As for what you mentioned about the MC thanking Maliel for taking him to Vallerie, maybe I didn't make that clear, but he was thanking her for saving him, not exactly for taking him to Vallerie.
Oh no, it was clear, I 100% understood that he was thanking her for saving his life but we go back to the matter of his personality, the problem is that this “thank you” comes after he already meet Vallerie and chatted with Maliel in which he learned numerous things :
1.- Vallerie lied to him
2.- Vallerie used him
3.- Vallerie enslaved him (and since he now is a slave and has to remain in the “club” 4.- She kidnapped him)
5.- Vallerie tortured him into submission
6.- Vallerie has put him into forced labor since he has to obey or suffer the consequences
7.- Maliel has worked for Vallerie for sometime and knows what kind of person she is
8.- Maliel knew that Vallerie was planning something with him, maybe not at the beginning but certainly after following her orders and seeing that it was him; And most than likely knew that it involved the slavery since Mal has being working with Val for a while.
And despite him knowing all of this, he just thanks her for saving his life, without asking questions like :
“Did you knew that she was gonna enslave me?”
“Why didn’t you lie? why didn’t you brought me to a safe place or a hospital, said that the mission was a failure and I was dead?”
As if he was completely okay with all the abuse above and it was not a big deal.
Even if he is thankful that she saved him when he was knock-out, she still was the one that brought him to such a place, but he seems to not care or be fully okay with it.
I for one know that if that were me, even though I would be grateful for her saving my life, I would also be pissed that she brought me to some sort of gang-lord to be enslaved, even more so because “we” had history and seemed to be in good terms, and I would want answers for why didn’t she took me to somewhere else (hence the questions)
About Laura, I honestly hadn't thought that way, while I wanted badly to give her an impression of someone provocative and a slightly mysterious, I ended up leaving the player with very few choices indeed. I will definitely pay more attention to this and change some things. Did you feel that way about any other characters?
Did I feel that way about any other character?
Umm no, not really, Laura was the only one, though being more impartial and objective, you could have also given the player the choice of how to react towards the advances of Maliel when she is asking for the MC to make her feel good in exchange for the favor, like when you gave the option to enter into the bathroom when she was in the bathtub or not. This scene didn’t affect me because I like Maliel je, but not everyone will (maybe), so, if I didn’t or she was Laura instead, I would certainly would want a way to say no to that je
Outside of that, Im also not a fan of femdom, but I understand that that is part of the premise and a plot point so I’m fine with it, as long as it doesn’t go too hard.
As for the other characters, well, so far okay, but it’s too soon to tell.
Once again, Zoe and Annie are the best, specially Zoe, congrats on making such a beautiful character.
As a side-note : Maliel’s wings feel and seem too stiff, look kinda fake, it would be nice if you could improve them, but its not a big issue if you can’t.
