primal urge inside you. Not pandering to what me or other members of your audience wants...
Do you plan on implementing pregnancy and breeding content? Outside of porn, strong medication and genetic defects women get pregnant from lots of unprotected sex.
You know this is porn, right? AND lots of genetic
defects enhancements!
Personally I would LOVE LOVE LOVE it if this already awesome world was a world where contraceptives and the pill just weren't invented. Where women repeatedly asks men to withdraw... but they're far too horny to consider stop having sex! That would bring the awesome levels beyond comprehension!!
A valid point, yet I decided no to engage in any further controversy regarding Taylor's sex life. It's the way I wrote the character, and the way I feel she should act, and I gotta stay true to my idea. If people don't like her, they are free to continue browsing for other games.
You should DEFINITELY stay true to your vision!
(The ONLY way is not to kink shame. The idea YOUR kink is acceptable while somebody else's is awful and repulsive is EXACTLY the kind of puritanical BS that doesn't fly here.)
There will ALWAYS be haters, just ignore them. You owe them NOTHING. And by ignoring them, I mean that quite literally; just use the forum software to put each hate poster on ignore, and then you never have to worry about them ever again, allowing you to go back to what you clearly do so well!
Breeding and pregnancy is planned, as it would be the logical result in so much unprotected sex. That goes for Taylor and the rest of the female cast.
Hopefully not
just the romantic trope of starting a family with your true love.
I could see you reserving Taylor for this; but other girls should resigned to be knocked up almost against their will - I mean they weren't planning on getting a bulging belly, but then again they wouldn't and couldn't stop fucking either!
Also, since this is a parallel universe, nothing says once a girl gets knocked up she must stay preggo and therefore be safe from further impregnation for the rest of the entire story, or that you have to work time jumps between chapters into the story. You could simply say some men's semen is super-charged so the woman carries her baby to term in just nine weeks or days, not months! Or even that some sperm have super strength, and impregnates the woman regardless of whether she's already pregnant!*
*) if you're already a fan of impreg content you don't need to google "superfetation"...
(Of course if you go the whole nine yards and have Taylor apologetically plop illicit baby after baby all while she professes her true love for the MC, and promises to never again have unprotected sex with strangers (until another baby is fucked into her)... and have the player ultimately decid whether to accept and love her despite any weaknesses she might have exhibited, my mind would probably explode!)
