VN Ren'Py Completed Avalon [v8.2] [Lockheart]

[Lockheart]

You do realize this is an adult VN not an ABC after school special right?

Poor Byron is getting both ends of the ugly stick now. He's getting blue-balled into oblivion AND now he's considered a sexual predator too! God damn, this poor fool!

I think the worst part is that she instigates the sexual activities every time and his overwhelming need to be liked, especially by her, compels him not to say 'No' to her. And now he's the bad guy for it.

I am seriously going to have to give him some love soon. I feel so bad for him right now.

 

[RustyV]

Maybe as part of his therapy Byron hooks up with the cute Asian receptionist while Avalon and Dallas "watch".

 

[Lockheart]

Maybe as part of his therapy Byron hooks up with the cute Asian receptionist while Avalon and Dallas "watch".

Omg, haha. That's awful. We've decided that Sun Mei is actually a Yandere. Ahaha.

 

[Praenuntius]

Yandere is still Asia ^^ so nothing wrong with Rustys sentence

 

[grgrgr5]

Another game that tricks me by not having a gay tag and then having 75% of all renders be focusing an a male and his anatomy. What kind of a strait man is getting off on this?

 

[Lockheart]

Another game that tricks me by not having a gay tag and then having 75% of all renders be focusing an a male and his anatomy. What kind of a strait man is getting off on this?

Dun nun, dun nun. Dundundundun. DUNUNA!

 

[Praenuntius]

Another game that tricks me by not having a gay tag and then having 75% of all renders be focusing an a male and his anatomy. What kind of a strait man is getting off on this?

Don't know if I should 'lol' to that

If you really believe this game needs a 'gay'-tag you have some serious issues. The only time you see some 'male anatomy' is when Byron takes a shower and sry to say that, but that's not 75% of a the game.

 

[Facha]

A lot of haters over here, in my case, i really love this kind of game, where all is going slowly with a good history and not one game that in 0.1 beta everyone is fuking each other only cuz is a porn game

Keep going, we support u, u are one of my fav devs, the one is Enyo, but u are in my top list with this kind of History/renders/

 

[RustyV]

I'm waiting for a Avalon+Dallas shower scene.

Maybe as Avalon recovers she collects her own harem.

 

[grgrgr5]

Don't know if I should 'lol' to that

If you really believe this game needs a 'gay'-tag you have some serious issues. The only time you see some 'male anatomy' is when Byron takes a shower and sry to say that, but that's not 75% of a the game.

lol.. it's mostly a joke, but there is definitely some truth to it.

 

[Praenuntius]

but there is definitely some truth to it.

come on, unless you're watching lesbian action you will always have some male anatomy in it

 

[Lockheart]

lol.. it's mostly a joke, but there is definitely some truth to it.

Gotta give the ladies something to enjoy too. Don't be selfish, Grgrgr5!

 

[Krynh]

Penny is great. The scene where she pretends to catch the bullets and then starts laughing is really cute

 

[Lockheart]

Penny is great. The scene where she pretends to catch the bullets and then starts laughing is really cute

I know some people that were going through the novel actually believed she was too. I loved her the first time I saw her but now that she's getting attention from my fans, I'm seriously considering a spin-off with her.

 

[Krynh]

Just a note. You use "apart" instead of "a part" for the sentences "I'd like to be apart of your life again"

 

[Lockheart]

Just a note. You use "apart" instead of "a part" for the sentences "I'd like to be apart of your life again"

Oh thank you! Please let me know if you find errors like that! It really helps.

Can you be more specific where that line of dialogue is?

In my Discord, I have a specific channel for Bugs if you'd like to join.

 

[Krynh]

Script 4: lines 5216 and 5272.

Also you might want to consider changing all the times Avalon says Uncle to "Uncle Byron". More informal then.

 

[RustyV]

A friend of mine sent me a link to a powder puff girls cartoon "Meet the beat alls" that was basically just Beatles references.
I know you're pressed for time, but (everything before the word but is a contradiction to what comes after the word but), maybe do an Avalon with 80's titles for dialogue?

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[Lockheart]

A friend of mine sent me a link to a powder puff girls cartoon "Meet the beat alls" that was basically just Beatles references.
I know you're pressed for time, but (everything before the word but is a contradiction to what comes after the word but), maybe do an Avalon with 80's titles for dialogue?

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Can you give me an example?

I love The Powerpuff Girls.

 

[RustyV]

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The episode is called the Powderpuff Girls Meet the Beat Alls