Of course, my pleasure!
Clementine is a character who lives talking about other peoples. She appears to have nothing to share about herself. The interesting secrets to discover are all Jade's (as far as the story is developed). If she is going to be the main character you have to make sure that she transmits sensations and feelings to the player.
I completely understand that this is a game where there will be progression (possibly corruption?) but Clementine should encourage us to progress WITH HER. So far, all we have is the discovery, through Clementine, that Jade has a ManyFans account, that she danced with another man, that they went to a party thanks to her. At all times the center of the story is Jade, and it is Clementine who puts her in that position, more due to her own demerit than due to Jade's merits. Why can't Clementine integrate the players into her life, instead of snooping into Jade's life? Clementine is "vanilla"? Nerd? Ok, fine! Let me participate in her lifestyle and I, the real-life player, will take care of corrupting her. Why not imbibe into a game of D&D and corrupt it in the process? It's just an idea...
Do you know why I didn't say anything about this in my previous post? Because you already know all that. Argumentatively Jade is not necessary. It is up to the real-life player to modify/corrupt Clementine, so Jade's interaction is not necessary to achieve this. You added Jade because you are aware that Clementine has nothing interesting to contribute.
I'm not going to comment on the art because this is a chat game, the images are not supposed to be its strong point, but the writing and conversations have to be where this game shines. I'm writing all this to you because the game is just starting, so it's easy to rectify. I hope you have good fortune with the game!