RPGM Ren'Py Laura: Lustful Secrets [Ch.2 v0.3] [Dark Anu]

[ntrvip]

Nice update, loved the poker scene! Hope someone else than David get to fuck her soon (neighbour, her son, joe, poker guys)

 

[Dark Anu]

I realised Laura is a copy of the girl from Manila Shaw

Ha Ha Ha I love Manila but I think they just have the same haircut.

Dark Anu
Okay, played it and here is my critique, hopefully you can get something out of it:

I agree with Cleanfeel for the most part character writing wise. Whille we do not necessarilly need the characters to have some internal monologues telling us their dreams and ambitions every couple lines, they should be fleshed out more, they seem just there for sake of making things happen leaving you like "How???". In example, when FMC gets caught masturbating her deadbent decision that it was her son spying on her and never even thinking of the possibility it was anyone else was not believable and in my honest opionion kinda annoying since it drags on for a long time to boot. You should try the characters to feel a bit more organic, have in your head whats their goals, preferences, etc before you write the story that way even if these things aren't elaborated on too much the interactions still feel more fluid and real since they're already characterized in your head while writing.

Work on your grammar a bit, that will also help the writing be more digestible even at times where the events aren't realistic. Being able to coherently convey what is going on will make even nonsense seem like half sense, this alone will make a bit of a difference in your writing quality.

Another big negative in my opinion is the linear nature of the game. Don't get me wrong, I am in favor of it being a game easy to get through, its a fap not a competition, no reason to overcomplicate it. However the RPG ish nature of the game of you being able to walk around gives a lot of opportunities which the game neglects. You could have added "easter egg" situations where walking around and interacting with something at certain time will actually get you a new interaction or scene, like lets say if you went out with FMC and snooped behind the bar at certain point you could catch a guy getting a blowjob, or if you looked at the gym after certain point FMC could comment on her wondering if the guys are as big down there as they are in their other muscles which would also serve as exposition on FMC starting to "surrender" to her hidden lust. Little details like this would give much more value to the "interactive/explorable" world you have. At least where im up to I have found no such of these easter eggs despite being over halfway through and having interacted with a lot of things in the map, if you have added some then i'd suggest to add even more because the map def feels empty and unresponsive since as I mentioned I haven't really gotten anything extra worth notice despte my interactions.

Now here is a big prop I wanna give on a generally overlooked topic; FMC's friend is something you got right. Most games neglect to add that one friend which helps the FMC break their boundaries. This is a not rare relationship in real life friend circles where there is always that one guy/girl who is more uninhibited and tries to get their friends in on the craze too, and games centered on cheating or NTR are perfect scenarios to make use of these kind of characters. And you did use it, and used her effectively to boot she is a more cemented character than the main character, you can tell how shed interact with others or what her motivations are pretty easily. So props on that one and if you make another game I definetely suggest you do not drope this character archetype as it is benefitial for the narrative and you did it rather well here already imho.

Finally cleanfeel's ass complaint does seem goofy, but there is some merit to it too imho. It is not rather to not do asses like that, everyone has their own tastes after all and imo they dont look bad at all (and I believe majority would agree with me here lol). It is that there should be a bit more variety, pretty much all the girls have same ass type with the difference being its smaller or bigger depending if they're thinner or larger than FMC. I personally would recommend there be more than just 3 girls (in example, could of shown the Priest's wife when your friend was talking about him) and with more variety in proportions. I'd recommend The Office as a reference for huge asses like you like but that still give a bit of a different feel than the ones in your game.

The similarity in shape's aside, I actually do wanna praise your character design. They are some of the most mainstream attractive models which i've seen with this engine imo, only few like Pandora's Box and The Office have done notoriously better and it is evident they are working with more resources so you doing this much with less resources and experiences is still commendable.

You def have something going on, just work a bit more, analyze other games or series which youd like your own works to be more like, etc, and you will be able to make some great products.

I'm really glad that you have taken your time to evaluate my game deeply.
The game is composed of main (Laura's story) and secondary events (Map events), but you are free to walk all around the map and I intend to expand it more in the future, I will add events with street people and objects that can be triggered from the beginning of the game. So in the future in the future you will not need to follow only the linear path because you will have other side stories.

"In example, when FMC gets caught masturbating her deadbent decision that it was her son spying on her and never even thinking of the possibility it was anyone else was not believable and in my honest opionion kinda annoying since it drags on for a long time to boot."
A: The plan is create an event on the map for explains this, "James is a voyeur".

About writing, yes this is a pain in the ass for me. I have a lot of fun creating the story, creating scenes, retouching in photoshop, but when translating comes
I created a discord channel to help correct typos

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you are welcome if you want.

About the asses and shapes, I am learning new things and skills, I made a great friend recently, Amaziri, he is developer of the game MetF his characters are really amazing he created natural and very juicy bodies. He inspired me to create the older version of Laura's mommy.

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This is the first body outside my "standards" I intend to make other different body types.
I will take note of everything you say as I did with Cleanfeel, I can't promise to change it immediately as that is difficult but I promise to try.
It is really hard to make this game but I love the whole process (except translation). Thanks again for analyzing my game and helping me to make it better.

Cant open on MAC, im getting the "The Application "Game" Cant Be Opened" error

This works for some players and not for others, if someone knows how to make a decent RPGMMV Mac version please help me!!

in all these games where the husband gets cucked his wife is stunning and he is a fat balding 20+ years on his wife looking guy... are the devs compensating for their lack of literary ability or what? (trying to make it easy for the wife to betray)

Come on man, this game only has beautiful males.

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[ntrvip]

Ha Ha Ha I love Manila but I think they just have the same haircut.





I'm really glad that you have taken your time to evaluate my game deeply.
The game is composed of main (Laura's story) and secondary events (Map events), but you are free to walk all around the map and I intend to expand it more in the future, I will add events with street people and objects that can be triggered from the beginning of the game. So in the future in the future you will not need to follow only the linear path because you will have other side stories.

"In example, when FMC gets caught masturbating her deadbent decision that it was her son spying on her and never even thinking of the possibility it was anyone else was not believable and in my honest opionion kinda annoying since it drags on for a long time to boot."
A: The plan is create an event on the map for explains this, "James is a voyeur".

About writing, yes this is a pain in the ass for me. I have a lot of fun creating the story, creating scenes, retouching in photoshop, but when translating comes
I created a discord channel to help correct typos

You must be registered to see the links

you are welcome if you want.

About the asses and shapes, I am learning new things and skills, I made a great friend recently, Amaziri, he is developer of the game MetF his characters are really amazing he created natural and very juicy bodies. He inspired me to create the older version of Laura's mommy.

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This is the first body outside my "standards" I intend to make other different body types.
I will take note of everything you say as I did with Cleanfeel, I can't promise to change it immediately as that is difficult but I promise to try.
It is really hard to make this game but I love the whole process (except translation). Thanks again for analyzing my game and helping me to make it better.




This works for some players and not for others, if someone knows how to make a decent RPGMMV Mac version please help me!!




Come on man, this game only has beautiful males.

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In my opinion the asses are excellent in this game. Don't take it too seriously Dark Anu

But please don't remodel the bodies to be more like MetF, let them as they are

 

[Nemesiz691]

David

Again? Dot gonna be Joe or jack

 

[Ken2111]

Will there be incest?

 

[Hanzoh]

any1 else that cant see the phone in the hallway?

 

[trool22]

Imo, one of the least formuleic games, ie. its fresh and creative, it got "soul" i guess is another way of saying it, really good stuff. (sry for not being very deep about it )

edit: well, in the hope of somehow influencing someone, the daughter seems to get very little screentime, some interesting under dinner table BJ with panic spitting it out in Lauras coffee or something nonstandard like that? lol

 

[Darak098]

Again? Dot gonna be Joe or jack

Joe and David are alright, I could buy Julia cheating on her husband with either. i don't get the appeal of Jack, he looks like a Dark Souls boss and not a humanoid one. Plus, he's mentally challenged. Hope we have a chance to skip his content, I hate Ugly Bastard content

 

[DIRTY FILTHY Animal]

Love Laura’s body and definately her ass! Loved the beach scene with James staring at all 4 asses in his face, how he didn’t pop boner there. Also would like to see some choices for Laura to make.
It seems like everything is forced with her, no options to say No to Joe, he’s got a little bit of a rapey vibe to him.
Just think she should have the option who she wants to cheat with or maybe just handy but not sex.
right now it feels more like kinetic novel we’re just watching but if that’s what your patreons want then, anyway good luck dev

 

[Dark Anu]

Plzzz someone post

Can someone plzz post save file till ending of v0.7 plzz

The Save is inside the game folder Save1.

 

[Dark Anu]

any1 else that cant see the phone in the hallway?

To see the phone you need to collect Emma's Bath suit in the bathroom floor.

 

[DqnkSpeed]

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Overview:
This game is about a quiet suburban family who receive an unwanted visitor and his presence causes a sudden change in the family's behavior. The question is can a butterfly flapping its wings really cause a hurricane? Play as Laura a devoted wife and discover for yourself...​

Thread Updated: 2022-03-02
Release Date: 2022-03-02
Developer: Dark Anu

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Censored: No
Version: 0.8
OS: Windows
Language: English
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Start a new game or use the save file inside the game folder to avoid errors and bugs.

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Extras: Guide/Walkthrough - Spanish Translation* - Portuguese Translation* - Skip intro mod* - Wallpapers

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Does anyone know where the saves location folder is in the android port of androidmo (porno island)?I cant find it anywhere and I srsly dont want to start again.

 

[dawgue]

i like the game, and i liked Laura starting at the beginning, but now i can't stand her...i just hope Sam get some closure, by catching her cheating with David, Joe, or whoever..he deserves more than that..Laura cheats on him multiple times, just as her mom cheated on her father; you'd think she would have broken that cycle--i hope he catches her and don't end up as a cuck as in most games, but i would love to see him fuck someone else, and better yet, kick Laura's sorry hoe ass to the curb!! Overall good game just feel bad for Sam..

 

[Twelvemonkey]

Does anyone know where the saves location folder is in the android port of androidmo (porno island)?I cant find it anywhere and I srsly dont want to start again.

They don't have it unless you root your phone. That's why you have to play the windows version with JoiPlay app, especially for rpgm games.

 

[DqnkSpeed]

They don't have it unless you root your phone. That's why you have to play the windows version with JoiPlay app, especially for rpgm games.

Yeah I tried the game on joiplay it works but Importing save doesn't.

 

[DqnkSpeed]

They don't have it unless you root your phone. That's why you have to play the windows version with JoiPlay app, especially for rpgm games.

I went to the lls windows version extracted folder after i ran it > www > save folder > tried both extracting the save file zip which came with the app or downloading a random save file from here and moving it but when I open the game there is no load option.

 

[Moricano]

Developer: Dark Anu

Women's bodies were horrible my friend, if you intended to put girls with big asses this is quite common in games, but you need to have a good idea of a curve and something upturned. It seems that a lot of silicone was put on the bodies, it was horrible, very pointless story. Sorry for the criticism, but it's a criticism to improve.
Looks at a big full body with good curves to look at.

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[IXL]

IS there a way to reduce screensize? I cannot get it to play without a full screen mode?

 

[Twelvemonkey]

Yeah I tried the game on joiplay it works but Importing save doesn't.

I went to the lls windows version extracted folder after i ran it > www > save folder > tried both extracting the save file zip which came with the app or downloading a random save file from here and moving it but when I open the game there is no load option.

No, something must have gone wrong on your end. I'm using JoiPlay since the first release of the game, and i can transfer all the save files just fine.

 

[FookU2]

No way to change screen size, and no way to exit the game without using CTL+ALT+DEL and Task Manager...