I do truly hope you enjoy it.
I am afraid even with searching for all endings, it might take a few hours at most.
We still need to fix some things and every time I fix one thing, it feels like something else pops up.
However I am sure that each version is a bit better than the last. And I have no doubt that the last one will be the best.
Don't worry about paying us, or telling others about us. I appreciate every patron, but situations are different. I know that very well. Don't close your f95 account, if you do like the game, I'll send you the final version with animations as soon as it is ready. It will take a moment, but I am sure my patrons won't mind.
I am glad I've uploaded the game here.
I'm loving it so far!
There are a few minor grammatic and spelling errors but not bad. I don't get to compliment an AVN dev for English language use often but this is well above average, quite good in fact. I found a few places that dropped "the", "of" and a few other random omissions and errors but nothing overly critical. However, there were a couple of misquoted American euphemisms that were not properly used...
It's office jockey, not junkie... or, more precisely, desk jockey because the office personnel are said to "ride a desk" (like a jockey riding a horse) in both military and law enforcement culture where the phrase originates. Office jockey is less common to hear yet still valid and applicable. The fact that it is Mark, the idiot bouncer, speaking excuses the misuse of this common term yet I kept waiting for James to at least think, "What an idiot! It's office jockey or desk jockey, not office junkie! What a moron!" Something like that. That would demonstrate that the author at least realizes what the phrase should be and reinforces that Mark is true knuckle dragging, mouth breathing, numb skull! Now, paper shuffling office monkey...
that I
have heard! Hahahahahahaha
But, never the junkie thing. Mark is truly an idiot.
Also, one is either green OR wet behind the ears however one is never green behind the ears. Green refers to a sapling tree that is green all the way through compared to a more seasoned tree that is no longer green inside but rather replaced by white and brown rings of actual wood. To say one is green is to indicate inexperience which was the intended use here. Wet behind the ears is a similar sentiment. One can even combine them as being green and wet behind the ears because green refers specifically to inexperience whereas wet behind the ears refers to immaturity, thus inexperienced and immature. I am uncertain of the origin of the wet ear thing but it may have to do with amniotic fluid on a newborn. Literally wet behind the ears and elsewhere else as well. I cannot translate all English euphemisms into something intelligent, many just don't make any sense TBH however they are always said in the same way for a certain meaning, like "you don't have a dog in this fight" is an old southern expression that means both 'none of your business' and 'you have no stake in this discussion' simultaneously.
Then I see the genius that makes me love this story... The most recent example I can quote is James thinking about Mark, "It's clear he lacks the mental capacity-empathy, if you will-to understand what he's doing. If I help him, I do what Clara asked of me and he will be as happy as possible."
These characters are exceptionally well written and perfectly flawed humans. It is our flaws that make us truly human. I love what you have done with this story. The English spelling and grammar aside, this is an exceptional, outstanding story!
I know at least one of all of these people. They are that real. Well, I know all except Sandra... I only wish I knew Sandra.
So, bravo! Take a bow.
It didn't take long at all for me to get hooked by this incredible story and these totally realistic and utterly fascinating characters.
And, maybe get a proofreader for the dialogue text. I'd be willing to do it, learn whatever software you use to edit the game and repair all grammatical errors, nearly free of charge... I would only ask a few minor concessions... Early access to all your games and updates for any projects where I am assisting and that you never, ever, under pain of death ask me to join a discord server, meet you on twitter or instagram or any other of those frivolous, mind wasting sites. I do have facebook but I actually prefer email for communication or the private message service here on F95 is quite adequate and rather discreet. Let me know if I can help. I only make this offer because I like what I see and fully believe I can be a benefit to you. The grammatic errors I saw thus far are minor and easily edited. Oh, you also have to promise to actually USE my edits. Otherwise, it's a huge waste of both of our time. Just let me know if I can assist. Considering that you are offering me a final version already, I may be too late for Karma. But, I sense that there will be many more projects like this coming in the hopefully not too distant future. Just let me know.
Still playing and enjoying at present. Still considering whether to help Mark or destroy him. I'm leaning toward destruction but will sleep on it and decide tomorrow. Hope to talk soon.
Adventure ever on my friend, Phat
PS: There is some amazing dialogue hiding in here. Like this line...
