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Not entirely true. Even when I'm doing edits/ghostwriting for authors, and we collab, a lot of people in these books that are mentioned are there to add some depth to the story. They don't all need to be relevant to be memorable.Yeah, I know that. That's not my point. The point is why mention her name so much if she's not going to appear in the game or be relevant? She could have just said "step-mom", no reason to add another for us to remember if it's not relevant.
If Monica never comes up in the game, it won't hurt the storyline -- (at the same time, she can always be added in later via a presage) -- at least you have that idea that she is a "real" person with a "name." But if none of them were ever mentioned, the pace of the story would feel rushed, despite many parts feeling rushed. But again, he just doesn't know how to write. There are snippets of good writing, and then it's as if he falls into a mood and barrels through some of his ideas and cuts them out completely.
It is not an easy thing to write a story. I've written over a million words before I got the idea of it