VN - Ren'Py - Completed - Haley's Story [v1.1 Pre-Patched] [Viitgames]

  1. 5.00 star(s)

    DazGarkman

    - Version 0.91

    - Storytelling 10/10. The story is terrific, superb in every sense. I enjoyed reading every sentence. The drama and comedy are well balanced. I must say the Dev was able to create a connection between the reader and both main characters meaning that there are moments you can possibly feel and understand the characters if you let the story carry you.

    - Renders/Graphics 9/10. The renders are great. The Dev created very nice dark scenes which helped the atmosphere of intimacy.

    Overall I strongly recommend to play this game. It's time well spent and think the Dev is worth supporting.
  2. 3.00 star(s)

    KrystofDayne

    Review on v0.91
    TLDR included


    Just managed to get through the whole thing, which I did want to do to at least try and be fair in my review although I got frustrated a few times and quit for a while. I'll try to squeeze my rambling notes I took along the way into a somewhat cohesive Pro/Con review.


    Cons: The MC, the MC and the MC once more. And some other minor things.

    The MC is really where the bulk of my frustration came from and I'll just paste my notes here.
    • Generally not a big fan of the antagonizing sibling dynamic in most cases, but Haley actually gets some good banter in and is really witty while the MC's response is mostly just "Fuck off!" or something to that effect, which feels much too childish not too mention much too angry and rude. I feel really bad for Haley in these moments, she's just joking around and being witty and he's straight-up insulting and disrespecting her, it's really jarring and I can't help but hate the MC for it.
      It's also weird that they're supposed to be twins but both of them view their relationship more as a big brother / little sister thing. I guess it's just part of the standard misogynistic "big strong man has to take care of weak, soft woman" trope. Ew.
    • The MC is weirdly dispassionate and passive, mostly going through life only at the behest of his sister and other women. Don't get me wrong, I'm not one of those alpha guys prowling these reviews who is annoyed when the MC is "too nice" and wants him to dominate and/or rape the women in his life. But here, it's unclear if the MC actually has any wants or desires of his own. Does he really enjoy being together with Sandra? Who knows, he never shows it. Is he happy about his promotion and raise? Meh, he just says it won't change much and was expecting it anyway. Any compliments or other signs of affections he makes are always (and I do mean literally always, didn't find a single example to the contrary) only made upon request by the women and then only reluctantly, he would for instance never think of his own to buy his girlfriend a gift or go and visit her or something, or tell her that he loves her on his own, he only does it after Haley or someone else proposes that he should or as reluctant reciprocation. He never has any plans of his own, just goes along with anything the women want. He is just so sullen and impassive throughout the story, it's really weird and off-putting. The only two things he does seem to have an opinion on, are on the one hand sex and boobs, but not in any enthusiastic way, just that those are the only things he is even slightly interested in and therefore his main reason for doing anything at all, and on the other hand the interests and hobbies of the women which he mostly mocks or belittles. Makes him seem like a dick who isn't happy or grateful about anything but just floats through life, unimpressed by any of its charms, including the multiple women throwing themselves at him.
      I have the sneaking impression that the dev doesn't really know the difference between a nice guy and a passive guy. Passivity doesn't make you nice (in fact, the MC is still pretty much an asshole) and not being passive doesn't automatically make you a jerk. You can express (and to a certain degree assert) your wants and desires without forcing them on other people while still respecting what they want. The MC here doesn't really say what he wants but still manages to often shit on the women when they do tell him what they want.
      All of this is of course not helped by the fact that he always has the same sort of expressionless, bored serial-killer face for some reason even as all the other characters are pretty expressive.
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    Some other things:
    • Night scenes are generally much too dark, can't make anything out half the time.
    • Whole lotta fatphobia, characters are constantly worried about becoming fat while they're all in ridiculously good shape and comparing fat (or even just slightly chubby) people to "whales" or "land whales". That's just gross.
    • Dialogue thumbnails don't always look like the actual people because they don't necessarily change after the people changed their appearance. Lisa's still sporting the same sweater she wore in the first scene, Dennis' one is constantly topless because the first time we met him was at the pool and Sandra's changes at first when she gets her new haircut, then changes back to the old one even though she still has the new haircut. It's really weird and off-putting and is probably due to mistakes or oversights by the dev.

    Mehs: Some weird things, some neither here nor there's

    • The story changes focus about halfway through. Earlier introduced characters like Lisa, Dennis or Diane are sidelined or never heard from again, while all of a sudden a different story connected to your past with your parents as constant presences takes over. Not a particularly smooth transition either. It's just weird.
    • The animation scenes were always kind of laggy for me, in that they took a few seconds to get started but then ran smoothly. I don't know if that's due to my hardware but I doubt it. Never had that with any other VNs.
    • One girl is described as having enormous tits, bigger than her head, when they're actually, idk, a D-cup at best, maybe even just a C-cup. It's fine, I don't necessarily need unrealistic monster tits (although I'm not opposed to them either) but don't claim they're this enormous when you don't deliver and they're just a bit above-average at best.
    • No sound design at all. Just wanted to mention it, I don't think that is that bad, but some people get frustrated.
    • Same sort of thing, your choices influence the story only very little, you will have no control over where the story is going and at least two women are definitely "forced" on you, which is to say they're just part of the main story. I don't have a problem with that, that's just a choice by the dev and allows for smoother, more sensible storytelling, but I know some people hate it (and have already sharply criticized it in their reviews).
    • Slooow burn. Don't expect fap scenes early, this one really take its time and even then, sex scenes aren't that frequent and all in all really vanilla. That's again just a choice by the dev and down to personal preference, but just thought I'd mention it.

    Pros: Pretty much everything else

    • The first and main love interest is a black woman, good to see a black woman not being used simply to spice up the variety in a mostly-white harem game. And she actually has dark black skin, don't get me started on all the colourism you see in media where, even when you do have black people in the story, lighter-skinned black people are generally still preferred (and get the better or more likeable storylines) over dark-skinned black people. So yeah, love the inclusion of Sandra and I think she's just a great character overall. Very sweet and devoted and the problems she faces in balancing her work with her relationship seem tragically familiar. I'm just really worried she's in for some heartbreak in the future. But we'll see, I'm definitely rooting for her even though (as I mentioned before in my cons) the MC pretty much treats her like shit.
    • Great rendering and I love the unique character models. Really great work by the dev there. The animations still need some polishing but all in all, they're also pretty good.
    • Great storytelling overall. Yeah, like I said, it's streamlined and you don't have much choice over most of it, but that actually leads to a better and more sensible storyline. The way the relationship with your sister is approached is also the most realistic I've ever seen, mostly because it really takes time to take off. It's broached cautiously and shyly, without the characters necessarily getting a secret taboo kick out of the incest, or either one of them feeling like creeps. It's actually organic and believable, which is really hard to pull off with a brother-sister relationship like this. The storylines with other women also make sense and aren't too instantaneous. While there isn't a whole lot of actual plot, the deeper character exploration of Haley in particular, with other storylines (like the Adriana or Sandra storylines) woven-in throughout, do keep it at least interesting enough.

    So yeah, all in all, if the MC wasn't such a colossal unsympathetic dick who doesn't deserve anything good to happen to him, I would probably rate this 5 stars. And I don't like taking off 2 stars for basically one nuisance but it just often really robbed me of the enjoyment of the scenes altogether.

    TLDR: The MC is a gigantic sullen asshole, otherwise this is really good if you don't mind not having too many choices.
  3. 5.00 star(s)

    QuixoteTheDon

    This game has the best written story in a VN that I played so far. You know it's a good story when you actually play a VN to READ IT and not to ... you know, fap. It's like a really good tv drama, comedy, tragedy, it pulls you in, through and through. Makes you actually feel emotions for these 3D renders. There are good games, good porn games, good erotic games, but the writing here is just next level. I mean the closest thing i can think of, that pulled me in the story as much was Dual family, and that was not as good as this is. Maybe where the heart is, no still not as good as this. Light of my life, but still, I find this better, maybe because I find the MC more relatable. You really feel the sympathy for the MC, his inner conflicts, growing desires, and yet he seemed so simple on the surface at first. I'd have to award this game as having the best MC out there. Anyway, great job! The story really deserves 5 stars. Hopefully the conclusion does not disappoint.
  4. 5.00 star(s)

    humanstickobserver

    I'm genuinely enjoying this game.
    I appreciate a romance angle this well thought out.
    The writing has made me genuinely laugh at points, the girls are beautiful, has a lot of polish.

    I guess my biggest complaint is that, with this being .91 release, the game, and the story, are close to done. As much as I'm eager to keep playing and see things resolved, like a good book or TV show, I don't want it to end.

    Oh, a lesser complaint?
    The MC has not, at least in my game, gone down on any of the girls. I think my biggest complaint with the sex in a great many of these games is it revolves around the MC getting off. Which is understandable. But especially if you're on a romance route, what better way to say "I love you" to a girl than to not worry about your own dick for a moment, and just go down on her lol?
    Just a thought.
  5. 5.00 star(s)

    Kartmaster

    Loved this one, I seem to remember playing it quite a while back when it was in very early development. I like the story behind it and its well written, not overdone so you feel like you are reading a book but not underdone either, IMO just about right. The renders look awesome on my monitor and the animations are not the best I have seen but more than good enough. Once again I am left waiting for more and looking forward to it. (Edit I just read more about the game and it seems it is finished IMO the story could still go further than it has done on the G/F and sister route.) I still give it a good thumbs up and recommend it.
  6. 5.00 star(s)

    scannatore

    Funny game. No damn stats or useless grinding. :eek:
    The girls are human like, not some aliens from bimbo planet, and they have a personality.
    Well you'll fuck one of them before or later. Probably.
    I kinda messed up the first time and i hit incest. :ROFLMAO:
    Just so you know, they don't open the legs if you smile!
    All in all 5 stars for me.
  7. 5.00 star(s)

    thetunisian

    WHAT A GAME. The renders are awesome, the story is entertaining and the sex animations are well done! Everyone should play this game, I recommand it 100%. Keep going guys and waiting for a scene with the teacher's wife r daughter... and of course with MC's mom haha
  8. 5.00 star(s)

    Lekokyn

    Easily the most engrossing writing and story of any porn game I've ever played. With extremely well done static renders too. It's also nice that the bodies are fairly realistic as well. Obviously everyone in your orbit is attractive and fit and everything but not everyone is running around with double-G cups or anything.

    Definitely highly recommend it.
  9. 5.00 star(s)

    Deleted member 833007

    When i first started playing these VN games i was quite surprised with the fetishes they had or if i speak more correctly the taboo genre which made me play these games if sex was what i looking for i would stick to the RL..so a simple a game without any plotlines or story would get me all riled up as everything was still new to me but as i began playing more and more you start noticing things especially the plot and there is that annoying fuckfest storyline and MC returning home after a long time and etc etc...but after i found out Haleys Story it was like a clean fresh breathe of air..the story is amazing ..the emotions ,expressions,dressups,silent treatments and story that is almost close to reality..i dont give a damn about the renders even though the renders are decent..If your are in for emotional and drama roller coaster then this is the game for you...Just for the Story I rate this 5/5.
  10. 5.00 star(s)

    AnotherLurker

    I remember playing this a long time ago. It was fun, then, and I was just a bit annoyed that things couldn't work out the way I wanted with certain characters given the (then) state of development. Now?

    I'm legitimately impressed.

    With most games I'll roll my eyes and skip through the...whatever it is the developer tries of pass off as dialogue to get to the renders. I might actually substitute scenarios mentally while watching the screen, if that's hotter than what the developer produced. But this?

    This is compelling. To whomever might be reading this--if, indeed, anyone does read these--I encourage you to play this. Follow the walkthrough if you don't want to miss anything, but expect a surprising degree of authenticity and character in what I call the "main story." Even the game's porn logic is unusually organic.

    And so, the least I can do is leave a review. This isn't some cookie cutter incest story or Chad MC fantasy. Is it the best H-Game ever?

    Well, no, but I don't think there is such a thing. What I do think is that this is a game worth playing. And if you can, donate to whoever's pumping out updates, because they deserve it.
  11. 5.00 star(s)

    bolondro2

    There are not enought stars in the sky for this game.

    Incest tag it´s not my thing. But I see the rewiews ant I opt to give this game a chance.

    I don´t regret it

    It´s a game that tells you a story. A love story. And the story don´t go beyond the beliable. Don´t break in any moment the "suspension of disbelief".

    I have just played once. I don´t know how far you choices can affect the story. But just for now, I have enjoyed enormously the trip.
  12. 2.00 star(s)

    Ggwpglhf

    Choices has absolutely no meaning the whole story is forced not interactive whatsoever and the dialogue is pretty bland at most times.
    Would be 1/5 if it werent for the pretty renders.
    That aside a remake of this game where dialogues had alittle effort put into them and where you have a choice and said choice has consequences could easily be a top game on this site.
  13. 5.00 star(s)

    Duncanidaho

    Story is kind of usual but dialogues betwen characters makes this game interesting. Render is good and girls are beauty. As I see choices are yes or no scheme about path with characters. Incest is optional you can choose teasing decline or seduce. If you want quick lewd scenes this game will be an endless tease for you but if you like developing relationship with characters i think you will like it. Lewd scene animations are not top but they are pretty improving as you spent more time gaming.
  14. 3.00 star(s)

    WuzzyFuzzy

    A KN disguised as a VN.

    This is one odd game. At first it's not much different than many others, typical premise, reasonably believable circumstances, regular people doing regular things, etc. But as the story progresses one begins to realize there is a definite lack of consequence based on offered choices. Typically, when I try a game I will play all branches. I want to see how the author expresses the differences in behaviors and consequence given varying scenarios. But in this game it became obvious there is no difference. Sure, you can have a little fling here or there, but there's no real consequence in doing so.

    I decided to restart the story and using the walkthrough guide I chose every 'negative' response from the MC towards Haley. So no positive relationship points from one character to another and as we typically see in most games--consequence. But in this game it matters not one bit. The reader can choose something along the lines of "don't kiss her", but then see them kissing anyway within a few lines of dialog. Make her mad, angry, sullen, etc...doesn't matter one bit. They're still going to do their thing.

    If one likes the lack of influence typically available in these games, then this is not a bad story. But if one wishes to be involved and play in god-mode, observing cause and effect, this game is not for you.

    Also, I would take issue with how the MC is portrayed. 'sullen' comes to mind. He mopes about with no endearing traits or behaviors. Although Haley's personality is abrasive and tiresome at times, at least she has some energy and panache.

    I would also mention hair. As nice as the renders are for Haley, the opposite is to be said for Diane's. If I saw something like that IRL I would be afraid hornets might attack me any moment. Keep your bug spray handy.

    Maybe the rest of the story will become more open and interactive. I will monitor future releases and may change my rating if they do. But for now, the game is simply too confining to be enjoyable.
  15. 5.00 star(s)

    ezvr96

    Characterization and writing make this game. The renders are fine, the girls are good looking, and there is a decent amount of content, but it is the personalities of the various girls that makes the game really stand out.

    The brother/sister thing is a negative for me, but I can get past it since the relationship makes sense.

    The history unfolded so far includes a bit of darkness, and I hope that as things continue this is handled in a positive way (I'm being obscure here to avoid spoilers).

    Overall highly recommended.
  16. 3.00 star(s)

    nadan

    This is a review this game desperately needs.
    I see a lot of positive feedback, and the game does deserve it, but the one thing this game does not do as well as everyone hypes it up to be, is dialogue.

    I understand why people are captivated by a game that isn't as shallow as most run-of-the-mill kind of games but it also could be better, and without much effort.

    Very quickly you will realize that the dialogue everyone is praising is as basic as "want to do this?" "alright" "cool"

    That's it.

    Very basic, one word replies to 90% of the dialogue I have encountered in the first hour of the game.

    What I think most people are referring to, is the slow build up (outside of the dialogue) and the framing of the scenes and environment.

    This game without a doubt, has one of the best settings for an incest games to date. I still believe that Summertime Saga, Parental Love and to a degree DMD does it better. But this does offer a somewhat refreshing take on how most of us picture Incest relationships to form.


    You and your sister are hired within the same firm, stuffed away in the basement of a small, but success company.

    This relationship is already established that you and your sister form a close relationship, but don't share anything sexual outside of intimate massages (feet and shoulders)

    Over the course of the early story, you develop a relationship with another girl who becomes your (sort of?) girlfriend. It's never really defined but it is implied.

    Circumstances with your sister's female boss and her disgustingly perverse husband lead you to becoming closer which sets the tone for a slow pacing, almost incest-like-fanfic romantic story between your sister and the world you share together.

    I do really appreciate a game that isn't as simple as most cash-grab incest games. But this game is not a masterpiece as most people have painted. You would be better off rewording each piece of dialogue in your head as cannon.

    I've yet to dive deep in the game, but I hope that the developer puts more effort into the dialogue.


    Overall. 3/5

    - The renders and settings are nice
    - The dialogue is similar to someone writing their first fanfic
  17. 5.00 star(s)

    danomator

    the game is simply great! well it's not really a game but a visual novel so you'll be busy reading and clicking through dialogue but that doesn't matter because the story is really well written and got me hooked from the start.. it's one of the best VN and games i played so far..

    i got so involved with the characters and couldn't help myself but went through it within the last 6 hours or so with one bathroom break.. the story is very well done as said, some spelling errors aside that are more prominent towards the end of the current update but i guess they will be sorted out with the next update(s) as up to the very end it was pretty much flawless..

    the renders are good and pretty much up to standard with other games and VN our there.. what i was pleasantly surprised with were the animations which were really well done..
    i don't want to spoil anything here so i leave it at this:

    if you are into the kinks the tags suggest then you'll like this VN.. i also want to possitively mention that you have lots of freedom with the girls in the story.. well mostly.. you'll still always live with your twin (i mean everyone should be aware that this incestious relationship is more or less the main point of this game so that should be clear)..
    but i like the option to NOT be basically forced into a relationship with every girl and fuck them all.. especially if the story is so sweet and bittersweet at the same time..
    i can't really bring myself to play the worst asshole because that is just not me in real life and not me in game life so to speak.. now i can't wait for the next update of this VN and to see where the path i choose leads me.. i guess if you don't go for all of the girls you also have a lot more replay value as you can choose another one for the next time around! and i guess for me it surely wasn't the last!

    i can only recommend to give this a try!
  18. 5.00 star(s)

    Antonie van Leeuwenhoek

    I never wrote a review before but after playing this visual novel game I m
    Overwhelmed, you guys are outstanding, and definitely going to heaven
    Well jokes aside the best about this one is the emotional bonding and love between mc and his
    s*ster
    Definitely one of my favorite visual novel, I just felt bad for MC's s*ster, right now after knowing that i just want more love to her and caring ofcourse
    And don't leave that ma da fa ka
  19. 5.00 star(s)

    Hidarkness

    One of the best games in terms of story that I´ve ever played.

    The characters are all very interesting, Haley especially and the relationship with her evolves naturally, and surprisingly romantically.

    Not too many scenes (increases over time), but at this point I would also just play for the story and the characters that you become quite attached to.
  20. 4.00 star(s)

    DoOver

    *Update 2021*
    I finished the completed version:
    + Love the renders...especially Haley!
    + Enjoyable dialogue and VN story
    -- Too dark on any of the evening/night scenes
    > Meh...choices don't seem to matter much as it has two options: a) Sandra route and b) not Sandra route
    + I'm one who enjoys the incest storyline.
    + I like the pace of the progression from brother/sister to something more
    -- animations are some of the worst I've seen that it would have been better to not break the 'immersion' and simply continued with the still images

    OVERALL: One of my top 20 or 30 favorites.

    ========================
    I haven't even finished yet (actually I'm only on page 2 of the 6 page walkthrough) and I had to come over here and leave a review. Most games you get a sense pretty quickly if it is going to be interesting or not.

    I'm loving the story's pace.
    I love the glib banter that flows well and doesn't feel forced (great writing).
    Humor is always a good quality but balanced with serious (and for an adult game "sexy") overtone, which this has so far.

    Very enjoyable. In these early stages, it is about the story and less about the sex and I'm okay with that for the reasons briefly outlined above. Keep it going!