Ren'Py Abandoned Heavy Five [Ch.2RS] [Nottravis]

[83wulf]

Love this game. The writing is excellent, the art very good and the attention to detail is impressive. Excited to see where all of this goes.


I’m an absolute sucker for strong, competent women without too much bullshit power-play. So Chris’ romance path pushes a lot of the right buttons for me so far. (To me, dom/sub-play is great as occasional bedroom fun (either direction) but a turn-off when a serious part of the relationship dynamic). She and the non-pushover MC are a good match and foil for each other.

Annie is a great gal. I’d love to have a real, 2019 Earth version of her as a friend/drinking buddy.

Sarah is a marshmallow. (And I’m happy to see that there is more to her than that.)

Kelly is my second favourite, after non-dom Chris, but a bit of a blank sheet so far. In my opinion, any incest must be well written and not rushed. However, from what I’ve seen of this game so far, that won’t be a problem.

Trisha is beautiful, but raises so many red flags it isn’t even funny. (Ok, it is). Her name and her marriage are at first sight a spoof of something like the Jeremy Kyle show (she is even named Trisha). But then I remember that of course, any similarity to real persons or events is entirely coincidental.
Entirely.

 

[WalrusMallone]

Thank you - and no hard feelings from my side.

Maybe wait until a few more chapters are out and give it another whirl later when the content pads out. But as I say, we all like different things and that's cool. Be a boring world if we didn't, no?

Will do you and the other member "whose name can't remember no offence" made some great points. Again sorry about that I wasn't trolling your game and obviously missed some paths got frustrated and talked out my ass. Next month I'll try again and I appreciate that you didn't take the elitist approach when dealing with me.

 

[Nottravis]

My God you've all been chatty *goes reads what she can*

 

[Nottravis]

found this from TheDelucaFamily thread and have to say - amazing game a real gem
very cool to have a female developer as well!
games with good story and imagination are really rare this is one of the very few

Thank you. You're far too kind. I'm glad you've found my little game and are enjoying it.

 

[Nottravis]

The Chinese was shut! What kind of takeaway shuts on a Saturday night??? I had to settle for chips! (fat fries to the non-British)

Good Lord. It's the end of days I tell you!

I was put off by Trish at first but then it dawned on me....

Trish has boobs.

I like boobs.

I must like Trish.

I feel slightly conflicted at this new development.

Having seen them several hundred times I can confirm they're pretty good ones too.

Absolutely, that's why Notty was the first dev I ever supported

*curtsies*

I refuse to believe Notty would just give us a simple nympho without depth...

It does seem unlikely doesn't it? Given what I've done with the blonde bimbo trope

You wanna see shifty? Just wait until Notty includes the render of MC looking in the mirror!

*is keeping back that power to ensure they all behave*

Edit: Just realized now that Yeoman and Ensign share similarities in their rank, so another point from me.

*concedes that this may be a bit deliberate in the choice of the sister's name*

I am not your sister,i am Thea Lundgren!! show me your cock or your real sister dies!!!, MC takes his pants off, Kelly " OMG you actually did it, i can´t believe i tricked you so easily" classic Notty move, after the Boob "incident" i am more clever for this little tricks .. i hope

*looks hurt!* You guys think I set out to trick you?
*remembers her track record and shuts up!*

 

[Nottravis]

Almost right, but completely wrong

*gasp* What if Thea Lundgren was actually making all of us think she was Thea Lundgren, when in fact she's been really dead all along!? What if that's a master plan from Annie to teach us the importance of conspiracy theories!? What Notty's not really drinking at a pub but has been abducted by Thea's followers to add her to the game and keep the myth alive!?

I wonder what will happen if the MC starts sharing conspiracy theories with Annie...

Well, would Thea Lundgren know about Bear? I made sure to let sister tell the tale (having 3 sisters, I know sisters get REALLY annoyed when they get interrupted), so that part was verified as correct.

*does like to lay all the evidence out for the player to make their own minds up about things!*
On that sort of thing btw, I always try to play fair. There are some twists and turns down the road (as you'd expect) and despite the generally frothy tone of the game, bad things can happen. BUT you should always have clues and warnings and build up to avoid it.

Even the slightly infamous chapter two "bad end" (which was no such thing of course, merely a different branch in the story) was signalled all the way back in chapter one. The only exception was the bad end in One which was to make a point that that sort of thing could go down.

I still suspect Marcus to be Thea. Why does he have those radioactives in his lab? And what is that black case on the shelve above that? And why are those food dyes so important, when all he'd need is to properly label the pillboxes? And how did he even run out of his previous stack of food dyes? You'd need to be making pills in industrial quantities to ever run out of that stuff.

Good questions. Well worth having a close look at one of those cases....

 

[Nottravis]

Speaking about easter eggs, why do you think we have this painting in Sarah's room:
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I wondered when someone would have a look at that. I could of course just have chosen it randomly...Maybe?

Sometimes, you may be looking too deep into things.

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Quite right. Although...interesting I took the time to actually change quite a lot of that asset and left the numbers up. Or maybe I was just a bit lazy and didn't change that one bit. One of those.

THANK YOU! I knew there was something off about that one! The numbers are typical spam-with-one-hand "human random" numbers. Happens easily when the other hand uses the mouse.
It's a bit disappointing, because every other piece of legible text in the images in the entire fucking game is either descriptive, connected to story somehow, a clue, or used for comedic effect. This is the one and only example of nonsense in-image text that is clearly visible.

Notty you naughty gel! If you want us to really put effort in then you can't have dead ends like this laying around!

Who says it is! *grins*

because every other piece of legible text in the images in the entire fucking game is either descriptive, connected to story somehow, a clue, or used for comedic effect

Odd that I'd not do something with one of the most visible ones given what else I've done don't you think? Or maybe...maybe I was just a bit tired and forgot. Who knows! (oh wait, I do!)


As to all the chat about Kelly, all I'll say is...let's see what happens shall we?

 

[Nottravis]

Love this game. The writing is excellent, the art very good and the attention to detail is impressive. Excited to see where all of this goes.


I’m an absolute sucker for strong, competent women without too much bullshit power-play. So Chris’ romance path pushes a lot of the right buttons for me so far. (To me, dom/sub-play is great as occasional bedroom fun (either direction) but a turn-off when a serious part of the relationship dynamic). She and the non-pushover MC are a good match and foil for each other.

Annie is a great gal. I’d love to have a real, 2019 Earth version of her as a friend/drinking buddy.

Sarah is a marshmallow. (And I’m happy to see that there is more to her than that.)

Kelly is my second favourite, after non-dom Chris, but a bit of a blank sheet so far. In my opinion, any incest must be well written and not rushed. However, from what I’ve seen of this game so far, that won’t be a problem.

Trisha is beautiful, but raises so many red flags it isn’t even funny. (Ok, it is). Her name and her marriage are at first sight a spoof of something like the Jeremy Kyle show (she is even named Trisha). But then I remember that of course, any similarity to real persons or events is entirely coincidental.
Entirely.

Thank you so much for your kind words and welcome to the game and, quite possibly, the silliest thread on the forum.

I have to say that the Chris romance route was one of my favs to have written - and I'd agree (then again I would!) that her and a non-pushover MC do make a good match. I keep thinking of all those cop buddy movies whenever I write those bits!

 

[Nottravis]

Also!


*laughs loud!*

Oh, superb. Simply superb!

 

[I'm Not Thea Lundgren!]

Also!
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*laughs loud!*

Oh, superb. Simply superb!

I'm glad you approve; it was all your doing!

 

[Nottravis]

On Easter Eggs generally, I think I might have to do a little post end of game credits thingy showing you them all? What do you think?

*at the end of the game itself, not the chapter!*

 

[I'm Not Thea Lundgren!]

On Easter Eggs generally, I think I might have to do a little post end of game credits thingy showing you them all? What do you think?

Not for a while, maybe leave it a couple of versions and give them for the first couple? e.g. at the end of four, give them for one and two?

 

[Akamari]

On Easter Eggs generally, I think I might have to do a little post end of game credits thingy showing you them all? What do you think?

*at the end of the game itself, not the chapter!*

Or you can just point them out during the dev commentary post game.

 

[I'm Not Thea Lundgren!]

Right... nap-time I think, I've been up since Thursday.
Laters, all!
Remember to behave, if you can't behave; try not to get caught!

 

[Nottravis]

Right... nap-time I think, I've been up since Thursday.
Laters, all!
Remember to behave, if you can't behave; try not to get caught!

Sound advice.

Righties, I'm off for a bit too. Renders to make while I can.

Laters!

 

[alexrieper]

*SIGH* I still want that outfit in Daz Studio. And a proper Asari model with correct headfolds and correct skin texture, I know there are some attempts on the net, but still haven't found a satisfyingly good one..

Now that would be a nice surprise, I would very much like to see that outfit again.

I hate to be the gal that rains on this fine parade but....

The Kelly in this game is the MC's sister and it's highly doubtful Notty has incest planned.

If you squint you could probably make Sarah out to be a Kelly.

No worries love, I never leave the house without an umbrella. This is not my first run at the game, I know all about Bear and the plane incident. But it still makes sense in my head, and Commander Shepard doesn't care. He gets the females! Whatever it takes!

Edit: Just realized now that Yeoman and Ensign share similarities in their rank, so another point from me. I have a review to write tomorrow!

*concedes that this may be a bit deliberate in the choice of the sister's name*

I win, you can all go home. Joker, fly us off to the next available bar ASAP. Drinks are on me!

 

[Nottravis]

Almost right, but completely wrong


*gasp* What if Thea Lundgren was actually making all of us think she was Thea Lundgren, when in fact she's been really dead all along!? What if that's a master plan from Annie to teach us the importance of conspiracy theories!? What Notty's not really drinking at a pub but has been abducted by Thea's followers to add her to the game and keep the myth alive!?

Answers to those questions, and more, in the Thea Lundgren Show, series 4, so stay tuned!
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Surprised that's the only Queen theme we've picked up....

*gets -very- meta at times*

Spoiler: Chapter 1 theme for example...

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Of course you don't have to hunt or spot all the meta things to play the game. Half the time I put them in to amuse me if I'm honest. But there's also part of me that thinks if you like my stuff you'll probs like all my in-jokes and meta stuff lurking around too.

For example there is a line that Sarah says on her bad path which only if you're on this forum will you get the joke.

 

[Akamari]

Surprised that's the only Queen theme we've picked up....

*gets -very- meta at times*

Alright! Who wants to play "Let's Guess The Plot With Queen Songs"?

 

[RC-1138 Boss]

Surprised that's the only Queen theme we've picked up....

*gets -very- meta at times*

Spoiler: Chapter 1 theme for example...

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Of course you don't have to hunt or spot all the meta things to play the game. Half the time I put them in to amuse me if I'm honest. But there's also part of me that thinks if you like my stuff you'll probs like all my in-jokes and meta stuff lurking around too.

For example there is a line that Sarah says on her bad path which only if you're on this forum will you get the joke.

Not going to lie, as a Queen fan I really didn't notice this.

 

[Akamari]

Happy to confirm that you'll defo see Sarah's pussy in Four...

Did Sarah smuggle her cat with her? Isn't that against the rules or something?

Given that there is Kelly's cat present we might get another catfight...