Phew, ok. To be clear: I played until the second decision, so not very far.
1. Needs some proofreader. It's not outright engrish, but a big part is a sore to read. Also some typos.
2. Slow down with the "prologue" story already. It feels like an exited 5year old is telling his homecoming dad about his day. Mother cancer, mother healed, father accident, father dead, oh yeah bought mother and sister chocolate, move to L.A., train to become better at soccer/football, get into university team - in like 2 minutes.
3. Conversations need some improvement. They don't feel natural, but more like checklists.
4. Renders are a bit grainy and the two girls I saw (Emma and sister Mia) are okeyish. Nothing to drool about.
Until the second decision, where I stoped playing, it didn't really pull me in. It's not outright bad, but I saw nothing that would make this VN special until now.
Good luck anyway, dev.