Crush gonna Crush. Spends a month+ obsessing about something then throws it in the trash basically.
Faster progress?...
I’m much much happier with this approach, and if it works out I think it’s got some important advantages going forward – not least that if the episodes are a little skinnier, then we’ll make faster progress towards the part of the story that I really want to write (the heroine bargirling).
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It's the same feeling when waiting for disappointing and short updates...When it doesn’t work I get dispirited.
Everything you said, people have been telling him for years and each and every time he rejects the advice and says “THIS TIME, he’ll finally make it work”It has always been clear that Crush finds writing hard.
He can code but he can't draw and he can't write with any great ease. He can research places, he can come up with basic character concepts and he can even find voices for them but he's struggling with plot and character consistency. That's most of the way towards being able to write but clearly, his creative process isn't working for him and it's jacking him up.
I must say, I agree with the decision to ditch the stuff about the boots as it wouldn't have worked... the last update was all about the agent going 'WTF am I doing here?' and then suddenly she's buying boots and going goth? I guess that might make sense if she's thinking 'Oh... I'll assume a different persona, that way it's not me who is doing all this weird shit' but even then, I would argue that that's shutting the barn door after the horse has bolted. On a more basic level, she's already working in a topless bar! Putting on thigh-high boots and more eye-liner doesn't make her look more slutty. If anything it's woefully impractical as PVC is incredibly hot and South-East Asia is insanely hot. An hour working in those boots and you'd collapse.
Also, the boots are an obvious displacement activity. He doesn't want to write plot and so he's gone back to fussing with the assets and he hoped that introducing new assets would produce interesting scenes. If fussing with the assets for the first six years of this game's development didn't produce plot, why would it now? That's Crush drifting back into old habits.
I don't know if he pops in here (probably not) but I think he might benefit from focusing on characters a bit more (particularly as this is now a linear virtual novel rather than a sandbox) Delve into the agent's relationship with the Scottish guy or her male handler, how about the individual girls at the bar? Early sections suggested there might be tensions within the staff at the bar, it might be worth exploring those. Work on the characters, think about what motivates them, and quite quickly you start to develop some drama and drama can easily be turned into sexual tension that eventually yields sex scenes.
Either that or hire someone to do the writing. Seriously, he should find a smut writer he likes (there are loads on literotica and AO3) and pay them like 200 bucks for a chapter outline. Treat it like the illustrations. Most amateur smut writers would take his arm off at the shoulder for the opportunity.
FunnyHe can code
I know this has been said before but it's important it doesn't get forgotten.Funny
He codes on the same level he writes, otherwise that would be a RPG and not a kinetic novel
He is very skilled in communications and finding excuses why he did nothing
and that's how easy 6k$ went to his pocket in february.Crush gonna Crush. Spends a month+ obsessing about something then throws it in the trash basically.
You did miss something: the cut-and-paste "Why am I enjoying this degrading treatment?" internal monologue. Can't forget that, because that's like 15% of every. Single. Update.and that's how easy 6k$ went to his pocket in february.
whole month of work was in fact finding in google images gothic booth and copy/paste it into parteon with several words how hard working month was (truth or lie, it doesn't matter) for him. watching booth and thinking.
what is obvious now, new update will be another day in office as barmaid. and after year of repeating this bar scene in every update, he is now struggling how to do it. can i guess? pick a thong and heels, serve drinks at bar to bunch of foreigners, being gropped. repeat that with bunch of locals. dress up. go to street luring tourist. chatting with whores and barmaids about whoring, come back, serve drinks, go through floor into vip. serve drinks there, get gropped, reject money, get out. watch lesbian show from the floor. get gropped there too. return to bar. end shift. get fucked in office. take money and leave. did i miss something?
indeed. this idea, concept (including even some material he wrote) what a great rpg game would be in hands of some masters of choice based games like eva kiss. prostitution and serving drinks were covered nicely in fashion business... instead game we have skilled trickster full of excuses. and yet he is bulletproof in supporters count.Funny
He codes on the same level he writes, otherwise that would be a RPG and not a kinetic novel
He is very skilled in communications and finding excuses why he did nothing
Could he even handle the plotting? It should be super simple to come up with one or a few barmaid scenes given he has supposedly been working on it for two months (not to mention 6 or 7 years of planning). I think the real problem is that Crush has no idea how to handle the transition to bargirl and where to take the story from there. Hence we keep getting detours like the Syria escapade, or Russian date stuff or Bangkok tourism.Crush do the plotting, research, and high-level conceptual stuff and then delegate 100% of the writing to a volunteer "writers room"
and this is crucial point why our rantings and resonable suggestions have no influence: he is doing good "working" alone. sheeps getting milked every 1st of month and don't want any changes. even contributing with suggestions how to re-write existing scene from previous update, what he is happy to oblige since it delays new update (and gives him alibi for next 2-3 months of doing nothing.Crush won't change because he is making a very comfortable living doing absolutely nothing. Any change he makes is detrimental to him because it would mean he has to work instead of taking handouts from suckers. He is a scammer and he will be until the scam stops working.
This makes me think maybe it'd be a good idea to add some dialogue and action options for the sex scenes that aren't meant to have big story implications. Just some extra options contained within the scene, to make the storytelling more varied and engaging.You did miss something: the cut-and-paste "Why am I enjoying this degrading treatment?" internal monologue. Can't forget that, because that's like 15% of every. Single. Update.
I think you're right on the nail. There's nothing wrong with the actual writing. It's not great, not bad, just there to convey the story as opposed to drawing you in with glowing prose. And that's perfectly fine, we're here for the sex.Could he even handle the plotting? It should be super simple to come up with one or a few barmaid scenes given he has supposedly been working on it for two months (not to mention 6 or 7 years of planning). I think the real problem is that Crush has no idea how to handle the transition to bargirl and where to take the story from there. Hence we keep getting detours like the Syria escapade, or Russian date stuff or Bangkok tourism.
It doesn't matter how many writers you have working for you if you have no vision or ideas for core story development.