There is some things to improve and edit here :
- First You should have used different colors for each characters names ( or at least for pam )
- There is a few dialogue line that are from the wrong character like for exemple line 485 488 489 of the sc_05_go_to_the_couple.rpy it should be the girl who talk, not pam
- There is some mistake with some text, like a moment where pam say "I feel them in my throat" but it's her ass that is used, not her throat ...
or when she say that "I quickly grab her head and push her even harder on my pussy", at the image she is getting fucked by a man and she is sucking on a girl nipple, so not what the text say
You should have asked a few peoples to review all your text before making it public
( I don't have the courage to check the entire game for errors so good luck with that )
( Also, I don't really understand why the purple stuff at the bottom of the textbox, what's its use ?
It's not a text background to see the text better since the text is on top )