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battali0n

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Future Tags: Anal sex, Corruption, Handjob, Incest, Masturbation, MILF, Stripping, Teasing, Teen (over 18), Virgin, Harem(partially), Interracial, Sex Toys, Spanking, Lesbian

Maybe Future Tags: Shemale, Trap, Pregnancy
are any of these tags optional?
 

battali0n

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You are new and I want to encourage you so please take what I say as constructive criticism not as if I am bashing you.

I like the MC so far. He is definitely not a beta male and that is refreshing. The Li's are attractive but all of them seem like they are ready to jump on the MC's dick already. I am hoping for more character development and the story first with the sex coming naturally from that but the vibes I'm getting say that you are creating a framework to have a fuckfest. If that is your plan then please disregard what I just said. It is your game to write as you please.

The story hasn't progressed enough to determine how original it will be but I'm sure that will become clear within a couple of updates. I do think it shows promise.

When Hailey came over to visit I was confused. You said that all sex scenes would be optional but I had no choice to be able to turn her down. In addition to being annoyed that I was being forced into a sex scene I felt like I was watching a porn video from their dialog and actions. We call this porn logic when a creator does this. I get that creators want to throw sex scenes in as early as possible but I don't play these games for porn scenes but because of the relationship building and emotional bonding this creates. That then makes the sex scenes meaningful and much more enjoyable. I am suspecting that this sex scene would only be avoidable if I didn't text Hailey. I should be able to at least meet the Li before I decide if I want to have sex with her. I hope you change things to fix this. A simple choice as to whether to have sex with her or say good night would have been sufficient.

The other thing that bothered me was the scene where Amelia is in her room and her best friend asks her if she is in there masturbating without her again. Dialog like that might be a joke in the real world. In a porn game like this that almost always signals that the best friend has lesbian interest in the sister and is leading to future lesbian content between them. If that is your intent then that is fine but if not you might want to reconsider the wording.
Since you said
there will be lesbian content only in threesome scenes where mc will be presented, and player can either encourage girls to play with each other or "forbid" It.
This came to mind.

Overall, I enjoyed your visual novel and I want to see where you are going with it. I will definitely check out the next update.
 

xinkala

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Chapter 3 - Progress Update #1
Well it time for first progress update on for chapter 3
I'll be very straightforward with this
Only 70 fully rendered image‍ :rolleyes: In terms of writing/scripting nothing
Planning is done tho. There is not anything much to say
Peace
 

xinkala

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I'm too lazy to write a patreon post
renders are done, I'm now writing and scripting. Shouldn't take more than 2 day. after that I'll send it to my proof reader. that should take maybe 4 days? dunno maybe even less. and chapter 3 will be ready
 

Madridfan

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Game/Creator: After That Night/ Xinkala - - - F95Zone
Modder: LaikDink
I've made a small walkthrough mod for this game. It will highlight my recommended choices. Enjoy
Download: MEGA
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i know now you have a lot of mod updates... but if you reach the end,this one too need up pls ^^
 
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