VN Ren'Py Fractured Hearts [Ch.1] [Turbo Kinetic's]

[Rayne]

i have so few paid subs im clearly not doing this for the money anyways haha. im making this whole game on my laptop render wise cause my desktop is an amd rig

This is the most important thing when a developer is not chasing money but trying to tell his story, and I sincerely wish you to become a successful developer.

 

[Jnx]

If I see another apostrophe where it shouldn't be, incorrect "too" or "then," misgendered pronoun, or incorrect tensing I'm going to scream.

And MC's spiel about Erika made me physically gag. Could have been handled in a much better not so "sexual predator college professor" sort of way.

 

[TurboKinetics]

If I see another apostrophe where it shouldn't be, incorrect "too" or "then," misgendered pronoun, or incorrect tensing I'm going to scream.

And MC's spiel about Erika made me physically gag. Could have been handled in a much better not so "sexual predator college professor" sort of way.

not every game is going to be done by an English degree holder. I sleep 5 hours a day. mistakes will be made. i also don't have any beta testers or anyone to go behind me checking. i'd be curious about the pronouns i messed up. some of the other stuff is planned to get addressed.

 

[TurboKinetics]

This is the most important thing when a developer is not chasing money but trying to tell his story, and I sincerely wish you to become a successful developer.

thank you for that. im way to far in the red, i made peace with not breaking even back before i even released a demo. i have made mistakes. and i will make more mistakes. but this is a passion project and i will push ahead.

 

[RedBone]

ABSOLUTELY NO NTR, this won my interest. The Story got my bookmark and me looking forward to future chapters. Great 1st one btw.

 

[goulet1995]

tags guide said if it has choices dont use KN tag. to be very fair my dev name is turbo "kinetic's". basically is 99% kinetic but you will have to pick towards the end on a selection of desired LI. thats your agency. not hidden KN, i been upfront its basically an KN.
dev notes- "The core story is kinetic. ", end of the day yes there will be unavoidable sex scenes 100%
would also be weird to use multiple endings tag with KN i think, likely would piss off one side or the other

was going to try until i saw this not the biggest fan of kinetics to start and hate the whole harem until the end where you have to choose thing

 

[TurboKinetics]

was going to try until i saw this not the biggest fan of kinetics to start and hate the whole harem until the end where you have to choose thing

you dont have to pick the harem even if you unlock it. you can still pick a single LI. you arent hardlocked to any ending until you select it yourself

 

[goulet1995]

you dont have to pick the harem even if you unlock it. you can still pick a single LI. you arent hardlocked to any ending until you select it yourself

opposite you said at the end you have to pick desired LI i like to have a harem ending which unless i misunderstand wont be availiable.

 

[TurboKinetics]

opposite you said at the end you have to pick desired LI i like to have a harem ending which unless i misunderstand wont be availiable.

the harem ending is an unlock extra option. you have to unlock it in chapter 1. there is an option when you first start a game to highlight the harem choice flag if you really want it. if the harem ending in unlocked you with be presented with 4 choices towards the end of the game. rika, emilia, izzy, or harem if its unlocked. you still have agency over the ending.

 

[ImariKurumi]

Promising first chapter. All the best!

 

[MadMoonMan69]

A great start to the game, I really enjoyed it! My only issue is with the name of the girl's father - where I am (AUS) Denise is a female name. Does it have a different gender alignment in other places? I thought for while the girls had 2 mothers here we would use the name Dennis instead!
As I said it is a great story & will look forward to the next update! I am sure you would find a few volunteers (including me) to be beta testers or proofreaders if you asked here!
Good luck & thank you!

 

[TurboKinetics]

A great start to the game, I really enjoyed it! My only issue is with the name of the girl's father - where I am (AUS) Denise is a female name. Does it have a different gender alignment in other places? I thought for while the girls had 2 mothers here we would use the name Dennis instead!
As I said it is a great story & will look forward to the next update! I am sure you would find a few volunteers (including me) to be beta testers or proofreaders if you asked here!
Good luck & thank you!

no thats getting addressed in a hotfix. i spotted that when i was looking for the screenshots to use in this post a few days ago. supposed to be Denis (no E at the end). my fix was just to name him dennis. i used to date girl named denise and i think thats old muscule memory for me. think the single N was tripping me up

 

[zc077]

this is simple game few female characters i choose emilia

 

[For Khorne]

What a palette cleanser this was, quite lovely. The pacing was great and the characters are fantastic. I like that despite the traumas suffered they don't let it slow them down, makes them feel alive in a way you don't see very often... Usually the writers pivot a bit too hard and the story/character arcs are hindered. I'm hyped for future installments. Thank you very much for sharing.

 

[TurboKinetics]

this is simple game few female characters i choose emilia

nice coincidence. im writing an emilia scene right now haha

 

[TurboKinetics]

What a palette cleanser this was, quite lovely. The pacing was great and the characters are fantastic. I like that despite the traumas suffered they don't let it slow them down, makes them feel alive in a way you don't see very often... Usually the writers pivot a bit too hard and the story/character arcs are hindered. I'm hyped for future installments. Thank you very much for sharing.

i wanted to explore character trauma's without it being a depression simulator haha thanks for the kind words

 

[Riddleven]

The writing in this very strong and art has a charm all to it's own. Not particularly happy about it basically being a KN, but the writing is solid enough that I'll stick with it. Keep up the good work Dev!

 

[Sterkh90]

also im doing the lords work and shutting down the ntr cucks

It's unexpected to read this from a person with such a signature

 

[TurboKinetics]

It's unexpected to read this from a person with such a signature

thats NTS not NTR haha

 

[lucik93]

I'm a sucker for Izzy and her twintails GG dev