Okay just finished it. 1st, REALLY enjoying the story right now & characters.
The only issues I have is that the grammar/phrasing/etc needs work. Even though I CAN understand what is trying to be said I still shouldn't have to auto-correct while reading it. And it looks like multiple times different languages show up as if characters are speaking/thinking in different languages when they really are not.
The other is that there is literally only like 3 choices in all of chapter 1. Though I absolutely LOVE the fact that is felt really long, the lack of choices bugged me still. Even if it was just choices on what are character could think of certain characters looks, or the events going on, even if these didn't matter, having these additional choices would contribute to feeling like you are playing you rather than just somebody with your first name (Or chosen name). Unless I somehow missed if this was suppose to be kinetic lol?
It would be a lot better if the sleazy comments that the mc is "forced" to think were removed when there really is no need for them, or at least give options, (For Ex: "Think pervy thought" or "think nothing"). Honestly, this takes away from the story and feels, well, forced. Feels unnatural as is. Like they are just slapped onto places ALMOST left and right, for the simple reason of "Because it is an adult visual novel". All this does is hurt the otherwise great storytelling.
Aside from these, this has potential to be S Tier quality, really enjoyed what is there and hope these things get improved/fixed. Right now, because of these I would say it is B Tier.
Keep up the great work and I am looking forward to future releases!!!