Ren'Py Doors [v0.3.3 Part 2] [The Neuron Project]

[vir_cotto]

OK, finished.

Now, I would say it's great intro - and I really think it is - but I would give a friendly warn TheNeuronProject that most people won't like so much text. I hope you'll do "more showing - less reading" when the story really starts cause that's what most people like.

Unless you only want three or four patrons like me who like to read.

Potential is here - just make it more "playable" for a wider crowd.

 

[consumptionist]

its not half bad. a B- for the writing, purely for the lack of spell-checking and grammatical errors.
also, the writing as a whole is so overly forced, it feels like the writer is trying too hard to convey how expansive their knowledge of the English language is without taking into account how it reads or flows.

expression can be a beautiful thing, which the english language does so very well with how expansive it is, but it can also stall a reader when choosing to use less than a simplistic description method to convey a point.

this just feels like a show-piece of knowledge of writing, rather than a story-telling. it just felt like i was working to hard as a reader to stay with the message.

 

[-CookieMonster666-]

So are you trying to make a futa centaur or something? If not, the horse's gender should probably match the human's. A mare doesn't have a package hanging down; only stallions have testicles.

 

[TheNeuronProject]

So are you trying to make a futa centaur or something? If not, the horse's gender should probably match the human's. A mare doesn't have a package hanging down; only stallions have testicles.

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Or perhaps that thing there is just a pouch hanging lazily on the other side? Hmm...sucpicious indeed. :3

 

[lostlord]

First thought when I saw the Main pic;
"Come and get your real Fake Doors!"

 

[awqsrem man]

Read the title as doots, was a lot more interested for a couple of seconds

 

[TheNeuronProject]

Read the title as doots, was a lot more interested for a couple of seconds

Ewww!

 

[Agrik]

Invisible text, this is disgusting.

 

[n0b0dy]

I enjoyed the flow of words in this one.

 

[64spoons]

The answer is 59, BTW.

 

[TheNeuronProject]

Invisible text, this is disgusting.

Invisible text? How can a text be disgusting if it's invisible? I`m a little confused here...

 

[MisterPervy]

Holy hell... That first time starting the game I almost shit my pants... BEEEEEP!!

 

[Agrik]

Invisible text?

When offers answer options, the text appears only when you hover over.
When all options are visible, it’s easier to make a decision.

 

[Huldrafolk]

No incest in the tag. Jesus Christ.

 

[TheNeuronProject]

When offers answer options, the text appears only when you hover over.
When all options are visible, it’s easier to make a decision.

It is that way because people tend to just skip over the offered choices if they see them all, subconsciously gravitating towards the one that gives them the most "rewarding" outcome. But when you must read them one by one without distraction there is a bigger possibility that you actually think about the answer/choice before deciding. While in the 1st chapter this isnt so obvious, further down the road there's gonna be more of the kind of choices that won't reveal which of them gives a "reward"(if at all). The most fitting example right now in the game is when you give your answer to the little sister, there the choices are inverted, meaning the answers are formulated in a way that if you didn't pay attention to the conversation before it, you gonna choose the answer which sounds the most positive, but in reality you are choosing the negative one.

 

[Agrik]

It is that way because people tend to just skip over the offered choices if they see them all, subconsciously gravitating towards the one that gives them the most "rewarding" outcome.

Text Dark Souls?

 

[TheNeuronProject]

No incest in the tag. Jesus Christ.

From the F95 tags rules and list:

Rule:
» Do not use tags that aren't currently available in-game/comic even if the creator says they'll be available in the future.

The tag:
» Incest [Sex act between family relatives, including those not related by blood.]

For now there is no content in the game that justifies this tag.

 

[Jacob VK]

what are the answers... please a walk through

 

[BaasB]

What a ClusterF Mess of a game, AND DEV i dont what to do math in a adult game....

i hope you fix the Text,Renders and the START up sound.....

Will Keep A Eye on this game

Anyway goodluck with this game, Dev

 

[TheNeuronProject]

Text Dark Souls?

I didn't play the game so I can't compare.