Because her reaction ISN’T the “straw breaking the camel’s back” or her realizing what she’s been doing. It’s very clearly her having a meltdown because she’s shocked they are asking her to do something sexual.Have you noticed you're contradicting yourself here? You are right: a person can act in certain way for a period of time, but a proverbial straw might eventually break their back, and their facade comes undone. This is indeed realistic, and the very fact that it's a realistic reaction makes the argument "but she was acting differently until now, so this doesn't match" pretty much hollow.
The MC had enough of mental fortitude to carry on through something she wasn't comfortable with. It doesn't mean she'd be comfortable with it infinitely, nor that she'd have to face even more drastic situation to break down. Sometimes it's the small things.
If it doesn't fit your personal idea of what's "believable" which exceeds the reality... well, then it's unfortunate, but i don't feel like the writer is at any real fault here if they didn't meet those expectations.
But this is very much the repeat of the same tired argument that this thread went over multiple times by now, i don't think there's any real merit in dragging it on.
Ultimately it’s a scene that should have been much much earlier in the story. Because in the end, that’s what this is, a story and when you are writing a story you have to make sure your scenes flow together with the natural progression of the narrative.
While this scene might have been “realistic” it has totally fucked up the flow of the story because it is so out of place with where we’re at in the plot by this point.
On its own, yeah, the scene is good. But placed where it is the story now? It’s as if the editor made a mistake and placed Chapter 4 after Chapter 7.
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