HTML Abandoned Demitransference [v0.2.0] [UnrulyDogBoy]

[Deleted member 2666402]

I replied the Trent top again to see the changes and I liked the extra bit with the belt.
Clearly Trent has some hangups about belts in particular and I'm assuming his brother beats him with one.
It is stronger indeed. I think I noticed a couple extra lines in there throughout, but it might be just my imagination.
Thanks for sprucing it up, I appreciate it!

There is still more needed. I need it to be clear that these encounters are forging a bond between you and Trent.

I appreciate when people tell me when parts of the story don’t work. I have the larger story in my head so sometime I read more into what I wrote than what I wrote.

Any feedback on the Nym - Ryder back and forth over drinking buddies? Since our mythological friends are 1000s of years old, I like inserting characters into history/myths. I hope find some humor in this.

unruly

 

[alexxxx000]

There is still more needed. I need it to be clear that these encounters are forging a bond between you and Trent.

I appreciate when people tell me when parts of the story don’t work. I have the larger story in my head so sometime I read more into what I wrote than what I wrote.

Any feedback on the Nym - Ryder back and forth over drinking buddies? Since our mythological friends are 1000s of years old, I like inserting characters into history/myths. I hope find some humor in this.

unruly

I know what you mean. I have so many ideas for this thing I'm writing but I just can't seem to take it off the ground because every time I reread it, it just doesn't construe exactly what I had in mind. I'm stuck for more than a month.

That being said, I got the forging of the bond with that last update you did. When Trent said you were his, it felt deep. Not just something you say when having dominating sex.

I should talk more about the other parts of it, not just the sex. Sorry for not bringing it up earlier. Your game is about more than smut and that's what's special about it.
Nym is truly an intriguing character and her banter with Ryder is really fun(and funny). I specially liked the Agatha Christie name drop. They sound like really old buddies and it reads that way.
I was skeptical to the bisexual aspect of it at first, since we gays rarely get any cool games and I was scared of it taking over the game. So I was surprised how much I liked Nym.
I loved that she emailed her presentation and complained about Ryder being a malware magnet.

Although she might not be my choice for the MC's trainer in game, if this were my real actual life, I'd probably pick her. She seems miles ahead of Ryder as a teacher. We've yet to see Grey in action, but I doubt he'll be a better teacher than fabulous Nym.
Grey scares me a bit. In a lot of ways. From a sexual standpoint the scary part excites me, but as a mentor... I dunno if I would be able to handle his way of treating me. Can't wait to see him in game though.

A pitfall of those games is that usually characters don't have a clear voice or POV. Their art might look different, but the dialogue is bland and could be said by any character.
So kudos to you for having such a clear vision, well delineated characters, cool humor and overall great writing.

I'll try to be even more complete when giving feedback in the future, since you seem to enjoy it.

 

[greenray]

UnrulyDogBoy
What a creative fanclub you have. Usually I watch something like: why can't I fuck mom\dad\neighbor's squirrel...; add more lace panties.
It's good that we have our own divine underwear and good friends.

 

[Deleted member 2666402]

I know what you mean. I have so many ideas for this thing I'm writing but I just can't seem to take it off the ground because every time I reread it, it just doesn't construe exactly what I had in mind. I'm stuck for more than a month.

That being said, I got the forging of the bond with that last update you did. When Trent said you were his, it felt deep. Not just something you say when having dominating sex.

I should talk more about the other parts of it, not just the sex. Sorry for not bringing it up earlier. Your game is about more than smut and that's what's special about it.
Nym is truly an intriguing character and her banter with Ryder is really fun(and funny). I specially liked the Agatha Christie name drop. They sound like really old buddies and it reads that way.
I was skeptical to the bisexual aspect of it at first, since we gays rarely get any cool games and I was scared of it taking over the game. So I was surprised how much I liked Nym.
I loved that she emailed her presentation and complained about Ryder being a malware magnet.

Although she might not be my choice for the MC's trainer in game, if this were my real actual life, I'd probably pick her. She seems miles ahead of Ryder as a teacher. We've yet to see Grey in action, but I doubt he'll be a better teacher than fabulous Nym.
Grey scares me a bit. In a lot of ways. From a sexual standpoint the scary part excites me, but as a mentor... I dunno if I would be able to handle his way of treating me. Can't wait to see him in game though.

A pitfall of those games is that usually characters don't have a clear voice or POV. Their art might look different, but the dialogue is bland and could be said by any character.
So kudos to you for having such a clear vision, well delineated characters, cool humor and overall great writing.

I'll try to be even more complete when giving feedback in the future, since you seem to enjoy it.

UnrulyDogBoy
What a creative fanclub you have. Usually I watch something like: why can't I fuck mom\dad\neighbor's squirrel...; add more lace panties.
It's good that we have our own divine underwear and good friends.

Alexxxx If you are writing a story/game and want some eyes on it, there are some really good people that post here who would give you really good feedback.

I am not sure our MC is going to survive training with Grey. DOM MC and SUB MC, Grey is a tough mentor.

You are correct, I am obsessed with feedback. I am fortunate to have players (yourself included) that are very generous with their thoughts. Sorry if my last post implied any deficiency in your comments.

Green What a great idea for a side story a threesome mom, dad, and the neighbor's squirrel. Then I can add FURRY as a tag to the game and there are so many NUT based puns I can make. I am sorry there has not been more development of the divine underwear in awhile.

Unruly

 

[greenray]

Then I'll pack my things and go for a walk until you come to your senses.
Although... if the character severely injures his head during training or gets an overdose from the "swill" of a lustful horned friend, he may well fall into a trippy coma with such strange visions. Well, someone has to be in a divine underwear (perhaps upgraded with a bonus).
In other cases, I'm on the way out

 

[greenray]

Look, I'm going to PR you now Maybe I need to increase the size? The larger the size, the more impressive and attractive.

 

[alexxxx000]

Alexxxx If you are writing a story/game and want some eyes on it, there are some really good people that post here who would give you really good feedback.

I am not sure our MC is going to survive training with Grey. DOM MC and SUB MC, Grey is a tough mentor.

You are correct, I am obsessed with feedback. I am fortunate to have players (yourself included) that are very generous with their thoughts. Sorry if my last post implied any deficiency in your comments.

Green What a great idea for a side story a threesome mom, dad, and the neighbor's squirrel. Then I can add FURRY as a tag to the game and there are so many NUT based puns I can make. I am sorry there has not been more development of the divine underwear in awhile.

Unruly

It's all good, Unruly! I want to give feedback and you just reminded me I was focusing too much on the sex aspect of it and not talking about other equally important stuff.

You actually inspired me to write and I've been writing a bunch today. I'm still figuring out my plan for it, so it's not ready to share as of yet, but hopefully it will be after Christmas maybe.
I don't know how to code though, and I'm not sure if it's going to be a hassle. I'm focusing on the writing and the planning of threads.
if you have any tips and suggestions regarding Sugarcube, I'd love to learn. As soon as I feel I have enough writing done for a 0.010 version or something, then I'll focus on the coding part of it.

UnrulyDogBoy
What a creative fanclub you have. Usually I watch something like: why can't I fuck mom\dad\neighbor's squirrel...; add more lace panties.
It's good that we have our own divine underwear and good friends.

It's also cool when the creator is so open to suggestions and feedback. I've also noticed that the gay players are usually nicer to developers. Probably because gay games are such a rare gift and we are ecstatic just to have it at all.

 

[Deleted member 2666402]

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[aperson179]

sooo, is it possible to make tiffany transformation optional? i dont really into those transformation and wonder if there is a way to progress story without the change. (not being transphobic or anything just i am not into it and looking for a way to avoid it)

 

[xxx_chris2018]

sooo, is it possible to make tiffany transformation optional? i dont really into those transformation and wonder if there is a way to progress story without the change. (not being transphobic or anything just i am not into it and looking for a way to avoid it)

Interesting question. I just don't like titties or vag at all, so I'd rather have an option to avoid that type of interaction with her as well.

 

[basicgarlic]

Interesting question. I just don't like titties or vag at all, so I'd rather have an option to avoid that type of interaction with her as well.

I'd say the same but i don't think that being able to avoid it all would be the solution, because then some would say that they don't want to take any "powers" from Trent (people who probably want tiff's powers), or want to skip other things and that is too much work to make all the paths.
Since we still don't know how that part is going to be i'd say it is better just wait, see how is done and then try to avoid the content that we don't like(probably after the transformations you can avoid it all).

 

[xxx_chris2018]

I'd say the same but i don't think that being able to avoid it all would be the solution, because then some would say that they don't want to take any "powers" from Trent (people who probably want tiff's powers), or want to skip other things and that is too much work to make all the paths.
Since we still don't know how that part is going to be i'd say it is better just wait, see how is done and then try to avoid the content that we don't like(probably after the transformations you can avoid it all).

Yeah, and whatever Unruly does will be perfect and follow his vision. But he started adding options to avoid some sexual/nude scenes with some characters, so I'm saying something like that, perhaps. But, if not, the game will still be amazing. I can just quickly scroll through the pictures I don't want to see. I play some str8 games because they're good, even if I have to skip the images.

 

[basicgarlic]

Yeah, and whatever Unruly does will be perfect and follow his vision. But he started adding options to avoid some sexual/nude scenes with some characters, so I'm saying something like that, perhaps. But, if not, the game will still be amazing. I can just quickly scroll through the pictures I don't want to see. I play some str8 games because they're good, even if I have to skip the images.

oh yeah i totally get it, but at least to take the powers would be difficult to skip. For more scenes before that i totally think that unruly is going to or skip or let us go for other content, so no problem there.
And yeah sometimes you have to play other games that have things you don't like but just reading-skiping helps

 

[Deleted member 2666402]

Poll #1 Results:
1. ASSISTANT COACH JOEL - Changing to new image - Porn star Griffin Barrows
2. HORCLIFF - Change to new Image - Porn star Allen King
3. TWINS - Remain the same - porn stars Micky and Ajay

WINNER FOR POLL #1 - BASIC GARLIC!!

Poll #2 will go live soon (need moderators to remove poll #1 first). The updated PDF is posted above (quoted below) and also linked in my signature.

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[Deleted member 2666402]

sooo, is it possible to make tiffany transformation optional? i dont really into those transformation and wonder if there is a way to progress story without the change. (not being transphobic or anything just i am not into it and looking for a way to avoid it)

Hello and thank you for your question and let me say, I get it. But...

In chapter 1, players will meet and transform Trent, Jake, and Tiffany. The story requires an introduction to all the characters and your base transformations: strength, cock size, confidence/dominance, intelligence, charisma, willpower (this is an change coming to Jake story), masculine/feminine body type, male/female genitals. You will not be able to access chapter 2, or for that matter all of chapter 1 unless you do the Festival event with Tiffany.

However, I am adding a NO SEX version to the Festival. It was a major oversight on my part not to include it in the first release. It is even in my plans for you to have a no sex conversation that gives more lore, so I can't explain how I left it out. Also there will be an option in your conversation with HC following the Festival (not yet released) that will remove your femine attributes and prevent you from manifesting them in the future (like in the training scene with Deshawn). I really need to get that HC scene out ASAP (look for it tomorrow).

So to recap. Sorry, the MC will have some female parts for one day but there is a patch coming that avoids having sex with these parts AND you can avoid those parts in the future.

Yeah, and whatever Unruly does will be perfect and follow his vision.

Thank you, but you have far too much confidence in me! Most of my decisions are a compromise between what I wish the game could be and what I am able to write/code.

Unruly

 

[xxx_chris2018]

Thank you, but you have far too much confidence in me! Most of my decisions are a compromise between what I wish the game could be and what I am able to write/code.

That was exactly my problem. But we appreciate all the effort!!!

 

[xxx_chris2018]

FYI UnrulyDogBoy there's a typo in the poll. You have 3 options for Character #6, but you labeled the C option #7. And the B option for John is #19.

 

[Deleted member 2666402]

Quick note about poll #2. It contains a lot of side characters (most from the Victor side story). Remember you can vote for more than one if you like both/all the images.

 

[Deleted member 2666402]

FYI UnrulyDogBoy there's a typo in the poll. You have 3 options for Character #6, but you labeled the C option #7. And the B option for John is #19.

Crap. Okay, I'm going to take it down and put back up.

 

[xxx_chris2018]

Crap. Okay, I'm going to take it down and put back up.

I don't think it's a huge deal, we've got the right names, so I think we can figure it out, haha