VN Ren'Py Abandoned Forgive [v0.02 Update 3] [FraGames]

[PeggyBlackett]

Am I the only one who's confused by the overview?

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[Xumeey]

His daughter is 30.

Their relationship fell apart when she was 18, it's now 12 years later.



He didn't break up with anyone. He fucked his daughters best friend and then his daughter told him she wanted nothing to do with him and they haven't spoke for 12 years.

The father/daughter relationship broke apart it wasn't a romantic one.

Thanks for the explanation.

 

[Avaron1974]

The part that made me laugh is they catch a bus, she says there is no room to sit and they will have to stand ..... the picture shows nearly every seat is empty.

 

[xmilteach]

thx

 

[Avaron1974]

I will give one word of warning though knowing what people around here can be like.

If you are trying to get the daughter for yourself, don't check the laptop in her apartment. It has recordings of her fucking her boyfriend and I just know someone here will cry NTR at that.

 

[Penfold Mole]

I'm confused about both the overview and preview pics.

Is the 'daughter/sister/main female character' the one on the banner and on the pictures with the name Paola or the Emma character on 4 other pictures? They don't look much alike and in case Paola is the daughter, then I don't understand why most of the pics are of Emma.

Curiosity made me look, so in case anyone else has the same question - Paola is the relatively good looking friend of the 'daughter' and Emma, the woman with huge tits and crazy eyes on most pictures is the daughter.

 

[Crippy]

Here is what I have noticed so far:
Add animation tag
Fix shading on Emma. She looks like she has been dead for a week or two...not unless she is into goth
Get a translator to work on making complete and proper sentences
Right click option does not work. Cannot figure out how to save. H = Hide...L = Log. Cannot get back after seeing the log
And WTH...daughter shows up after a 12 year hiatus and is wearing nothing but a negligee

Decent start...but needs some cleaning up and some enhancements. Like Avaron1974 pointed out, bus is almost empty in one frame and full in the next.

And WTH is up with the

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(Sorry Avaron1974 I couldn't help it )

 

[Avaron1974]

Is the dried raisin in picture 2 the MC? Math suggests he's probably ~50+.
I generally like older MCs, but he looks like he would croak when we get to the fun part.

The really old guy is the daughters neighbour not the MC.

 

[HueyFreeman32]

this is a great first impression. im highly surprised and looking forward to more content .

 

[Abhai]

With a bit of polishing, in every department, this could be one of the better games around.
Mc having rivals seems as unavoidable, so adding a few more girls would be good also (presuming it will be more than a short story with a few characters only).

 

[Xill]

In the overview it says you can type "sister" instead of "daughter" because it can also fit. But 5 text boxes into the game the MC says he divorced Emma's mother. If Emma was his sister that means he divorced his own mother. I guess he could've been adopted, but that makes it a bit more fucked up than fucking her best friend and one would think she would be mad at him for fucking her mother in the first place.

 

[diego68usa]

short but impressive start. daughter is already wild and wears almost nothing! look forward to updates but story seems accelerated.

 

[Fra_Seorn]

Wow ... I left for dinner and I come back with a 2-page game discussion. What can I say, thank you all for your comments, I have already read some that will be very useful for corrections.

The part that made me laugh is they catch a bus, she says there is no room to sit and they will have to stand ..... the picture shows nearly every seat is empty.

I know, but unfortunately that image I was unable to modify it, in the following ones I added the characters sitting with photoshop, but in that I didn't succeed, it turned out a crap. I'm not that good with photoshop, I'll try again, at most I delete it.

Fix shading on Emma. She looks like she has been dead for a week or two...not unless she is into goth
Get a translator to work on making complete and proper sentences
Right click option does not work. Cannot figure out how to save. H = Hide...L = Log. Cannot get back after seeing the log
And WTH...daughter shows up after a 12 year hiatus and is wearing nothing but a negligee

I have taken note of everything, and will try to make corrections. As for Emma, I don't know why she is so dull in some pictures, for her I used the Victoria7 skin, I will try to change the lighting on her.

In the overview it says you can type "sister" instead of "daughter" because it can also fit. But 5 text boxes into the game the MC says he divorced Emma's mother. If Emma was his sister that means he divorced his own mother. I guess he could've been adopted, but that makes it a bit more fucked up than fucking her best friend and one would think she would be mad at him for fucking her mother in the first place.

This is something that I will have to correct, during the writing I did not realize.

 

[steelsmiter]

checkin' in for when this gets big enough to play.

 

[heimdal74]

when I saw Unity engine, I said "Oh no",
for a VN I don't see the point of using Unity compared to Ren'Py

but I must admit that it is very well presented and 'roll back' option is really nice to see all the dialogue options

So very positive on this game, even though it is very short

good work !!

 

[Fra_Seorn]

With a bit of polishing, in every department, this could be one of the better games around.
Mc having rivals seems as unavoidable, so adding a few more girls would be good also (presuming it will be more than a short story with a few characters only).

The story is just beginning, it will focus on the relationship MC - Emma, but everything will be seasoned with other characters of the female gender, more or less mature. Of course there will also be male characters, such as Emma's boyfriend, Paola's husband, and others, which obviously will make MC's life less easy.

 

[oidex]

Of course there will also be male characters, such as Emma's boyfriend, Paola's husband, and others, which obviously will make MC's life less easy.

Yeah, these damn husbands! Always cramping our style. Why don't they stick with their own ... oh, right.

 

[Ebashu]

The developer does not make a common mistake - dad should not fuck his daughter in all positions after 10 minutes of play))) Make the plot and the minimum seduction of the daughter by the father at least))). If you need creative inspiration, look at my boobs)))

 

[fregonard]

so the only love interest is the daughter who is fucking with her fucking boyfriend and the other girl is married, will there be any girls worth pursuing at least?

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[Fra_Seorn]

so the only love interest is the daughter who is fucking with her fucking boyfriend and the other girl is married, will there be any girls worth pursuing at least?

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The next 2 girls to be added should be free from romantic relationships, if nothing changes between now and the next update.

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