UnamedPluto
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A quick recommendation NeonGhosts
I know you're trying to avoid getting trapped in a rework cycle, but I was replaying, and when you first meet Ashe, if the two of you decide to, uhh... 'part ways', in the alley, you obviously still run into Mason, who was woken up by some ruckus (must have been racoons in the dumpster or something). He pretends to be asleep, and Guy talks to him a bit. This is a small thing and probably slips by most people, but I strongly recommend adding a throwaway line at the start of that one way conversation that explains Guy is changing his voice or something along those lines.
Anyone who has ever been in a situation like that will tell you, you will NEVER forget the voice of that person. Decades later, and someone who even sounds similar can cause an anxiety attack (that's usually for the victim themselves, but in this case it had to have been traumatizing to Mason to listen from just around the corner, especially when he's experienced similar, if less violent, treatment in the past). The same exact person only a few months later? Mason would absolutely recognize Guy's voice.
I know you're trying to avoid getting trapped in a rework cycle, but I was replaying, and when you first meet Ashe, if the two of you decide to, uhh... 'part ways', in the alley, you obviously still run into Mason, who was woken up by some ruckus (must have been racoons in the dumpster or something). He pretends to be asleep, and Guy talks to him a bit. This is a small thing and probably slips by most people, but I strongly recommend adding a throwaway line at the start of that one way conversation that explains Guy is changing his voice or something along those lines.
Anyone who has ever been in a situation like that will tell you, you will NEVER forget the voice of that person. Decades later, and someone who even sounds similar can cause an anxiety attack (that's usually for the victim themselves, but in this case it had to have been traumatizing to Mason to listen from just around the corner, especially when he's experienced similar, if less violent, treatment in the past). The same exact person only a few months later? Mason would absolutely recognize Guy's voice.