This is a good start. Renders are good and the story is interesting. But, I would have liked to know before having to make decisions that MC was currently banging, at least, both
Julia and
Yumi. Or, he was banging them two weeks ago.
Here's some constructive feedback:
Adelle or Adele? The tag says Adele but most (or all) of the writing say Adelle.
English needs some work while missing entire words and some sentences simply don't make sense. Capital letters are used randomly in the middle of sentences, mainly after commas, and sometimes forgotten to use in names or in "I". Plenty of spelling mistakes, too. Even if I wrote in my mother tongue (that is not English), I would have a (good) proofreader or two to check my writing and grammar before publishing it with corrections.
About contrast: Using drop-shadowed white text on a slightly off-white background (especially if the picture under the textbox is near-white too) is rather difficult to see because of the lack of contrast. Either make the textbox darker or replace drop-shadows with bordering fonts with a contrastive color.
But, like I mentioned in the start this is a good start.