VN Ren'Py Abandoned Kindread: The Redburns [Ch. 5] [Inkalicious]

[TomberryDude]

Thanks for the considered post TomberryDude
It is a concern that I've added too much drama to, what's definitely, a porn game. However I don't think I could've made it work another way.

Of course it has lots of porn logic, but it I felt it had to be reasonable on how they struggle to let go of the last bits of their old life. The apocalyptic situation lends itself to high stress and then big releases (I think).

On some of your points, the next chapter isn't going to be comfortable (depending on your previous choices) but I can say this...
Yes, it's set in an apocalypse and trouble is coming, but regarding the main characters, they're changing to fit their new relationships. And your choices will either make it easier or difficult for them, but there's no sadism and the aim is to get the girls.

There are still some reveals on what you've seen so far, and hopefully you'll stick around to see them.

After this, I swear I'll do a straight-up sex romp. I've already written one about an old haunted school, some teen ghost hunters and a watch that can stop time. Expect that to land in 2030.

Thanks for the reply. Don't get me wrong, it's not that I want straight up no-brain porn. I just prefer happy stories. I still think the game is very good and well written and yes, I'll stick around.

 

[Nubatron]

The mother is clearly a closet pervert. You can see this when she first tries to "relieve" her daughter. The fact that she try to do it first to her means that it is not a case where she "does it so she does not have to kick the MC out". That is obviously what she tells the MC and herself though.
Then, there is also the fact that MC has the option on some occasions to try and refuse her. Which will end up with her going on the aggressive. There is no reason to feel bad, as she most likely wants it more (at the beginning) than the MC. Though even then, the danger of being kicked out is real as it later turns out during Chapter 3.
I guess it would be about time for the MC to do something for the mother at this point. We will see what the future holds.

 

[Meridian]

Last chapter left a sour aftertaste. Sister making you the villain while doing worse things behind the scenes sucks but I guess if mc is gonna get angry at that and not just forgive her on spot then its fixable.

Mommy waking mc up and teasing him, bringing up how other men pester her for bjs and hjs are not enough for them. I guess its her way of hinting that mc should do it or maybe its supposed to be a compliment for mc. But for a guy that type of talk will sound like a taunt since he isnt getting those blowjobs. And the only way to call her on it is to ask her to finnish what she started but then the game penalize you with -4 points for that so its kind not the way to go I guess. This whole mess left me with some mixed feelings.

 

[TomberryDude]

Last chapter left a sour aftertaste. Sister making you the villain while doing worse things behind the scenes sucks but I guess if mc is gonna get angry at that and not just forgive her on spot then its fixable.

Mommy waking mc up and teasing him, bringing up how other men pester her for bjs and hjs are not enough for them. I guess its her way of hinting that mc should do it or maybe its supposed to be a compliment for mc. But for a guy that type of talk will sound like a taunt since he isnt getting those blowjobs. And the only way to call her on it is to ask her to finnish what she started but then the game penalize you with -4 points for that so its kind not the way to go I guess. This whole mess left me with some mixed feelings.

Thanks I feel less alone LOL

 

[inkalicious]

Last chapter left a sour aftertaste. Sister making you the villain while doing worse things behind the scenes sucks but I guess if mc is gonna get angry at that and not just forgive her on spot then its fixable.

Mommy waking mc up and teasing him, bringing up how other men pester her for bjs and hjs are not enough for them. I guess its her way of hinting that mc should do it or maybe its supposed to be a compliment for mc. But for a guy that type of talk will sound like a taunt since he isnt getting those blowjobs. And the only way to call her on it is to ask her to finnish what she started but then the game penalize you with -4 points for that so its kind not the way to go I guess. This whole mess left me with some mixed feelings.

This is my take on this, but I think some of this is down to the chapters length and the timing between releases. I'm saying this as I never intended it to be a slog to get the girls, but three chapters and many moons later, it's obviously not quite the harem yet.

I don't want players to think 'Oh, no. I don't think I can face the next chapter.' but the next one includes more hurdles. Though how much depends on your play through.
So, here are major spoilers on the character relationships. It won't give too much details on stuff that's happened, and still to be revealed, or stuff to come. However it might help put some of what's happened in context.

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[Meridian]

This is my take on this, but I think some of this is down to the chapters length and the timing between releases. I'm saying this as I never intended it to be a slog to get the girls, but three chapters and many moons later, it's obviously not quite the harem yet.

I don't want players to think 'Oh, no. I don't think I can face the next chapter.' but the next one includes more hurdles. Though how much depends on your play through.
So, here are major spoilers on the character relationships. It won't give too much details on stuff that's happened, and still to be revealed, or stuff to come. However it might help put some of what's happened in context.

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Thanks for reply. Your release schedule aside I am quite happy with pacing ingame. Doesn't feel slow at all. And your game is very good so I was never close to "I don't think I can face the next chapter" mindset. Hurdles are fine by me, I only didnt like that it felt like you had to take shit from Megan at that night. Overall I can't wait to see how current situation will resolve.

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[koqkoq]

Thanks for the considered post TomberryDude
It is a concern that I've added too much drama to, what's definitely, a porn game. However I don't think I could've made it work another way.

Of course it has lots of porn logic, but it I felt it had to be reasonable on how they struggle to let go of the last bits of their old life. The apocalyptic situation lends itself to high stress and then big releases (I think).

On some of your points, the next chapter isn't going to be comfortable (depending on your previous choices) but I can say this...
Yes, it's set in an apocalypse and trouble is coming, but regarding the main characters, they're changing to fit their new relationships. And your choices will either make it easier or difficult for them, but there's no sadism and the aim is to get the girls.

There are still some reveals on what you've seen so far, and hopefully you'll stick around to see them.

After this, I swear I'll do a straight-up sex romp. I've already written one about an old haunted school, some teen ghost hunters and a watch that can stop time. Expect that to land in 2030.

For what it's worth, I don't think there's "too much drama" at all, in my opinion it's just right. So many games on here are just mindless sex, where the characters are completely one dimensional and unrealistic, driven only by their hunger for MC's huge dick.

I think it's nice to play a game where the characters act in a somewhat believable manner in the context of the story, it makes the girls feel more real and the sex parts are more rewarding as a result.

Oh and time-stop porn is my jam, looking forward to 2030 already.

 

[rf96]

I like your story, it's not like all the other incest clones. Seriously, people shouldn't be looking for easy love stories in a zombie apocalypse game.

 

[Kyril87]

Thanks for the considered post TomberryDude
It is a concern that I've added too much drama to, what's definitely, a porn game. However I don't think I could've made it work another way.

Yeah, it's clearly a problem that you've tried -- with some success -- to construct decent characters. For God's sake, don't worry about the main thing that makes this a stand-out game. You've succeeded in creating an immersive apocalyptic atmosphere. This requires no apology.

Of course it has lots of porn logic, but it I felt it had to be reasonable on how they struggle to let go of the last bits of their old life. The apocalyptic situation lends itself to high stress and then big releases (I think).

You have constructed an internal logic that seems to work well. It's your game -- keep doing it your way.

On some of your points, the next chapter isn't going to be comfortable (depending on your previous choices) but I can say this...
Yes, it's set in an apocalypse and trouble is coming, but regarding the main characters, they're changing to fit their new relationships. And your choices will either make it easier or difficult for them, but there's no sadism and the aim is to get the girls.

There are still some reveals on what you've seen so far, and hopefully you'll stick around to see them.

After this, I swear I'll do a straight-up sex romp.

You have demonstrated some narrative skill. It makes a pleasant change from the predictable fuck-fests that dominate this genre. It would be a shame to see you fall back to the pack.

I've already written one about an old haunted school, some teen ghost hunters and a watch that can stop time. Expect that to land in 2030.

I know that there's no accounting for taste, but I think that you're doing a good job. Best wishes!

 

[inkalicious]

Hi all,

Thanks for the comments and just wanted to say that I appreciate everyone's feedback and discussion on this. I enjoy talking things through, especially when it's around the different ways people see the same event.

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Uh-ho. Sam's face says it all.

I've done the math and I'll be a bit longer placing Chapter 4 in your sweaty hand. Hopefully a few more weeks.

Apart from the usual life stuff, the Chapter is a big larger, as I want to end it on a specific cliffhanger. A cliffhanger that sets the stage for a big change in everyone's circumstances.

 

[Nubatron]

Speaking of larger... is it just me, or Sam's breasts look slightly larger? Nothing wrong with that though.

 

[rf96]

Speaking of larger... is it just me, or Sam's breasts look slightly larger? Nothing wrong with that though.

New proteins in her diet.

 

[dirtyoldmanlol]

Everyone keeps saying "mother" isn't it a brother and his 2 sisters in this game? Oh and 2030 for your next game??? I might be dead by then

 

[jamdan]

Everyone keeps saying "mother" isn't it a brother and his 2 sisters in this game? Oh and 2030 for your next game??? I might be dead by then

Sam is the sister and Megan is the mom.


Although you can pretend they are whatever you want. I have been going with the idea that Sam/Meg are sisters and they found MC somewhere and he stayed with them. Makes sense in a zombie apocalypse IMO.

 

[Cooling Prob]

Everyone keeps saying "mother" isn't it a brother and his 2 sisters in this game? Oh and 2030 for your next game??? I might be dead by then

That's the way I play it...Mother feels weird to me. It's always felt like a sister sister brother thing to me. My sister is much older than I so maybe that plays into my thinking. The older sister bossing you around always on your case...Clean the house or it's your ass!!

 

[TomberryDude]

That's the way I play it...Mother feels weird to me. It's always felt like a sister sister brother thing to me. My sister is much older than I so maybe that plays into my thinking. The older sister bossing you around always on your case...Clean the house or it's your ass!!

TBF I'm going with the "incest patch", I don't even know what the relationships without it are outside of "not blood related and therefore the story makes no sense".

 

[strenif]

Wow. How did I not know about this game till now.

I download most anything with a Mom and daughter but add in zombies? I'd Insta sub to patreon if the dev allowed us to.

Not sure why their not accepting patrons anymore.

 

[Banish]

The dev right now can't really engage himself in the development of the game as he used to (IRL issue).
So, rather than make empty promises, delay and milking patreon, he decided to stop taking on new patreon and update as he can.

Tbf, even if you're a sponsor right now you can't even increase or decrease your pledge (sucks a bit i wanted to increase it but place are capped). But, yeah it's a great game with a nice setting, one of the game that deserves more attention.

 

[strenif]

agreed. Very well writen and good asset use.

Sorry the dev can't work on this full time. I would love to be able to support their work.

 

[inkalicious]

Everyone keeps saying "mother" isn't it a brother and his 2 sisters in this game? Oh and 2030 for your next game??? I might be dead by then

They're whoever you want them to be.
Dead? Don't say things like that. We're all going to live forever. Until VR has an interactive flesh suit and we can deep fake fuck whoever we like. Mmmmm. Daisy Duck...