juice2000

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Jun 2, 2017
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old saves don't work?:unsure:
Some old saves are broken but not all. If you have lots of different saves try them all. I found it was the last scene that was broken and if went back before the daughter threesome where their talking on the bed it loaded fine.
 

demidemon

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Aug 31, 2016
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This game in some way is better that a lot of games here. I really want to like the game, I feel like the devs have a great story to tell but the writing is not good enough to handle it.

The prologue wasnt interesting. Its extremely important and was supposed to be amazing in order to draw people's attention and to keep ppl playing ( or reading if it is a book). The video was okay i guess, but the writing? Fate and life wasn't something new, you need a genius to make it interesting enough for a prologue.

Then it came the introduction of MC. To start with place, age, name, occupation... was just so boring.
Its like if you want to tell ppl it is winter, the most boring way is to say directly it is winter. You could describe the snow, the trees, or the sound kids having a snowball fight or maybe a snowball hits the MC etc. Just why would you choose the most boring way when its the beginning of your game?

If the newspaper and MC's flashback at the beginning of the game was more interesting, why not start with her reading the newspaper and flashback, then talk about her later when the its the right moment. Its like you have a great story to tell, but you never thought about how to organize and write it in a captivating way.

Sometimes the choice of word seems strange (to me, at least). "Her analytical prowess was known to all, and when she delved into the nuances of human behavior, her observations were never taken lightly." Obviously her observation skills(keen eyes?) and knowledge in psychology were used to analyze Mason's behavior. Analytical prowess is such a wide ranging skill, it includes data collection(observation here?), data analyses , problem solving etc. I don't know how to say but "Analytical prowess" just doesn't feel accurate(?). About "her observations were never taken lightly" I've seen warnings, rules, decisions, words etc used with taken lightly but "observations"? Also, should it be her "observation" or "analysis" that shouldn't be taken lightly? I understand every word used in the sentence yet they feel strange when put together. There were quite a few times I have to pause to think as I was confused by the choice of words.

I do like the vast amount of erotic scenes although porn logic is hard to avoid when sex scenes are everywhere :ROFLMAO:. I do hope there are more build up and better, meaningful choices, but again this will require some good writing skills...
 
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Celestial Novel

I Gave My Life To My Game
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Fate and life wasn't something new, you need a genius to make it interesting enough for a prologue.
Yeah, I agree the prologue is so important, but I've already read it so many times. I'm not a native English speaker, and this is my first time creating a game. I don't have any prior experience, and yet people are expecting me to create a GODLIKE visual novel on my first attempt. Some have even compared my game to NTLmedia, which has 14,466 Patrons and has been in the industry for 10 years. LOL.

require some good writing skills
Right now, I have a talented writer. If you still think that the writing is bad, it's possible you may not fully grasp the intricacies of the craft.
These are some of the reviews from certified Steam curators who actually know how to review a game because it is their job to review games:

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I will make Fate and Life 2 Prologue better though.
 

demidemon

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Yeah, I agree the prologue is so important, but I've already read it so many times. I'm not a native English speaker, and this is my first time creating a game. I don't have any prior experience, and yet people are expecting me to create a GODLIKE visual novel on my first attempt. Some have even compared my game to NTLmedia, which has 14,466 Patrons and has been in the industry for 10 years. LOL.
I'm not saying you didn't try hard, but whether you have 10 years experience or none, does not affect how the players think about the quality of your game. As a player, customer or consumer, we do not care too much about the difficulties of the developer or producers are facing.

Its like developers saying we should not be expecting all games to be as good as BG3, but as players we would all set the bar higher after we experienced something that good.

I know it is harsh, I could only wish you good luck in your development.

Also I don't think curator's review would make what I've said less or more "correct". If you think things I pointed out is wrong, if you think my reasonings are wrong, if you think the writing style you are using is good, if you think the order the events are told is good, then by all means just keep doing what you are doing. I'm just saying what I think. Am I sure I'm 100% correct? Am I sure I'm correct in everyone's eyes? No, I'm not, rather that i'm 100% sure i'm wrong in some ppl's pov.
 
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TearTear

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Jun 29, 2021
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Gallery Mod Ch1-7

The game was re-worked again a bit, some music won't play on the first chapters, will try to fix that.
The rest work just fine.

Enjoy!




Features:
  • unlock gallery from chapter 1 to 7

Installation:
  • extract files in the main game folder
  • play the game!



How to use it?

There's no existing folder in my files for this game.

(I'm using android)
 
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