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ShiroOkami2

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Renders are well done, story so far just enough to get you excited for next update. Am actually excited to see where the dev takes this game, and dont think you need to give mc a shave tho not really an issue tbh think it was more sarcasm than anything hair is a lil scruffy but that just me being ocd

wishing you all best with the game, stay safe
 
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20cm.... that is still quite a large dong lol.

Although I think people are confusing girth and length, looks about similar size maybe tiny big shorter than normal. where it is different is the girth is quite a bit lower.

For reference: avg dick length irl is like 5.2-5.5 inches. so about 13cm.

edit: sidenote, if you want the "daughter" to not be in "" may I suggest substar (they also only take a 20% cut where as patreon takes 30%). Or a patch. That is if you plan to have le wincest type content, which I am assuming you may given that you have "daughter" in le game.

And since you are just starting out, you have time to make le switch. (if you want to of course).
This guy is a cock connoisseur
A penis extraordinaire
The penis whisperer

I had no clue about this lol.
 

arms99

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A very promising first release :love:, I thoroughly enjoyed it. Looking forward to see where this goes, good job dev (y)(y)
 
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monksims

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This is a good start. Renders are good and the story is interesting. But, I would have liked to know before having to make decisions that MC was currently banging, at least, both Julia and Yumi. Or, he was banging them two weeks ago. :D

Here's some constructive feedback:

Adelle or Adele? The tag says Adele but most (or all) of the writing say Adelle.

English needs some work while missing entire words and some sentences simply don't make sense. Capital letters are used randomly in the middle of sentences, mainly after commas, and sometimes forgotten to use in names or in "I". Plenty of spelling mistakes, too. Even if I wrote in my mother tongue (that is not English), I would have a (good) proofreader or two to check my writing and grammar before publishing it with corrections.

About contrast: Using drop-shadowed white text on a slightly off-white background (especially if the picture under the textbox is near-white too) is rather difficult to see because of the lack of contrast. Either make the textbox darker or replace drop-shadows with bordering fonts with a contrastive color.

But, like I mentioned in the start this is a good start. (y)
 
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palemaster

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This is a good start. Renders are good and the story is interesting. But, I would have liked to know before having to make decisions that MC was currently banging, at least, both Julia and Yumi. Or, he was banging them two weeks ago. :D

Here's some constructive feedback:

Adelle or Adele? The tag says Adele but most (or all) of the writing say Adelle.

English needs some work while missing entire words and some sentences simply don't make sense. Capital letters are used randomly in the middle of sentences, mainly after commas, and sometimes forgotten to use in names or in "I". Plenty of spelling mistakes, too. Even if I wrote in my mother tongue (that is not English), I would have a (good) proofreader or two to check my writing and grammar before publishing it with corrections.

About contrast: Using drop-shadowed white text on a slightly off-white background (especially if the picture under the textbox is near-white too) is rather difficult to see because of the lack of contrast. Either make the textbox darker or replace drop-shadows with bordering fonts with a contrastive color.

But, like I mentioned in the start this is a good start. (y)
Thanks for your feedback. I knew that my writing would be an issue. I'm brazilian and even though I'm not fluent , I decided to write directly in english. I'll try to find a proofreader for the next update.
Sometime in the future I might create a discord channel so you guys can report these kind of mistakes for me to correct.
 
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monksims

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I'll try to find a proofreader for the next update.
If you don't find one, try to get one or two of your friends that are good in (written) English to read your script through. If you know people that are nitpickers or detail oriented minds, their feedback would be valuable, too. :)
 
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minoan55

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Will there be incest or no ? unofficially of course because you're on patreon

The dev is dodging that question like Neo dodging bullets
I would say unlikely - as the back story is contingent upon the "daughter" not being his biological daughter (her mother having multiple affairs).
If somebody made a patch (I'm sure somebody will, sooner or later) then the whole story would make no sense.
I do not think the game should have a patch, and I will not use one if it appears.
 

DA22

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OK thx. FYI if she's legally adopted I think it's still considered not acceptable by patreon if there is intercourse between them
Think the guys at P might even have a problem if MC has been taking care for her and treated her as a daughter for years even without an official adoption. Still even without a patch or her officially being his daughter, some dad-daughter dynamics would be pretty normal also in how they speak with each other if he has been taking care of her as if she was his daughter for twelve years or more. :)
 
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bobdillan

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This guy is a cock connoisseur
A penis extraordinaire
The penis whisperer

I had no clue about this lol.
..... I want to accept this compliment... but is kinda gay.

jokes aside I am just good at retaining random infomation I find. heard it on a random bill bur vid that 5.5inch is average, then searched it up and found it was 5.2-5.5 (as high as 5.8 in one country).

Don't ask me how they get this data though, would assume it is random sample sizes. So with a degree of error.
 
4.20 star(s) 26 Votes