VN Ren'Py Hero [v0.1 The awakening] [A Mob]

[Incognito^]

I sure hope it's not a limit lol


THX

well for now I have eye for milfs only almost all the characters are milfs

 

[DickBobyson]

is there a reason why this was reuploaded 7 months later with actually zero new content?

 

[Look-see]

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Well originally it was good to see this medieval title has a harem tag... But now this project will also include NTR content, which I really hate it being a harem fan. (Netori is the only NTR that is accepted by the harem fanbase.)

And FYI, most harem fans will not be interest in a title that has NTR cuck / love interest cheating on MC content...or even sharing / swinging in a harem story. Or watching others have sex that isn't the MC.

Anyways, good luck with this endeavor. It's a pass for me, due to NTR being considered...it's a tag I avoid.

Regards.

based on his explanation on his Itch.io dude is new to the NTR term but plans to be Netori only. makes it clear that he has no intention for mc to share his girls

 

[drifter139]

based on the dialogue in the game, I'm gonna skip this one. honestly mc is a douchebag, grammar is awful, and if the only models you intend to use are married women, you'll find your audience not very interested

 

[Jnx]

Since I'm not a child that has to have their kinks catered to, I genuinely won't complain about the content. I don't have a preference one way or the other as long as it's not deplorable shit. It's your game, do what you want. What you need to do is work on the writing and animations. The grammar is god awful. Even the banner for this thread has "The power of a Hero who saved world with power of lust" Read that sentence real slow and tell me what's wrong with it. Then to have this long winded cult speech at the beginning, with them repeating long lines of dialogue is useless filler to inflate the word count. And the first animation you see? The king rubber-bands like he's made of jelly and his hand tweens back and forth through some girl's boob. That looks terrible, you're gonna need to up your game. For once I will say the lighting mostly matches between stills and animations, so you do have an understanding of that. But angles and movement are just not there. Best of luck, dev.

 

[fajiker145]

based on his explanation on his Itch.io dude is new to the NTR term but plans to be Netori only. makes it clear that he has no intention for mc to share his girls

You might want to read the dev's comments in the thread because "no ntr" means nothing here, in fact, normal ntr woukd be tamer than what's in the game . Ot is definitely not a game for someone who's not into it.

 

[Incognito^]

is there a reason why this was reuploaded 7 months later with actually zero new content?

Well who said it has not new content

i cleared few spaces that are not attached well and a few renders that are added to clear out the messiness and removed the MC family attachment way to story and made it solely his journey
not much but this small patch /update wil help mewith v0.2

I hope your come back when I release v0.2

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"The power of a Hero who saved world with power of lust" where did I use that phrase?? can you please show me a pic of where I use that phrase

I said "The Tale of Hero who saved world with power of LUST" did you read the About and pic above that???

about animations I fully agree I'm not good at 3d all the renders and animations are done by @cnsam nice dude. He said don't have time clear out junk you said but still We will still make it look good as much as possible

about story part dude the dialogues and everything on spot it is mediaeval dialogues and that is how they speak and also vult thing how can you show This is a tyrant with out showing every little bit of him

It is just a preference issue I like my story to be slow and detailed that show every aspect of my characters. I won't change that

and my english also perfect show me one dialogue from my script that a dialogue is wrng I bet you you won't find it
because I cleared every inch bad dialogue and scarp in new version

 

[Incognito^]

based on the dialogue in the game, I'm gonna skip this one. honestly mc is a douchebag, grammar is awful, and if the only models you intend to use are married women, you'll find your audience not very interested

OK atleast you're based and know what you like and dislike, unlike the people who give likes to your comment

they called me cuck cuck bro

whatever my take is different from most of the VNS I'm going for more of a Anti hero if you like it if you dislike no prob.

have a great night dude

 

[Incognito^]

Spoiler: Well

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so you saying people are not into netori???
Dude it is clearly you in the charge of every fucking thing like...

Whatever people have likes and dislikes you like the netroi or not??
Netori ≠ Netotare
and always says that mc don't share woman with anyone you always on the high ground

I hope this clears for so many!

 

[Incognito^]

based on his explanation on his Itch.io dude is new to the NTR term but plans to be Netori only. makes it clear that he has no intention for mc to share his girls

if I'm new to term I won't even be specific that I say this NTR IS not NETOTARE this NTR IS Netori but thanks for the sharing the explanation I gave in ITCH

whatever I will put it too

 

[Jnx]

Well who said it has not new content

i cleared few spaces that are not attached well and a few renders that are added to clear out the messiness and removed the MC family attachment way to story and made it solely his journey
not much but this small patch /update wil help mewith v0.2

I hope your come back when I release v0.2


"The power of a Hero who saved world with power of lust" where did I use that phrase?? can you please show me a pic of where I use that phrase

I said "The Tale of Hero who saved world with power of LUST" did you read the About and pic above that???

about animations I fully agree I'm not good at 3d all the renders and animations are done by @cnsam nice dude. He said don't have time clear out junk you said but still We will still make it look good as much as possible

about story part dude the dialogues and everything on spot it is mediaeval dialogues and that is how they speak and also vult thing how can you show This is a tyrant with out showing every little bit of him

It is just a preference issue I like my story to be slow and detailed that show every aspect of my characters. I won't change that

and my english also perfect show me one dialogue from my script that a dialogue is wrng I bet you you won't find it
because I cleared every inch bad dialogue and scarp in new version

The banner for this thread. That's what the image says.
And no, in the exact sentence you said your English is perfect, you didn't even write that grammatically correct. So I hope that was a joke. I'm not trying to be combative like some others, I'm just trying to point out things you should work on for the future and edit in the future.

 

[Incognito^]

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are fukcing joking now



it is tale not power MF

you can't even read what is right Infront of you

another troll you have time to troll someone hard work for fun Shut up


which part of the tale looks power to you


WTF are you really serious


I know I'm not good at English but I know the difference between a tale and power. you can't even read that or else you want to say now i changed that

I can even show the last edited date of that pic if you want

 

[caosleyton]

Man it ended just as it was starting to suck me in can't wait for the next update

 

[Jnx]

are fukcing joking now

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it is tale not power MF

you can't even read what is right Infront of you

another troll you have time to troll someone hard work for fun Shut up


which part of the tale looks power to you
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WTF are you really serious
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I know I'm not good at English but I know the difference between a tale and power. you can't even read that or else you want to say now i changed that

I can even show the last edited date of that pic if you want

My bad, I wrote power instead of tale. It SHOULD SAY "The tale of a Hero who saved THE world with THE power of lust"
But go ahead, antagonize someone trying to give you advice.
Better still, call my giving you advice trolling. You have an uphill battle here, just trying to help.
But I guess I'll go fuck myself because I'm a troll now.
Good talk.

 

[Incognito^]

My bad, I wrote power instead of tale. It SHOULD SAY "The tale of a Hero who saved THE world with THE power of lust"
But go ahead, antagonize someone trying to give you advice.
Better still, call my giving you advice trolling. You have an uphill battle here, just trying to help.
But I guess I'll go fuck myself because I'm a troll now.
Good talk.

THE


you kept on a big cope and calling me
you're wrng
without even seeing what you did was wrng

and know there is thing called UI adjustments for UI some articles are removed to make it look good
just because there is no THE it doesn't change the narrative or the meaning of line and also you said you saw wrng in my English in game

So saying based on these small thing, I need a writer and grammer guy???

WTF a human can't even miss the or have a wrong verb form, dude we reading porn games dude not the Shakespeare books

 

[Jnx]

Okay, not coming back to this game.
Next time I point out poor English I'll be sure to cite and correct every line of grammar, doing another dev's job for them because otherwise I'm a troll.

You're coming off too combative for people giving mild criticism. I was on your side about the childish morons that come in to bitch about fetish A or Fetish B not being in a dumb porn game. But pardon me for thinking lines like "Your pussy feels great compared to all. Those breast bitch." says your English is terrible.

And no, at no point do you remove words that make a sentence readable for the sake of formatting. That's amateurish at best.

So once again, sorry for trying to give you advice. Hope your personality doesn't turn away more people.

 

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Spoiler: WTF

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Dude you said power for tale and I tried to correct you and you didn't saw it and went on I'm wrong
again I tried to correct for your mistake and told you reason

Me giving reason makes combative for mild critics and you took my side Dude do you think I care about some cuck comments I fucking play with them Until I get bored that is how it works

and also dude I'm not english professor to make every sentence has correct grammer ok
"your pussy feels good compared to all" what you didn't understand here can you please elaborate sir
everything is your fault and coming at me for one or two dialogues that are wrng

that is not called criticism you just cheery picking a wrng line and saying I'm wrng when I wrote good lines like this


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and I have even more good lines like this that elevates the story and some cope artists trying to show a fucking line

I wrote for fun like 2 lines he showed Dude

you have a plan to ruin my game for some wrng lines and removing everything in the game

i didn't know you but you attacking me with your lazy review you didn't tried to read what you wrote and I corrected you you didn't read that

when I gave explanation I'm toxic and I can't take critic's WTF

everybody is victim around me except me. this dude take a wrng line and say all the grammer in the game is bad etc., and he is victim and I'm toxic for calling him out

 

[Juerhullycin]

Well Mr active member

if some dick calling me cuck cuck all the time I give reply to them, me being a dick

And also what kind of brain paused people think this is NTR (netotare) not NTR (Netori)
here In past I stated

mc likes to have sex with married woman
mc didn't view them as love interest (where did i said that show me.)
mc takes pride in stealing someone wife

in all of this which aspect is against what he is asking

Just you coping and thinking I might change my story narrative direction just because a big number of people screaming in the comment section

hell na

I have a goal in my mind I will do that
so you either be a good guy and go to your fav genre stuff or SHut the hell up.

stop cope Where the hell did I said mc likes being cucked
Where did i said I will make full blown animation for toxic relationship of Queen
Where the hell did I said I make full scene narrative of how she gets ravaged is shown

All i said was a snippet that shows how she gets tormented by that tyrant king
Do you know snippet is a pic or photo

Shut your cope bum and try to be civil ask what hell you have prob

I will be in my 100% sane brain and reply to you with respect

Stop these weird tactics
What hell you ask him read full thread you need to read full thread

I once and never told that my mc likes seeing or watching someone getting fucked Infront of him,
He likes to share with men or woman, he is a cuck or any bullshit

so think with brain and open your brain
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so why do you think the player wants to see cuck stuff then?

 

[drifter139]

OK atleast you're based and know what you like and dislike, unlike the people who give likes to your comment

they called me cuck cuck bro

whatever my take is different from most of the VNS I'm going for more of a Anti hero if you like it if you dislike no prob.

have a great night dude

I don't say these things to be a dick. rather I'm highlighting issues you can fix going forward to make a more successful VN and hopefully it leads into you making other games that people enjoy. again, not saying it to be a dick but rather just a bit of honest criticism

 

[JD JJJD]

Damn, looks like we will have a 'Solo Leveling' parody? Not entirely sure, as it wasn't clear on Patreon.
Also, from what the developer said there will be no NTR but there will be Netori (MC have sex with other people wives)

Have fun!

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I like this developer I'm going to try his game as soon as I can