VN Ren'Py Divinity [Update 2] [toasterkun]

[garbage.kun]

will the MC heal his body at some point or will he stay like monster the whole time ?

Hi Renetta,

This is a bit of spoiler so,

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But please note that this is how i currently plan it. a lot could need adjusting when i need to write and render that outcome

Thanks

 

[Son_of_ogre]

Wow, only 1 four star guy out of 15 ratings? That's crazy I will give a shot soon!

 

[garbage.kun]

Wow, only 1 four star guy out of 15 ratings? That's crazy I will give a shot soon!

Hi, son_of_ogre,

Thanks for giving it a chance. Although i hope you will find it interesting, Divinity is a very niche game and opinions about it have been very polarized the actual score is probably much lower 0_0

Still, thank you for trying

 

[Son_of_ogre]

Still, thank you for trying

Lol I haven't even tried yet but ok I will try it soon.

 

[dadencuto3]

Hmm... after i've thought about it, I guess there are some similarities in my description to the original sin narrative hahah

But, the MC and her "sister" are not Adam and Eve

They are more like...

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Thanks!

Loved your game, renders are greats. Many thanks and hope you keep up great work.
Also that's just my joke about the game "Divinity: Original Sin" by Larian Studio, lol. First thing come to my mind when seeing the name.

 

[garbage.kun]

Loved your game, renders are greats. Many thanks and hope you keep up great work.
Also that's just my joke about the game "Divinity: Original Sin" by Larian Studio, lol. First thing come to my mind when seeing the name.

Ah i see thanks, i'm glad to see that there are people who liked my renders

yeah, it happens to me too. whenever i tried to search my own game in google, unless i added my name to the query, i got the Divinity series by Larian lol

thanks dadencuto3!

 

[doujinftw]

Original sin? Yo Larian Studios this guy stole your thang

 

[garbage.kun]

Original sin? Yo Larian Studios this guy stole your thang

And i guess Larian stole if from the Bible too I think i "stole" more ideas from Paradise Lost and Screwtape Letters though

 

[Blahbleh541]

very interesting game. i do hope that the servant can become pregnant at some point in the future.

 

[garbage.kun]

very interesting game. i do hope that the servant can become pregnant at some point in the future.

Thank you very much Blahbleh541,

Unfortunately, currently I'm not planning to add that content in the near future . The way I see it, its the one thing the Siblings try to avoid due what the result would be (as alluded in the last two chapters of the current update). I'm currently focusing on a single path for now, and having the Servant pregnant for the last 2/3 would be a very difficult to write around m(_ _)m with my limited writing skill. I did plan to add something similar as in showing what his body desires (which is to impregnate the Servant), but i've removed that dialogue and render from the scene in the village for now because i was still unsatisfied with how the plot flows.

Here's the scrapped render (an old one, and not really up to par with the current renders )



Thanks you very much for thinking its interesting

 

[Engulfed]

This game's writer has talent, but not experience. Too much description, too many adjectives, not enough reaction from the MC to what's happening. Reminds me of how I wrote in my late teens, trying to stuff every sentence with big words and languid prose. It's show-offy and gets in the way of the story.

Here's some unasked for advice - cut back on the flowery adjectives. Stories aren't Amazon packages. They don't need any more padding than is strictly necessary. Don't be afraid of sentences that are short and to-the-point. Your readers will thank you.

Descriptive text needs to be intercut with reactions, emotions, judgments. Players want to be told not just what is happening, but how characters are feeling about what's happening. Preferably in a way that's personal and not like a detached observer describing their own stream of consciousness.

And remember that VN's are visual. If the image onscreen is telling a story (and every image should) then you don't need to describe it again. This isn't a book.

Otherwise keep up the good work.

 

[garbage.kun]

This game's writer has talent, but not experience. Too much description, too many adjectives, not enough reaction from the MC to what's happening. Reminds me of how I wrote in my late teens, trying to stuff every sentence with big words and languid prose. It's show-offy and gets in the way of the story.

Here's some unasked for advice - cut back on the flowery adjectives. Stories aren't Amazon packages. They don't need any more padding than is strictly necessary. Don't be afraid of sentences that are short and to-the-point. Your readers will thank you.

Descriptive text needs to be intercut with reactions, emotions, judgments. Players want to be told not just what is happening, but how characters are feeling about what's happening. Preferably in a way that's personal and not like a detached observer describing their own stream of consciousness.

And remember that VN's are visual. If the image onscreen is telling a story (and every image should) then you don't need to describe it again. This isn't a book.

Otherwise keep up the good work.

Hi Engulfed,

Thank you for your comment. Although i'm glad you think that i have talent, i have to say that i know that is not correct The reason why i can fully know this is that i do have talent in something else, and in that specific field that i'm talented in, i know :

1. which part of it is wrong
2. why it is wrong
3. how to fix it

While in the field of writing, i failed at the (1), and even when people told me (1) and (2), i don't concretely know how to do (3) because the first two was only told to me, and not that i actually understood it True, part of it comes with experience. But experience is not something I can acquire fast enough for this story.

That field that i'm talented in translate to..maybe 1/4 of the process of writing, but prose, wording, flow, rhythm, all those basics of writings are just too out of reach for me 0_0a

I will take your advice to mind, but, to tell you the truth, even I don't have high hopes that i can do that to an acceptable degree All i can do is try my best

But thanks for trying and taking the time and effort to give me those advices


on a side note, for my patreons, here are my subscribestar renders for those who can't access subscribestar



Thank you all

 

[Engulfed]

Hi Engulfed,

Thank you for your comment. Although i'm glad you think that i have talent, i have to say that i know that is not correct The reason why i can fully know this is that i do have talent in something else, and in that specific field that i'm talented in, i know :

1. which part of it is wrong
2. why it is wrong
3. how to fix it

While in the field of writing, i failed at the (1), and even when people told me (1) and (2), i don't concretely know how to do (3) because the first two was only told to me, and not that i actually understood it True, part of it comes with experience. But experience is not something I can acquire fast enough for this story.

That field that i'm talented in translate to..maybe 1/4 of the process of writing, but prose, wording, flow, rhythm, all those basics of writings are just too out of reach for me 0_0a

I will take your advice to mind, but, to tell you the truth, even I don't have high hopes that i can do that to an acceptable degree All i can do is try my best

But thanks for trying and taking the time and effort to give me those advices


on a side note, for my patreons, here are my subscribestar renders for those who can't access subscribestar

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Thank you all

You do have talent, I can see it in your writing. The more you use it the better you'll learn how to use it. You'll get there. You're already doing better than 95% of games I've played. Experience comes from practice. Just keep writing. And reading too. Read writers you admire and copy how they write. It might seem like cheating, but it isn't. If you were a boxer it would make sense to copy how Ali, Tyson, or Usyk throw their punches. Same goes for writing.

 

[CryMaker]

I am just very confused, i m stuck at the, "I.. still need time to rest brother" part for quite awhile now and i just don t know what i m supposed to do

 

[garbage.kun]

I am just very confused, i m stuck at the, "I.. still need time to rest brother" part for quite awhile now and i just don t know what i m supposed to do

Hi CryMaker,

Sorry for the confusion. That message is the end of update marker. I try not to add fourth wall breaking message like "click here", or "this is the end of the update", but it does cause some confusion. I was in a bit of a hurry when i put that message in and didn't really realize that it doesn't give the finality of "this is the end of the update".

Thanks!

 

[garbage.kun]

Hi

Russian manually translated version

Debios has made a manually translated version of Divinity Unlike the..other russian version floating out there, we've made it so that the elder language works properly with names written in Cyrillic In the other version, the elder font (the first line of dialogues in the elder language) would only show empty lines when writing Cyrillic fonts, but in Debios's version , well, it should work



Also, here are some samples of the in-game renders for 2.5 (currently at about 70-80 renders+ some unlighted poses) (lights and camera can always change (tm) obviously ) and a render i made for some fun




Thanks!

 

[goulet1995]

Hi CryMaker,

Sorry for the confusion. That message is the end of update marker. I try not to add fourth wall breaking message like "click here", or "this is the end of the update", but it does cause some confusion. I was in a bit of a hurry when i put that message in and didn't really realize that it doesn't give the finality of "this is the end of the update".

Thanks!

do you plan to include lesbian/bi stuff including in threesomesand if so can that be avoided?

 

[garbage.kun]

do you plan to include lesbian/bi stuff including in threesomesand if so can that be avoided?

Hi, goulet1995

No, i will not include any lesbian/bi content in threesomes.

Thanks

 

[Diegoz]

thx

 

[TakashiLeaked]

This game is incredible, I have nothing but admiration for it. I mean, the code, the atmosphere, the way it immerses you in its premise, I can only say it's a 10/10, you are AMAZING DEV