- Aug 20, 2016
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Not bad. Only a short way in but very promising.
One suggestion, if I may be so bold. If it was me, I'd ease off a little on the accents and dialect. A little of that goes a long way and I often find it's more effective to hint at an accent than to try and spell it out phonetically.
Otherwise, pretty good.
Are there going to be a lot of cameos like the New Mutants (or whatever they're called these days) climbing out of that martian artifact? Never mind, I expect I'll find out soon enough...
One suggestion, if I may be so bold. If it was me, I'd ease off a little on the accents and dialect. A little of that goes a long way and I often find it's more effective to hint at an accent than to try and spell it out phonetically.
Otherwise, pretty good.
Are there going to be a lot of cameos like the New Mutants (or whatever they're called these days) climbing out of that martian artifact? Never mind, I expect I'll find out soon enough...