Others Corruption of Champions II [v0.8.17] [Savin/Salamander Studios]

[Sacred_Lamb]

End game is the champion stuck in there like the gods from Fear & Hunger, till the time Cait goes alone, fucks Tollus and now every Mallach temple is full of bald, ugly whores

Garth having kids with every specie available and all of them looking wonky and dorky like 90's saturday morning cartoons being a main plot that never gets expanded

Truly a fitting end. Cursed asf tho, been play F&H recently too.

It was some edit of the monster girls encyclopedia someone did on netorarebooru, which seems to be a real thing

That's crazy, an NTR version of Danbooru. I'm in awe and horrified. Where do I find this site?

 

[Sacred_Lamb]

200 pages of Tobslop are ready, with a million more well on the way.
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She's much more of a sassy bitch in the Wayfort, than she was in the dungeon. But at least she's not insufferable like weeb foxes were.

Is...is it trash

 

[Peasantry]

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Is...is it trash

Read her intro and a few of her sex scenes. Long-winded but palatable, though I confess a slight bias due to the intense 'correction needed' vibe she gives off

 

[Sacred_Lamb]

Spoiler: It's a proto Mallach church

Looks very...familiar. Excellent Villian/Antagonist material tho, temptation is hard because it promises pleasure, so having an Antagonistic force that does this will be interesting. At least for the Goonners, Your freedom or Pleasure? Which way modern man

 

[Sacred_Lamb]

Read her intro and a few of her sex scenes. Long-winded but palatable, though I confess a slight bias due to the intense 'correction needed' vibe she gives off

Mhmm, sounds like classic Tobs - will talk the excitement out of anything. At least it sounds interesting. Wanna share an excerpt?

 

[Peasantry]

Mhmm, sounds like classic Tobs - will talk the excitement out of anything. At least it sounds interesting. Wanna share an excerpt?

Sure- here's a snippet from her intro, and snippet from her Mating scene.

 

[Peasantry]

That the sex scenes are a little enjoyable is probably due to how good a shtick 'fuck Olivia until she breaks character' is. I don't recommend anyone bother with the patslut scene though, the other sex scenes are a few paragraphs too long, that one is several pages too long

 

[Sacred_Lamb]

That the sex scenes are a little enjoyable is probably due to how good a shtick 'fuck Olivia until she breaks character' is. I don't recommend anyone bother with the patslut scene though, the other sex scenes are a few paragraphs too long, that one is several pages too long

Classic Tobs, the gimmick of fucking the bratty Tsundere until the facade breaks is timeless and has nothing to do with Tobs.

 

[Sacred_Lamb]

Sure- here's a snippet from her intro, and snippet from her Mating scene.

Thanks for humoring tho

 

[Peasantry]

Classic Tobs, the gimmick of fucking the bratty Tsundere until the facade breaks is timeless and has nothing to do with Tobs.

Even Tobs can't ruin everything (though I bet he could make a damn good attempt)

 

[Alterism]

Mhmm, sounds like classic Tobs - will talk the excitement out of anything. At least it sounds interesting. Wanna share an excerpt?

Bad dog

Read the content yourself!
Form your own opinion!

Anyways Tobs shows a surprising amount of restraint this time around.
Outside of the obvious mistakes

and some repeating phrase the only thing that really stuck out (beyond the flow of one of the sex scenes) was the usual tobs tendencies of having a character toss a proverb only for another to state a fact of life which makes the other acquiesce. But hell, that's just noticing a trend. Not really negative.

Surprisingly speaks in a voice that's slightly different than the tobs usual. Though there's still that~
hmm... I guess we'll call it 'lucid introspection' that shows up in nearly every single character Tobs has worked on.

S'alright

 

[YouShallNotLol]

MGE is a really weird wish fullfilment setting that focuses on that first and making sense later so i wouldn't trust it to make sense on any level of it.

And yet KC wrote entire fucking books solely dedicated to flashing out the "lore" and in-universe events. Lol.
Like that one about fantasy France (Lescatie) being hyped up as this important and powerful major faction, only to then get Thanos Snapped out of existence by a single succubus. Not even a particularly powerful succubus or a demon lord's underling, just your average mid-game miniboss. There's entire hordes of monsters which are leagues above her on the scales of power.
The most insulting part isn't even all that. It's that there's hundreds of succibi just like one that can solo strongest human nations, and they all do what exactly? The lore insinuates (and sometimes states outright) that they all are busy either developing weapons of mass destruction (country-wide demonification spells) or actively conquering human nations that still remain. And yet, literally none of it matters, and gets brushed off to the side in new books.

It's literally the most basic newbie writer pitfall. Creating entire races and sub-races of Mary Sues, and then trying to justify how the world at large (aside a couple exceptions) is still the same as it was a thousand years ago when the apocalypse began.

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From the cursory read I had, it's not that bad. But it's too bloated, as all TOBS's writing is. Just her initial meeting scene in the Wayfort takes up 5 presses of the [Continue] button, each screen having a scrollbar of its own.

Sure- here's a snippet from her intro, and snippet from her Mating scene.

>Luka
Luka MGQ (a.k.a. John MGQ) is that you?

 

[Peasantry]

>Luka
Luka MGQ (a.k.a. John MGQ) is that you?

Why yes, I have used that as the default name for every male MC in a hentai game for over a decade, how could you tell?

 

[YouShallNotLol]

Why yes, I have used that as the default name for every male MC in a hentai game for over a decade, how could you tell?

I tapped into the Noosphere.

 

[Peasantry]

I tapped into the Noosphere.
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Ah yes, the collective accumulated power of

 

[CrimsonSongbird1982]

They really need to stop boasting about how many pages are in an update when it comes to TOBS. If anything, they should be promoting whenever he lets them edit it under fifty.

You mean the fanbase doesn't want 969 pages dedicated to one character from a one off dungeon from the guy who writes like he's trying to meet an unreasonable word count on a college essay?

If you genderbend the pack they wont have dicks to fuck her and cuck you, unacceptable. You do know this dev team right?

The obvious compromise is turn the pack into femboys so (mostly) everyone's happy. Which is funny since her submissive bad end has her cuck the pack but can't have that in the main game.

The whole setting seems pretty fucked up and grimdark, consent is basically non existent there, there's the weird body horror of the abyssal ones, the roving bands of amazon rapist, and isn't there a cult that has a focus on little girls or something?

Wasn't there also a weird lore drop where specifically gay men turn into monster girls to fuck their besties? MGE is undeniably influential but weird af.

Surprisingly speaks in a voice that's slightly different than the tobs usual. Though there's still that~
hmm... I guess we'll call it 'lucid introspection' that shows up in nearly every single character Tobs has worked on.

He's marinating us. Preparing us for the crock pot. Luring us back in with a false sense of comfort. Trying to convince us he's changed. Then bam. Next week adds 300 pages to her, no grammatical corrections, no proofreading, the update page visibly stained by the tears of a dev team that lament what they unleashed on their audience but are powerless to stop because he's friends with their boss and is willing to write whatever he's asked. Except the kitsune I guess but that's not so bad since he botched them anyway.

 

[YouShallNotLol]

The obvious compromise is turn the pack into femboys so (mostly) everyone's happy. Which is funny since her submissive bad end has her cuck the pack but can't have that in the main game.

Yes. ALL women are strictly bisexual (no matter monster or human), and any man who deviates from heterosexuality gets transformed into a monster girl (Alp, succubus subspecies).

Anyways. Have you guys noticed any reactivity from Olivia's content? I noticed straight away how she was reprimanding me for not having had repaired the Wayfort. Singling out random cobwebs and complaining about general state of disrepair.

 

[MoneyMan181]

Read the content yourself!
Form your own opinion!

 

[namelessdudewithnoname]

So how likely is fucking around with the safe editor going to cause some mayhem If I just want to enable the new content.
I'm happy to have my wolves (female).

 

[dakilladj]

I really hope there's content for keeping Olivia as bratty as possible where she remains that holier then thou girlboss. I know she has a preg expansion from what i read which i doubt might keep that spirit.