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Your character is fine, but looks kinda "standard", at least for my taste. It can fit in a VN, but for a main character I'd put a bit more personality in it. There are many nice morphing packs for body and face to give a simple G8F a unique look. I'm not a fan of the hair either, but mostly because of it's quality. Some hair assets provide their own hairline adjustment, otherwise some head morphs can help. Regarding the skin you can look for other character assets. Even if the shaping doesn't meet your requirements the skin can be used separately on the G8F. Furter improvements for a bit more structure can be done via the bump map value in the "surfaces" pane. More imperfections and other stuff can be done with Skin Builder and, if you have saved the surfaces from SB in your dedicated folder, with Photoshop or any other image editing software.
Edit (forgot about the dead eyes): This is often solved with rotating the perspective a bit and the pose the eyes back to the camera/viewer, so the pupils aren't exactly centered in the eye hole. A different eye color can also help sometimes.