VN Ren'Py Abandoned Bitch Squad [v0.4.7] [IcarusLabs]

[IcarusLabs]

Good stuff.
I like the girls - even some from the bitch squad. Amber and Ashley are my favourites until now.
Various personalities are always good. The conversations are really good and the english without flaws (as much as I as a non native english speaker can tell).
Maybe sprinkle some more choices in there.
I found the card game well made. But the dev should make it skipable, I guess (from what I read here) it is not for everyone.
This is also pretty long for a first episode. I will keep an eye on that for sure.

But beware - this is more for the story than a quick fap (though there is a bj in there). For that go elsewhere.

Thanks for the feedback! Love the comments!

 

[IcarusLabs]

I think it was worded very harshly. I wasn't writing it for a review, so I was quite loose with the tone. I feel I should apologize for that, really sorry.

If we get some actual choices (I believe those are planned), an actually intriguing mystery (too hard to tell at this point), or some really good writing to redeem the characters, the game would improve by leaps and bounds.

If we pretend this was a closed beta and I was asked what are the easiest things to improve on, I'd suggest you to really trim down the chapter overall, or at least add some meaningful choices to it to improve the pacing and the involvement for the players. Also, I'd tell you to speed up the card game, if you want to keep it (like, cutting the deck in half, AND speeding up all animations).

No worries, I can take it. Honesty is important. I am grateful for all feedback, I just want to get better!\

I really will take these comments to heart for episode 2, you have good points.

I don't want to spoil it, but as far as the story, things are not quite what they seem. I think you might be surprised in future events.

 

[IcarusLabs]

That's what I thought. Look, I can see that spark in him. I liked his spin as he defends Amber. He needs some Victories (real ones). If it takes too long... let's say playing a loser's journey was never fun in an erotic game.

I like your writing so far. Some facial expressions feeling uncanny(Sarah) by overall good renders. This can become good.

I'm planning for you to be able to choose his outcome. If I can do it right, him being a "loser" or not will be up to the player.

 

[sidsan]

any femdom in this game and character name, please? IcarusLabs

 

[jerikk]

might want to relax some of the smiles a little, getting Joker vibes from the screenshots

 

[Canto Forte]

submission is not planned for the MC.

any femdom

 

[Deleted member 3208170]

any femdom in this game and character name, please? IcarusLabs

NO No and NOOOO. Please NO. Simply No.

Ok Seriously:

And submission is not planned for the MC.

And this is good.
Could it be that you are going to games which aren't tagged Femdom to demand Femdom from them? It comes off that way. Because I seeing you doing exactly that. A lot.

 

[Hovis1974]

Ladies and Gents....I know we've all been down this road before....but please, it's only a .1 release....Many of you guys are jumping off the gun a little too soon and let's give the Dev a chance to tell his story and let him correct any compliants and criticisms. I normally don't even begin a story until a few releases under his belt so I can determine the direction of the story..Who knows, we might all be pleasantly surprised.

 

[Novo67]

I quit around the card game, too tedious for what I know will be no payout. Is this supposed to be a kinetic Novel or VN?- don't see much interaction here.

 

[goulet1995]

I'm planning for you to be able to choose his outcome. If I can do it right, him being a "loser" or not will be up to the player.

what are future tags more specificaly will there be ntr/shaing/swinging or any of the LI's with anyone other than mc

 

[DougDimmadope]

Lol, there is just the one. I personally enjoy mini games, but clearly it is not universal!

The next release will give the option to skip.

I personally enjoy minigames as well.
But I don't think the minigame from this game counts a minigame as there was nothing "mini" about it lol. It was pretty long and tedious.

I think if you somehow cut the duration in half or maybe reduce the number of rounds, more players will be open to play it.

 

[Takkertje]

No beauty at all to be seen.
Characters look cartoony and girls are ugly.
Gamename is not original plus minigames don't belong in an adult porn game.
Not the greatest first impression imo.
Think i'll pass this one.

 

[IcarusLabs]

No beauty at all to be seen.
Characters look cartoony and girls are ugly.
Gamename is not original plus minigames don't belong in an adult porn game.
Not the greatest first impression imo.
Think i'll pass this one.

Thanks for playing!

 

[Deleted member 3044547]

That crappy card game sucked.

Why is not skippable?

 

[IcarusLabs]

That crappy card game sucked.

Why is not skippable?

I can see that some people are stuck on the card game, which is fine..

How about a v0.1.1 that gives you a skip with a random winner? Easy to do.

I'm just not familiar enough with posting updates, do I need to make an update game request or can I just change the download links? If anyone has guidance, let me know.

 

[Chimba]

I'm planning for player to be able to choose his outcome. If I can do it right, Mc being a "loser" or not will be up to the player

And submission is not planned for the MC

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Just out of curiosity, from what I understood in the first comment, is the player going to have the opportunity to make the Mc grow a spine and defend himself, be dominant and take Revenge,or on the other hand continue to be a "loser" who they control and does not defend himself?

Does that mean you have 2 different paths planned?or Each LI has separate stats that determine the path the player chose with them?

My doubt is generated when reading the 2 comment, you say that the mc is not going to be submissive, but that contradicts the first comment that you say that "the player decides the outcome".

Personally I don't like femdom and sure if the opportunity presented itself I would choose a more dominant MC, but if you offer an option where the MC does not defend himself and remains the same, wouldn't that be a path where the MC is submissive?

 

[MisterNephilim]

I hope Annie gets the whole gamut of the payback/revenge because the other 4 girls at least are "strangers" but to have a step-sister (former or whatever) be part of that shit gets no forgiveness.

Fuck your redemption arc.

No remorse, no regret.

 

[Deleted member 3208170]

I can see that some people are stuck on the card game, which is fine..

How about a v0.1.1 that gives you a skip with a random winner? Easy to do.

I'm just not familiar enough with posting updates, do I need to make an update game request or can I just change the download links? If anyone has guidance, let me know.

I think you update the links and make an update request.

Animefan792 Consider deleting your review, then. Because it isn't true anymore.

 

[Aristos]

Reminded me of one of my favourite game which got abandoned

Exactly the same name.
When I saw the name on the Latest Updates section I was excited and confused because I couldn't recognize any of the girls from the thumbnail picture. For a second I supposed Red Rocket had reworked the whole game or something during all this time.
Is it allowed for a new game to have exactly the same title as a pre-existing one? Of course on Patreon you can refer to it however you want, but maybe on this site there sould be a way to make them different.

 

[MrBenny]

Is there going to be a harem?



Hey! sub zero is cool

Sure if your playing Mortal Combat.