VN Ren'Py Aurora Protocol [v0.2] [Astghik]

[Sir Anal]

I guess it's not really important. But I think the French version is even worse than the English one in terms of phrasing and certain grammar rules. And then there are still some passages in English...

Ce n'est pas vraiment important, je suppose. Mais je pense que la version française est encore pire que la version anglaise pour ce qui est des tournures de phrases et certaines règles de grammaire. Et puis il reste des passages en anglais…

 

[astghik]

Can this be available in 1080p version?

Yeah I'm working on a web version that will be smaller, probably even 720p (gotta keep it around 500mb). I actually have a version up at newgrounds that's "under judgement" if you want to vote on it. But it's the 4k version

 

[astghik]

I guess it's not really important. But I think the French version is even worse than the English one in terms of phrasing and certain grammar rules. And then there are still some passages in English...

Ce n'est pas vraiment important, je suppose. Mais je pense que la version française est encore pire que la version anglaise pour ce qui est des tournures de phrases et certaines règles de grammaire. Et puis il reste des passages en anglais…

English is my native language, all other languages are MTL by DeepL. I've heard it's better then Google Translate.. but well.. it's still not a human translation unfortunately

 

[PhineasFlynn]

Nah i'll add anal, tags can only include whats already in the game

It wasnt mentioned in future tags. So thats great now

 

[Juerhullycin]

I might be able to add it as a optional path later on if enough supporters want it. The women will "touch" but its a focus on the males pleasure in this case right now. Female supporters exist so yeah if we can get enough support there I can add an optional path

so anything goes if enough people ask?


yeah, don't see how that will go wrong.

 

[astghik]

so anything goes if enough people ask?
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yeah, don't see how that will go wrong.

No, NTR is completely off the table as it creates plot holes. A lot of those other things are against Patreon TOS and even if they weren't I just don't do that content.

 

[HughNose]

Note to dev. You can make 1080P pictures instead of 4K. It will reduce time of rendering and size of a game.

And only 0,01% of population use 4K screens.

Umh yeah - but I'm one of them. How'd you come up with that percentage?

 

[HughNose]

astghik

I love the game so far! Interesting plot.

There's some really bad grammar though. It hurts a bit since those are supposed to be very sophisticated guys. Should be easy to fix, though.

Good luck with the game!

 

[Juerhullycin]

No, NTR is completely off the table as it creates plot holes. A lot of those other things are against Patreon TOS and even if they weren't I just don't do that content.

Just thought I asked. If you sell out in-game kinks to the highest bidder, can we get a list of what's negotiable? Just so we know where we're heading with the game?

How'd you come up with that percentage?

Steam and others conduct surveys regularly about the hardware gamers rock. 4k is beyond niche. I use it, but most simply don't.
Pal of mine is a tech fiend, buys all sorts of tech Gadgets, Gizmos, and new fangled shit. He bought a drone once because it's cool. He bought himself an 83" TV last month was a pain to get onto the wall. And even this dude games on 1080p. Multiple monitors tho.

 

[proximusArka]

Yeah I'm working on a web version that will be smaller, probably even 720p (gotta keep it around 500mb). I actually have a version up at newgrounds that's "under judgement" if you want to vote on it. But it's the 4k version

Sad to say but my pc is on the older version, so it won't be able to run 4k or even 2k res! but if you scale down to 1080p or 720p then Thank you for your hard work!

 

[Saint Blackmoor]

Hey there, dev.
Please capitalize these words in the script.
i'd
i'll
i'm

 

[astghik]

Sad to say but my pc is on the older version, so it won't be able to run 4k or even 2k res! but if you scale down to 1080p or 720p then Thank you for your hard work!

sure i'll add it here once its live, I tried to yesterday and one of the images corrupted the whole file and renpy does a great job telling you which image during compile (it doesn't)

 

[astghik]

Hey there, dev.
Please capitalize these words in the script.
i'd
i'll
i'm

i'll think about
jk I'll have my wife proofread it.. ya'll better say its perfect writing afterward

 

[Takkertje]

Yo dev , used one type of lips?
In the previews there is.
mmmm......

 

[jadepaladin]

Small text things:

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I like how we've moved on from the "Landlady" era to "Adoptive but not adoptive parents." I think this is the 3rd VN I've read recently going that route.

 

[Sir Anal]

English is my native language, all other languages are MTL by DeepL. I've heard it's better then Google Translate.. but well.. it's still not a human translation unfortunately

As I suspected, the sentences are fairly typical of AI based on English (confusion between ‘la’ and ‘le’, etc.).
I just wanted to warn anyone who might want to try the French version that it's barely comprehensible.
However, without wanting to be too critical, there are also many errors in English. I would say that it is much more colloquial 'Amerenglish' than literary English.
I'm not very picky about ‘Engrish’, but even I find it annoying.


Anyway, keep the good work

 

[Amedeux]

Although she doesn't seem to like it, she's good at sucking. Sorry, blowing...



What balls?




And another thing, how did Aurora have that huge syringe with her exactly when she needed it?
And presuming that she thought she might need it someday, where did she keep it?

 

[jadepaladin]

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Although she doesn't seem to like it, she's good at sucking. Sorry, blowing...

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What balls?

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And another thing, how did Aurora have that huge syringe with her exactly when she needed it?
And presuming that she thought she might need it someday, where did she keep it?

I doubt where the syringe came from will get addressed but it's possible she went and got it while the MC was sleeping since she was gone for a bit.

 

[HughNose]

Steam and others conduct surveys regularly about the hardware gamers rock. 4k is beyond niche. I use it, but most simply don't.
Pal of mine is a tech fiend, buys all sorts of tech Gadgets, Gizmos, and new fangled shit. He bought a drone once because it's cool. He bought himself an 83" TV last month was a pain to get onto the wall. And even this dude games on 1080p. Multiple monitors tho.

Hmmm... 0.01 is one in 10,000. So, you and me are already 2. Where are the other 19,998?!

 

[Lordisigler]

i'll think about
jk I'll have my wife proofread it.. ya'll better say its perfect writing afterward

You can try Grammarly. The free version will correct most minor errors. The Pro version will suggest better structures for various writing styles. This will help to maintain a consistent narrative flow and give different styles for each character.
But don't overcorrect, since a realistic character will not always make perfectly structured sentences.