dude if u want to fap look for another game , this game worth waiting to get what u want , enjoy the story and about adult scenes will have a lots in future chapters , take it easy to the developer we don't want to rush things to him, have a good day.Pfff... Boring... Were is fap-fap content? I wanna more!
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So far, pretty good game and story. Most of the English is well written but some odd things like saying good night as a greeting before eating supper together, good night is not a salutation, it is something said in departure. Good evening would work better in those cases.
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The game has potential but I have a few criticisms that I hope the dev would take into account.
1. The sex scenes are kind of boring, there's not much build up and it's always over fast. There's not much satisfaction from it
2. Kinda related to number 1, the romance is missing emotions, not even just the romance but the friendships as well. Every interaction feels stiff. It makes it hard to believe that the characters have or are building some sort of bond with each other
3. The structure of scenes is a bit weird. We see MC doing one activity, he sleeps. We see him do another activity, he sleeps. Very repetitive
I really enjoy games that focus on story more than sex but can build up to sex to the point where it feels like a real connect, so I hope nobody has an issue with me giving critiques. Anyways, good luck dev. I like the look of the LI's so far and the setup of the plot sounds very interesting.
1. The sex scenes are kind of boring, there's not much build up and it's always over fast. There's not much satisfaction from it
2. Kinda related to number 1, the romance is missing emotions, not even just the romance but the friendships as well. Every interaction feels stiff. It makes it hard to believe that the characters have or are building some sort of bond with each other
3. The structure of scenes is a bit weird. We see MC doing one activity, he sleeps. We see him do another activity, he sleeps. Very repetitive
I really enjoy games that focus on story more than sex but can build up to sex to the point where it feels like a real connect, so I hope nobody has an issue with me giving critiques. Anyways, good luck dev. I like the look of the LI's so far and the setup of the plot sounds very interesting.
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Yes, good night is what you say to someone either right before you go to bed or right before they go to bed or both. When you are greeting someone after dark, usually say good evening/hello/how are you this fine evening, etc.
Also, seems like we are calling our boss by his name a little too often, imo. We call his son, sir or boss mostly but seem to be overly familiar with our actual boss.
why it still end in ch.7 even i downloaded and install ch.8 i just put my saves and the mod there??
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The way he adress him is intentional, Vieira treats him like that too, but I will delve on his motives later in the game.
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oh my god yes I knew something was wrong 'but didn't know what it was until he pointed it outs there is no emotion
I am not just talking about sex scenes
Alice supposed to be my girlfriend and we're supposed to be building a Bond but there is no emotion between us and no affection
I mean I have a reading disability and I'm not very good at explaining myself
but I mean it would be cool if you could add little touches
like
Alice wanting to sit closer to me at breakfast and dinner
or Alice greeting me with a warm smile or hug instead of the same hand wave at breakfast
it would have been cool if you showed Alice getting jealous when her sister hug me
I'm a story guy and I don't really care about the sex but we don't really act like an affectionate couple
not to mention. she's always gone from the house and we barely spend any time together
I agree with you man, that's sad, very shallow, unfortunate
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exactly does mc have a medical condition where he has to sleep every minute
instead of sleeping he should spend time with his girlfriend because so far he only sees his girlfriend twice a day in every update
how are they supposed to build a believable Bond when they barely spend any time together
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you know what would be nice and it would show some signs of affection is if mc thinking about his girlfriend while he was on his missions
like wondering what she's doing right now or wishing that they could spend more time together
you know small touches here and there
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First, thank you for the feedback, I'm in no way under the illusion of being a great storyteller but I will try to improve on that aspect, as I'm a not a very emotional person myself.
I tend to reserve those more touch feely moments to when they are alone, else it would be too obvious to Vieira what's happening between the actors.
Jealously would make sense if they were not aware that both are in a relationship with the mc.
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Thank you so much for the answer bro, just do your best, the most important thing you always do, which is to gladly accept constructive criticism and answer us, so thanks for being an excellent developer, a good developer is not just the one who makes a good game, but mostly, most importantly, be a humble-hearted and respectful person, and that bro, that you are
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oh my God thank you so much for responding to my comment it means a lot I know that they have to keep their relationship a secret but her dad is not around all the time
and if they really love each other
find a way to show affection in secret like maybe a Look hair and they're smile or hand-holding
or I don't know pull her into a closet point is people in love find a way
how can they build a relationship if they don't show any affection at all
you're right maybe she wouldn't get Jealous by a hug but maybe when it's her turn to hug him she does something extra I kiss him on the cheek
and instead of sleeping all the time he could say he's going out for groceries she could say she's going out to the library and they can meet in secret
they can spend time together without people finding out
I know it's dangerous but if they love each other
they can't be too afraid to take risk
or the relationship will go nowhere
oh and I'm not in any relationship with any other character in the game I love monogamy and I hate to cheat
it's Alice all the way for me
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Maybe the subtly of everything (at least it seems almost everything) is a little too subtle, thus giving the impressions people are posting. For me.. ok yea.. maybe the text is a little dry here and there, (and the good night thing i also caught, but I gave a pass cause i understood the intent), but I got a lot of the subtlety between at least the sisters and the MC, the sort of unspoken acknowledgement that both sisters are into the MC, (hence why so far no jealousy), and also the subtle desire to not be so open about whats going on so the father doesn't get on MC for it.. (but i think he knows anyway.. and doesnt care as long as hes safe and the girls are well treated).
I guess I'm just good at reading in between the lines at times.
Little upgrades to the text here and there I think will be fine, don't think its as drastic.
The "going to bed thing" all the time.. also take that as we are only getting the "highlights" of the day or the "necessary" interactions of the day.. we don't see all the mundane things that happen in between the good scenes.
I guess I'm just good at reading in between the lines at times.
Little upgrades to the text here and there I think will be fine, don't think its as drastic.
The "going to bed thing" all the time.. also take that as we are only getting the "highlights" of the day or the "necessary" interactions of the day.. we don't see all the mundane things that happen in between the good scenes.
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Don't get me wrong, I'm not attacking the dev but at what point does it go from "reading between the lines" to "subconsciously filling in blanks that the author won't fill themselves" it's a common thing similar to headcannon I think. See, that's another thing I noticed, them being cautious of the father finding out about their growing relationship would be something worth believing if the father showed that he actually cared.
I was waiting for him to warn the MC to stay PG with his daughters, but he didn't mention anything about them except that they exist. So there's no real risk there. As for the seeing highlights of the day part you mentioned, that's what makes good storytelling. Just being able to take things that might seem mundane and giving them a purpose. Even if it's just building relationships because even the "good scenes" are cut short with no payoff or feeling of accomplishment.
Honestly, I might be taking the game more seriously than the Dev themselves is taking it, but the vibe I'm getting from this game is that they want to create something that also focuses on the story, which is why I'm going so deep with my critiques lol. If it's meant to be a fuckfest then I apologize, on that front, the only thing I'd say is the sex scenes could be greatly improved
