- May 25, 2017
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Thank you! I fixed the dark bug, and typos (The "in you" is, indeed, meant literally. I can't say anymore without spoilers.)Okay, next batch:
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"passed" should be "past it."
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Just to make sure, is it intended that the screen color changes here after briefly going to the dream world? They are inside a building, so even if we assume that it is already night that should not affect the lighting. In fact, they should not know it's night time until after they leave the temple
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"alter" sgould be "altar".
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There should be a comma after "no" (before "nothing").
Also, if I understand correctly, "goddess' realms" should be "goddesses' realms". Unless all realms belong to a single goddess.
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"in you" should probably be "on you". Unless it is meant literally here.
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"somethings" should be "something's"
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"be coincedence" should be "be a coincidence".
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When talking to Lily and asking for sex there's no way to go back, you must choose the handjob option.
Also, on the last two screenshots I don't think it should be dark inside even if it is night time outside.
And another thing, I think someone else already mentioned this, but after I finished Chapter 1 it's still night time.
A little bit of feedback: So far I like the changes to the early story.
The thing about choosing the handjob option is intentional too. I figured, since it's impossible for the player to accidently pick the sex option, I might as well leave out a way to back out. It'll keep the choice menu from being overly cluttered in the code when it get's a bit larger. I already might have to separate them into categories, at least for Lily.