Ren'Py Abandoned Boarding School [v0.14b] [Innovation]

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Kame-Sennin

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"You're the first and only boy in the school this year, which otherwise only girls can attend " . Hmmm , doesn't make sense all girls school but you (MC) are exception, much better it will make sense if youre a teacher or a professor instead and besides no rival male means no fun for me . It feels like girls will only jump at me because there is no other guy around.
 
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WADofMEAT

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Lol this reminds me of the boarding school that I went to. Tamassee DAR, you can look it up. It was a all girl school founded by daughters of the American Revolution = DAR. When I started there they allowed boys for the first time. Granted I was only starting middle school then. but it was like 26 boys to 480 girls
 
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"You're the first and only boy in the school this year, which otherwise only girls can attend " . Hmmm , doesn't make sense all girls school but you (MC) are exception, much better it will make sense if youre a teacher or a professor instead and besides no rival male means no fun for me . It feels like girls will only jump at me because there is no other guy around.
Thanks for the constructive criticism.
The reason you are the only boy at school is described in the game.
Personally, I don't like it when it's too easy and the game doesn't have a grind, but too much grind is anoying as well.
Unfortunately, there is already a successful game with a teacher as protagonist, which is why I refrained from doing it.
Nevertheless, I'll see what I can do.
 

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I think the plot and MC is fine, no need to change it up.
Hoping you explore some femdom routes, it can help make situations challenging and something for MC to try to overcome.
It's a good start, I think since you're aware of how annoying grind is you'll balance it fine.
 
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seekin4porn

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UI needs tweaking: the font on the calendar isn't very good to read (at least for me), navigation between rooms would be easier if you didn't have to return all the way, a fixed text under the photos would be better than one that just shows when hovering the mouse over them (since there isn't much of visual cue of which is which).
 
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el kaskis

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I really, really liked the models, I think that there is great potential even though is still an early release. I'm truly looking forward to see what becomes of this game.
 
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Pinsel

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After intro, what can you do? I dont see any girl or can skip some time. And the map system is hell, at least a return button are realy helpfull.
 
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After intro, what can you do? I dont see any girl or can skip some time. And the map system is hell, at least a return button are realy helpfull.
After the intro you are in your bedroom. From there the game has a 3 part story with Emma (she is the biology teacher) as well as some Q&A with Olivia (the headmistress) and Abigail (the trust teacher) in their offices.
With a click on the bed, you can skip either an hour or a day.
What exactly bothers you about the map system that I can adjust if necessary?
 

Pinsel

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After the intro you are in your bedroom. From there the game has a 3 part story with Emma (she is the biology teacher) as well as some Q&A with Olivia (the headmistress) and Abigail (the trust teacher) in their offices.
With a click on the bed, you can skip either an hour or a day.
What exactly bothers you about the map system that I can adjust if necessary?
Well there are six times a day and you have to klick trough all rooms (now 6*22-132 lokation per day to check). And wenn there is nothing, you have to chose from the begining again. And i think over time there will be more locations. So a "return" button in the room to the sub map (school/dorm)
would be nice. Now it is no fun at all

Maybe a star, heart or what else,when someone is in a room.
A shortcut for "my room"
Oh and some lighten up on things, when they are interakv


Normaly i delete sandbox game right after i discover that, but give now and then a go. Because in most cases the code get a redone and you have to play from scratch again. It is the same with VNs but you can go trough much much faster.
i dont play sandbox games after a first look. After 10 or more updates, looking agian.
 
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Hallo innovation. Tested your game. I tested now.

Played the German version. It was my first game I found here in German. Ein Träumchen^^.

Let me typical German and come to the point.
The grind is too much and the grind has no real gameplay.
Let me explain. I played it for 45 min. 45 min. in which I only have to do two things click learn Biologie for 50 times(clicks) and attend the Bio class 3 times. I played 45 min. and get on daydreaming scene in lingerie.
You don't have time to pressure, so you can't lose. The only thing is how much work do I as player invest to get to the content.
I don't want to bring it up, but I got Big city pleasure vibes from that. My review of this game speaks for itself.
Sandbox with your hint system will work, but a sandbox with that amount of grind will not work.
I think the style and variance of the Women is good, and I think there is interest in such a kind of game but not in this particular gameplay.

Something to the type of language in the German version. I guess German is not your main language. becouse the German at least was very as we say "hölzern" (wooden). They sound like robots. There is a lack of expression like: "Ein Träumchen" or "Eine Schule voller Mädels es wird Fantastisch, kanns kaum erwarten."
In an elite boarding school the teacher would not introduce themselves with their First name.
In German, we have two ways to speak to people an informal(du engl:thou) and a formal(Sie engl:you) one. With teachers, we use the formal variant of course. The MC talks with the headmaster in an informal manner.

I don't know if this is something which helps you. I think there is too little to say if there is enough interest in your project.

Ich hoffe ich hab dich nicht entmutigt.
 

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Hallo innovation. Tested your game. I tested now.

Played the German version. It was my first game I found here in German. Ein Träumchen^^.

Let me typical German and come to the point.
The grind is too much and the grind has no real gameplay.
Let me explain. I played it for 45 min. 45 min. in which I only have to do two things click learn Biologie for 50 times(clicks) and attend the Bio class 3 times. I played 45 min. and get on daydreaming scene in lingerie.
You don't have time to pressure, so you can't lose. The only thing is how much work do I as player invest to get to the content.
I don't want to bring it up, but I got Big city pleasure vibes from that. My review of this game speaks for itself.
Sandbox with your hint system will work, but a sandbox with that amount of grind will not work.
I think the style and variance of the Women is good, and I think there is interest in such a kind of game but not in this particular gameplay.

Something to the type of language in the German version. I guess German is not your main language. becouse the German at least was very as we say "hölzern" (wooden). They sound like robots. There is a lack of expression like: "Ein Träumchen" or "Eine Schule voller Mädels es wird Fantastisch, kanns kaum erwarten."
In an elite boarding school the teacher would not introduce themselves with their First name.
In German, we have two ways to speak to people an informal(du engl:thou) and a formal(Sie engl:you) one. With teachers, we use the formal variant of course. The MC talks with the headmaster in an informal manner.

I don't know if this is something which helps you. I think there is too little to say if there is enough interest in your project.

Ich hoffe ich hab dich nicht entmutigt.

In fact, German is my main language :D
It's just the way I would talk. But now I have asked my girlfriend to write some content with me. We'll also go into the story so far.

With the surname I thought from the beginning that I wouldn't want to use it. Your point of criticism is very clear and I will very likely include the surname.

I'll take a closer look at the grind. I also know games that generally have a lot of grind (mostly you have to earn money).

The criticism tends to motivate me more.
I only have in mind that the people here expect more than I can deliver.
After all, it's the first time I program and design and such.

Vielen lieben Dank für deine investierte Zeit.
 
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Und ich danke dir für dein Werk.

Free Forums are always lets say nasty. But it is the only place where you get true feedback.
Patreon is a double-edged sword. It is mandatory because that's the way you as content creator gets paid. On the other hand you don't get criticized very much there. It's like a bubble.

I think as long as everything is constructive here you will be fine. You just have to filter for trolls.

You are brave enough to create something and go down in the Arena of F95.

Und dafür Hut ab.
 

DOM76210

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I get that it's an early version, but making the player go through 3 weeks of absolutely nothing just to attend a Monday post-morning class to see the teacher dream-strip to her underwear is not a very good start. I get that there will eventually be other things the player is doing during those 3 weeks, but it's a terrible way to present your project at this point.
 
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