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Two cops molest a woman in public while a large crowd (including the school director) just stand next to it and do nothing?Sorry you didn't care for the second chapter. You did note the genre listing, I assume? While this portion of the story line may not be something you'd be highly likely to encounter in real life, it is, after all, a story. Fiction. A product of our imagination.
I also feel compelled to point out to you and the others objecting on these grounds that many of the stories and games posted on F95 require a degree of "suspension of disbelief." (some larger than others) So if you're going to require "perfect adherence to reality," you're may find the pickings on this site relatively slim.
But if our story turns out not to be your "thing," that's perfectly OK with us - "different strokes," etc., etc.
You are clearly blessed to live in a time and a place where such things don't (or no longer) happen. Unfortunately, I've lived long enough to remember times and places where police abuses were much more rampant, and in which there was little, if any, recourse when they occurred.Two cops molest a woman in public while a large crowd (including the school director) just stand next to it and do nothing?
Sorry. Fiction is no excuse for a bad and totally absurd story.
A real pity, because both the prologue and the first chapter gave hope for more.
So you think this whole story is realistic after all?You are clearly blessed to live in a time and a place where such things don't (or no longer) happen. Unfortunately, I've lived long enough to remember times and places where police abuses were much more rampant, and in which there was little, if any, recourse when they occurred.
never heard any Dev saying their games fans to fuck off, well literally.You are clearly blessed to live in a time and a place where such things don't (or no longer) happen. Unfortunately, I've lived long enough to remember times and places where police abuses were much more rampant, and in which there was little, if any, recourse when they occurred.
I wish you good fortune in finding games/stories that please you better.
the dev have done great and i actually enjoyed the story so farnever heard any Dev saying their games fans to fuck off, well literally.
Any way Dude we don't have any problem with the story line it is actually great. most players want that you make the molest scene insideth police station. just make the weed part before the molestation part then make the police take them to station and then molest the woman inside policstation with full of other police?
this is just a novel based on the reality on the field, so it may be possible to add a little flavor into the storyline call it hyperbolic parts of the storySo you think this whole story is realistic after all?
Sure, there's always been situations were police abuses it power, but normaly they at least try to do this in a way that doesn't cost them their jobs. No matter what time it is. Just two cops molest a woman in public while a large crowd is watching? Sorry, no way.
Anyway, what makes this chapter even worse is that you added a girl (who could really use a little bit more skin color) with a smartphone (first IPhone launched in 2007) to almost all of the pictures of this scene. I wonder how long it will take for them to lose their job when ...
Now let's be serious, this chapter is just so absolutely twisted and nonsensical, a reference to fiction simply does not help. Maybe you'll think about this chapter again and end up with an idea that will make your game better. Maybe not. Anway, I really mean that as constructive criticism.
The first chapter is comparatively good (even though it may be a little too kitschy for my personal taste; but eh, it is a story ). Also, the prologue makes a good impression, but even more so, it gives hope for a well thought-out story.Oddly, I think a lot of the criticism is because the game is so well thought out and delivered.
The amount of shit dialogue and unbelievable circumstances in other games apparently is fine. Yet somehow, this game is to be held to an almost perfect standard of realism? …
I don't really like mind control stories, because they are almost without exception only a way for bad authors to give their story some kind of a "sense". But what is the point of simply leaving out the mind control element if the people in the story continue to behave like brainless zobies? Two cops molest a woman in public while a large crowd just stand by doing nothing? Sorry. That is just bullshit.… At the end of the day, this is a corruption/NTR fantasy. The cops in their fictional universe have been abusing their power for a long while and getting away with it. They have set their sights on mom and engineered a circumstance that begins the process of breaking her will. Not in a "oh drink this magic potion I just invented" sort of way, but in a way that has it's roots firmly in the real world. ...
Thanks, excited to check it out. Please link it here once you've uploaded your review.this is really interesting game just played it will see the reviews on my channel once ive uploaded it to youtube
don't you know, the audience is mostly children who don't know how the law acts / run, as long as the author doesn't make a scenario like fashion business game where the prisoner doesn't get legal assistance (which I feel is so weird) but I don't think the police will take her to the police station instead they just blackmailing and used her so it still makes senseI don't really like mind control stories, because they are almost without exception only a way for bad authors to give their story some kind of a "sense". But what is the point of simply leaving out the mind control element if the people in the story continue to behave like brainless zobies? Two cops molest a woman in public while a large crowd just stand by doing nothing? Sorry. That is just bullshit.
A story that takes place in here and now just needs a little brain work. Just omitting it without any explanation at all can't work.
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Like i always said and will keep saying that the story is super and the story is very much realistic that's why I wanted that little change. this might happen is some country police Im not sure but you know the story was so good that felt very bad to see the women being like that in public. Tht's the only stuff I told him to adjust not change the story just the placethe dev have done great and i actually enjoyed the story so far
this is just a novel based on the reality on the field, so it may be possible to add a little flavor into the storyline call it hyperbolic parts of the story
and yeah they could lose their job if he molest in the public with crowded place in the reality but its just story and its novel after all no harm been made, i bet it is your first time reading a novel
What do you think the director of a school does when two corrupt cops molest one of his female teachers in front of a school just before classes start? They literally exposed her down to the underwear and grabbed the teacher's (also exposed) nipple in front of children. There's no way those two cops can go unpunished for this. No way! Even if they try to blackmailing the woman, too many others have seen what they did and will interfere.don't you know, the audience is mostly children who don't know how the law acts / run, as long as the author doesn't make a scenario like fashion business game where the prisoner doesn't get legal assistance (which I feel is so weird) but I don't think the police will take her to the police station instead they just blackmailing and used her so it still makes sense
do you see headmaster in that scene, it just full of children no other adults involved except the cops and melissa and one of melissa student named sarah did yell at the cops for molesting her teacher so it still makes sense to me just wait for the next chapter if all the children told this scene to their parent or other teacherWhat do you think the director of a school does when two corrupt cops molest one of his female teachers in front of a school just before classes start? They literally exposed her down to the underwear and grabbed the teacher's (also exposed) nipple in front of children. There's no way those two cops can go unpunished for this. No way! Even if they try to blackmailing the woman, too many others have seen what they did and will interfere.
This games 2nd chapter story is bullshit and makes no sense at all.
It was the vice principal. Just look at this group of people and the statement by parker. There is no way, this cops get away unpunished. No way! The story of the 2nd chapter is just bullshit.do you see headmaster in that scene, it just full of children no other adults involved except the cops and melissa and one of melissa student named sarah did yell at the cops for molesting her teacher so it still makes sense to me just wait for the next chapter if all the children told this scene to their parent or other teacher